Audrey Haick Poet Rhyme

No Comment

T’ was a lovely summer morn; I was feeling as fresh as dew
I grabbed my cup of coffee and settled down to read a few
Going down the list, favorites are always first choice
So, down the list I scrolled, absorbing, and to each one gave voice
Then I stalled.. glanced a title both interesting and mysterious
Took a sip of my coffee as I became more curious
Presuming it'd be fun to read; how it would compliment the weather
So I settled in my comfy chair feeling light as a feather
As I read the poem, once..and then again, I gave up feeling lost!
Disconnected from the title, the stanzas were as frost!
It ruined the warmth I felt, that would have matched the day
Feeling robbed I was speechless, there was nothing to say
As I turned the page with a click, I had a mind to vent
Instead, I simply moved along not leaving a coment!

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Timothy Hicks March 24, 2013 at 10:07 AM Very cool narrative-like poem. Sometimes I read something and become unexpectedly in awe... and by not leaving a comment I expect the author to feel like it wasn't that good. When in fact it's just the opposite... it left me speechless! But I know you're talking about "being offended"... I try to be open-minded about most things but it goes without saying you'll SOMEDAY find something which is appalling to your nature.

Sara Kendrick November 9, 2010 at 1:30 PM Congratulations on your win..Sara

James Fraser November 9, 2010 at 1:21 PM I rarely have been offended by any of the writes I have commented on. There are certain poems that I steer clear of for my own reasons. But I know where your coming from Audrey. You have captured a situation that many face on any writing site. Many congratulations on your most deserved win >> James :)

Francine Roberts November 9, 2010 at 9:15 AM I agree with you Audrey, I just move on if it upsets or offends me, can always find hundreds of beautiful ones instead that are worth the comment , like this one, great job, congrats on your win

Barbara Gorelick November 9, 2010 at 9:11 AM Congrats Audrey on your success in the contest with this views on the subject. BG

Carol Sunshine Brown November 9, 2010 at 7:49 AM Congratulations on your win in HG's Contest Audrey. Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart November 9, 2010 at 4:49 AM Congrats Audrey on your HM in HG's contest on comments and views my friend.. a wonderfully written piece for your entry ..now enjoy a special honor all your own with lots of luv...

Rinki Nandy November 8, 2010 at 9:42 AM It happens to all, doesn't it? Such writes are either disturbing, way too high of expectations or simply a poem. And thank you for your gracious remarks on i..love you and thank you for your consideration and letting me the oppurtunity to be on the list...Regards..Rinki.

Michael Gelb October 30, 2010 at 3:22 PM Nice poem. And thank you for commenting on my poem.

Sara Kendrick October 29, 2010 at 12:47 PM Good luck in the contest with one more reason not to comment on a work..I am glad that chose this one to read this afternoon..Thanks for visiting my work.."Intervened"...It was writtened in resonse to a song called "Intervene" performed by a Christian group...I just felt lead to write it..Once we accept Jesus as our Savior we realize that we were chained, bound , trapped, in a pit of despire..Sometimes people realize that before and that is the reason that they seek a Savior..Sara

Sarah Hales October 29, 2010 at 11:40 AM aww you missed me sweet one ...x i have moved hse only just got back on here so all has been too busy i will be bk more next week cant get rid of me that quick ..and no i am not getting married ha ha ha i just had to write about it for some reason you know when you can see the picture i can see it in the snow strange hey x love sarah x

Carolyn Devonshire October 29, 2010 at 9:58 AM This happens so often, Audrey. When I can't leave a positive comment or some constructive criticism after rereading a poem several times, I am compelled to move on. I ALWAYS get the meaning in your poetry! This is a great entry for the contest and I hope you find a way to break out of the blues, dear. Sometimes doing yardwork helps me. Love, Carolyn Soup mail in a moment.

Carol Sunshine Brown October 28, 2010 at 11:45 AM I am just starting to read today and I must say there are some exceptional poems posted. Glad yours was included in my reading today Audrey. The best to you in the contest should you enter this one :) . Love, Carol

Wilma Neels October 28, 2010 at 7:06 AM Audrey, I was looking over your shoulder while you were reading that *silly poem* of mine, least I know which one you were refering to :) excellent entry for the contest. Good luck to you.. Hope your week's has not been as rushed as mine was.. Enjoy what's left of your Thursday, love Wilma

C.C Bloomsfield October 28, 2010 at 3:34 AM It seems as if you've read something which brought you pain dear Audrey..May we all bring joy to one another with the talent that God lent us. .and smile dear,you are loved by many here. .and if Ruben writes about bad weather,its about me,lol,saw his comment and made me smile :)Hugs Celene.

Harry Horsman October 28, 2010 at 12:58 AM hi Audrey i'm fine thank you. could be my poem? i'm very negative when writing, i like this one of yours, awesome actually, good luck in contest. Harry

Joy Wellington October 27, 2010 at 7:17 PM My dear friend...if this is a true-to-life experience, I would just say, move past it and write as you have done. Well done, this piece, as always. Thanks for your congrats and the same to you on your win. Luv Joy (Jew)

Dr.Ram Mehta October 27, 2010 at 5:24 PM You are right as the comments are concerned, Audrey

Deb Wilson October 27, 2010 at 5:18 PM Often that's the kindest thing to do is leave no comment! Very well written and I completely agree!take care~Deb

John Rhinem October 27, 2010 at 4:49 PM Smile ~ Begging to be addressed although perhaps again, those are the ones which should be walked away from especially when there is sooo very much that, could possibly amid the end of All things be at stake!? ~ "Great Poe" ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You Always' &, All You Love," John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very 'Blessed & Beautiful' Evening 'My Dear, Precious & Priceless, Audrey Carey;'" Bye!:) ~

John Rhinem October 27, 2010 at 4:41 PM Smile ~ Not all poes, poets or poetess' are going to be of One accord or view within many ways & for countless reasons thus, "Yes," sifting through the wheat so to speak to find the perfect mixture of poetic purpose is a must which need be met if, prosperities of something or another are to ever perhaps be born & or held....But, also, certain material is just ~ ....Cont:)

John Rhinem October 27, 2010 at 4:32 PM Smile ~ "Hello, 'Dear Lovely & Precious Audrey Carey!!!'" ~ Hope that "Your Beauty" is doing well my dear &, interesting to read such a light-filled poe I believe from "Your Gifted Pen" for, not very long ago I was considering my own coms upon certain writers here at the Soup & even more so because of my ultimate understanding that as "Your Splendours" have nicely alluded amid this piece that ~ ....Cont:)

Sena Slaughter October 27, 2010 at 3:48 PM Very nicely written! I make it a point to only comment on poetry I like. Not that the poet or the poetry is bad, but each of us has our own distinct taste.

Eamon Duffin October 27, 2010 at 3:46 PM Hi Audrey Thanks for your comment on my work. Deborah Guzzi asked me to write something from Ireland in dialect. I love 'No Comment' as I often feel that way, being new writing. How different each of us find things that please us. You should send this to every member. Thanking you. Eamon