Nip In the Air

Winter sets in all around
Sun is soft and birds joyous 
Your silky soft songs in air
In a cool prayer

An illusion of soft peace
Enveloping pains and wounds
No sign of vandal or hoon
Moon in the prayer

You come so beautifully
In my green leaves and pink buds
They seek blue sounds in the blood 
Sun melting in air

The nip in the air is nice 
Warm words are born of your love
Like the black and white poems
Inside wings of doves
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8/11/2016
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Daniel Avatar
November 9, 2016 at 7:36 AM
I can feel it, very beautifully presented, Probir:)
Gupta Avatar
November 9, 2016 at 9:39 AM
Thank you for the appreciation ...
Chung Avatar
November 8, 2016 at 10:37 PM
Delightful imagery!
Gupta Avatar
November 9, 2016 at 6:30 AM
Thank you ...
Flower Avatar
November 8, 2016 at 12:54 PM
Great dodoitsu you have here. Keep on it!
Trifiatis Avatar
November 8, 2016 at 7:12 AM
Masterfully painted imagery dear friend, Probir!
Gupta Avatar
November 8, 2016 at 7:26 AM
Thank you ...
Kannan Avatar
November 8, 2016 at 6:35 AM
Great imagery... The form is new to me.You did a great job... I loved it..Thanks for sharing this great piece... A big 7...
Gupta Avatar
November 8, 2016 at 7:27 AM
Thank you ...
Logan Avatar
November 7, 2016 at 11:32 PM
Hi, I like this poem but would like to humbly offer some suggestions. First verse: Their instead of Your. Drop In. Third verse: drop They.
Gupta Avatar
November 8, 2016 at 4:39 AM
Thank you so much ... If I substitute 'their' for 'your', the target object or person, as a reader may interpret, that I indicate by the pronoun 'you ', will be lost ... the very mystic sense will evaporate ... for the same reason, nor can 'in' be dropped ... if 'they' is dropped in the third verse, the subject will get confused... There is an invisible 'you' in the poem ...
Stover Avatar
November 7, 2016 at 11:07 PM
I haven't read a poem that embodies such pure beauty in a long time. I'm glad I came across your wonderful poem.
Gupta Avatar
November 7, 2016 at 11:09 PM
I am honoured ... Thank you ...
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