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Nip In the Air

Winter sets in all around Sun is soft and birds joyous Your silky soft songs in air In a cool prayer An illusion of soft peace Enveloping pains and wounds No sign of vandal or hoon Moon in the prayer You come so beautifully In my green leaves and pink buds They seek blue sounds in the blood Sun melting in air The nip in the air is nice Warm words are born of your love Like the black and white poems Inside wings of doves ________________________________________ 8/11/2016

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Date: 11/9/2016 7:36:00 AM
I can feel it, very beautifully presented, Probir:)
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/9/2016 9:39:00 AM
Thank you for the appreciation ...
Date: 11/8/2016 10:37:00 PM
Delightful imagery!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/9/2016 6:30:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/8/2016 12:54:00 PM
Great dodoitsu you have here. Keep on it!
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Date: 11/8/2016 7:12:00 AM
Masterfully painted imagery dear friend, Probir!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/8/2016 7:26:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/8/2016 6:35:00 AM
Great imagery... The form is new to me.You did a great job... I loved it..Thanks for sharing this great piece... A big 7...
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/8/2016 7:27:00 AM
Thank you ...
Date: 11/7/2016 11:32:00 PM
Hi, I like this poem but would like to humbly offer some suggestions. First verse: Their instead of Your. Drop In. Third verse: drop They.
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Date: 11/8/2016 4:39:00 AM
Thank you so much ... If I substitute 'their' for 'your', the target object or person, as a reader may interpret, that I indicate by the pronoun 'you ', will be lost ... the very mystic sense will evaporate ... for the same reason, nor can 'in' be dropped ... if 'they' is dropped in the third verse, the subject will get confused... There is an invisible 'you' in the poem ...
Date: 11/7/2016 11:07:00 PM
I haven't read a poem that embodies such pure beauty in a long time. I'm glad I came across your wonderful poem.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 11/7/2016 11:09:00 PM
I am honoured ... Thank you ...

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