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Nessie Dreads Going Back

His slender serpentine neck, silently sliced through the surface tension, sending ripples stirring in the calm waters of Loch Ness, He was jittery; leery of being seen. But, a pudgy-faced moon spun its light into a ribbon of golden filigree that shimmered, and danced across the waves. Its beauty was such that he just had to see it for himself. The air tickled his nose, sending small puffs of mist into the air with each snort, and it made him look like a dragon, belching smoke. He knew he couldn't stay more than a few moments, before he had to submerge to breathe through his gills; or choke. But it is all worth it, to see the stars sparkling like jewels in a sky of ebony. His limpid eyes drank in the beauty of the night, in his world of inky blacks and murky grays his species evolved exceptional eyesight. His head breaching the surface of the water, entered an alien world, where magic exists. He hears a commotion along the shore; people point in his direction, and he knows he needs to disappear. But, it's so beautiful above the water, that Nessie dreads going back to the depths from whence he came. (Free Verse) 03/30/2017
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Gauthier Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 1:36 PM
Awesome, Emile. A beautiful tale.
Pinet Avatar
May 23, 2018 at 5:19 PM
Thanks Line, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
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April 30, 2017 at 2:11 AM
Gorgeous! Congratulations on your win Emile :) 7's xomo!
Pinet Avatar
April 30, 2017 at 8:08 AM
Thanks Maureen, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile
Roper Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 4:47 PM
Wonderful, Emile, congratulations on your great win ~*
Pinet Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 5:41 PM
Thanks Eve, your comments are welcome and your support is appreciated, Emile.
Smith Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 10:13 AM
Beautifully told Emile, congratulations...
Pinet Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 12:33 PM
Thanks so much Charlie, I appreciate your support, Emile.
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April 28, 2017 at 10:05 AM
Hi, Emile. Congrats to you for your podium win in the 'mythological creature' contest! I enjoyed your well-written poem! You and I were thinking alike in our choice of creatures! 7 Sandra
Pinet Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 12:39 PM
Thanks Sandra, well I guess it takes more than one Nessie to keep the population going... I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
Wood Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 8:32 AM
Now that is fun! Thanks for sharing your talent Emile!
Pinet Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 8:40 AM
Thanks Dean, I appreciate your support, Emile.
Ward Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 2:22 AM
Thank you for this charming entry into my contest. It has won you second place, so well done, Emile!
Pinet Avatar
April 28, 2017 at 8:32 AM
Thanks Julia, for your kind words, it was my pleasure to participate in your contest with such talented poets, Emile.
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March 30, 2017 at 8:58 PM
I really enjoyed your wonderful description from Nessie's perspective, Emile.
Pinet Avatar
March 31, 2017 at 8:53 AM
Thank you Agnes, your comments are most appreciated, Emile.
Ball Avatar
March 30, 2017 at 4:24 PM
Love this story Emile. It depicts the creature as just what he is. An animal that is very rare and unseen for the most part. A wise creature that keeps to himself and stays away from Mankind. Really good imagery here. Loved it. God Bless and a big 7 from me. JB
Pinet Avatar
March 31, 2017 at 8:52 AM
Thank you so much Judy, your comments are appreciated, Emile.
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March 30, 2017 at 12:06 PM
Such an enchanting and mesmerizing piece of writing. There is something so mystical about Nessie and those who have had the opportunity to see her and now I get to look at things from her point of view. (I am assuming it is a her) Your descriptive phrasing and as magical as the creature you write about. You should enter this in the Mythical Creature Contest.
Pinet Avatar
March 30, 2017 at 12:18 PM
Thanks Chris, your comments have brought a smile to my day, Emile.
Callus Avatar
March 30, 2017 at 11:15 AM
A creative and lovely poem, Emile. The temptation to explore and enjoy the outside world is too strong to resist...yet, it could be it's undoing! Regards // paul
Pinet Avatar
March 30, 2017 at 12:19 PM
Thanks so much Paul, as always my friend, I appreciate your visits, Emile.
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March 30, 2017 at 9:13 AM
Emile, this is an enchanting piece exquisitely crafted! I don't want it to disappear into the Soup again so I'm putting it in my favorites:) A 7 Amitiés
Pinet Avatar
March 30, 2017 at 10:25 AM
Thank you so much Anne-Marie, your comments have touched my heart and left me with a warm feeling, Emile.
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