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His slender serpentine neck, silently sliced through the surface tension, sending ripples stirring in the calm waters of Loch Ness, He was jittery; leery of being seen. But, a pudgy-faced moon spun its light into a ribbon of golden filigree that shimmered, and danced across the waves. Its beauty was such that he just had to see it for himself. The air tickled his nose, sending small puffs of mist into the air with each snort, and it made him look like a dragon, belching smoke. He knew he couldn't stay more than a few moments, before he had to submerge to breathe through his gills; or choke. But it is all worth it, to see the stars sparkling like jewels in a sky of ebony. His limpid eyes drank in the beauty of the night, in his world of inky blacks and murky grays his species evolved exceptional eyesight. His head breaching the surface of the water, entered an alien world, where magic exists. He hears a commotion along the shore; people point in his direction, and he knows he needs to disappear. But, it's so beautiful above the water, that Nessie dreads going back to the depths from whence he came. (Free Verse) 03/30/2017

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Date: 5/23/2018 1:36:00 PM
Awesome, Emile. A beautiful tale.
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Date: 5/23/2018 5:19:00 PM
Thanks Line, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Date: 4/30/2017 2:11:00 AM
Gorgeous! Congratulations on your win Emile :) 7's xomo!
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Date: 4/30/2017 8:08:00 AM
Thanks Maureen, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile
Date: 4/28/2017 4:47:00 PM
Wonderful, Emile, congratulations on your great win ~*
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Date: 4/28/2017 5:41:00 PM
Thanks Eve, your comments are welcome and your support is appreciated, Emile.
Date: 4/28/2017 10:13:00 AM
Beautifully told Emile, congratulations...
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Date: 4/28/2017 12:33:00 PM
Thanks so much Charlie, I appreciate your support, Emile.
Date: 4/28/2017 10:05:00 AM
Hi, Emile. Congrats to you for your podium win in the 'mythological creature' contest! I enjoyed your well-written poem! You and I were thinking alike in our choice of creatures! 7 Sandra
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Date: 4/28/2017 12:39:00 PM
Thanks Sandra, well I guess it takes more than one Nessie to keep the population going... I appreciate your support my friend, Emile.
Date: 4/28/2017 8:32:00 AM
Now that is fun! Thanks for sharing your talent Emile!
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Date: 4/28/2017 8:40:00 AM
Thanks Dean, I appreciate your support, Emile.
Date: 4/28/2017 2:22:00 AM
Thank you for this charming entry into my contest. It has won you second place, so well done, Emile!
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Date: 4/28/2017 8:32:00 AM
Thanks Julia, for your kind words, it was my pleasure to participate in your contest with such talented poets, Emile.
Date: 3/30/2017 8:58:00 PM
I really enjoyed your wonderful description from Nessie's perspective, Emile.
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Date: 3/31/2017 8:53:00 AM
Thank you Agnes, your comments are most appreciated, Emile.
Date: 3/30/2017 4:24:00 PM
Love this story Emile. It depicts the creature as just what he is. An animal that is very rare and unseen for the most part. A wise creature that keeps to himself and stays away from Mankind. Really good imagery here. Loved it. God Bless and a big 7 from me. JB
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Date: 3/31/2017 8:52:00 AM
Thank you so much Judy, your comments are appreciated, Emile.
Date: 3/30/2017 12:06:00 PM
Such an enchanting and mesmerizing piece of writing. There is something so mystical about Nessie and those who have had the opportunity to see her and now I get to look at things from her point of view. (I am assuming it is a her) Your descriptive phrasing and as magical as the creature you write about. You should enter this in the Mythical Creature Contest.
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Date: 3/30/2017 12:18:00 PM
Thanks Chris, your comments have brought a smile to my day, Emile.
Date: 3/30/2017 11:15:00 AM
A creative and lovely poem, Emile. The temptation to explore and enjoy the outside world is too strong to resist...yet, it could be it's undoing! Regards // paul
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Date: 3/30/2017 12:19:00 PM
Thanks so much Paul, as always my friend, I appreciate your visits, Emile.
Date: 3/30/2017 9:13:00 AM
Emile, this is an enchanting piece exquisitely crafted! I don't want it to disappear into the Soup again so I'm putting it in my favorites:) A 7 Amitiés
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Date: 3/30/2017 10:25:00 AM
Thank you so much Anne-Marie, your comments have touched my heart and left me with a warm feeling, Emile.

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