Nature Foursome

~a sea gull’s swift flight
      over waves, shadow as kite 
         last catch before night 

~choppy waves reflect
      birds of sea by light inspect
         dead fishes’ bisect

~shad fish seek cover
      fish schools shield each the other
         surrogate mother

~ocean waves relent
      light of day energy spent
         sea smells of salt scent 

For and in honor of Carol Brown
And contest: What’s The Buzz
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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March 11, 2011 at 8:06 AM
Congrats john on your well deserved win !Enjoyed your Haiku---kashinath
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March 10, 2011 at 3:54 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
George   Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 12:05 PM
Beautiful vivid images conveyed in this sensational haiku sequence, John.Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie
Aul Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 11:58 AM
Congrats on the win in the contest......George
Neels Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 10:46 AM
Hey John, congratulations on your worthy 2nd place win with this awesome foursome in Carol's contest, blessings Wilma
Horne Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 10:29 AM
Thanks, John and congrats to you too : ) Jack. This poem is beautiful.
Devonshire Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 9:23 AM
I must have missed this while I was out of town, John. How cool that we both chose to write about the sea. Your imagery is so vividly. I love all the verses, especially the one about the fish schools shielding each other as "surrogate mothers." Congratulations on your win, my friend! Love, Carolyn
Brown Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 6:14 AM
Congratulations on the win in my contest John Moses. Thank you for supporting my contest. Love, Carol
Mannan Avatar
March 10, 2011 at 12:09 AM
many congrats dear friend.
Gorelick Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 8:05 PM
Congrats on your win with this trip to the ocean...I can smell it...BG
Dufresne Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 5:06 PM
congrats to you JOHN nice to see this one in no 2 spot!
Johnson Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 3:53 PM
Nicely done. One leads right into the other. Congratulations on no. 2. Love, Joyce
Richards Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 3:45 PM
A great foursome haiku....your poem gives me a longing to spend a day at the ocean, and smell the salt sea air....Wonderful poems...each one!! Congratulations, John!
Onclaud Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 2:43 PM
go john! love this interesting piece.. one big long APPLAUSE! ;) huggs. nette
Sweetheart Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 2:26 PM
Congrats Moses on your super cool win in Carol's contest my friend with this expressive entry so inspiring.. enjoy another top ten luv..
Dietrich Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 2:03 PM
NIcely done ocean set of haiku there, john. I enjoyed it. Congratulations.
Mehta Avatar
March 9, 2011 at 1:52 PM
Congratulations on the second place win in the contest of Carol, john
Fraser Avatar
March 8, 2011 at 11:52 AM
Wonderful Haiku series capturing the sea and some of it's gems. Good luck in Carol's contest. I have a funny feeling she'll love this one. Have a lovely day....:) smiles
Greenlee Avatar
March 8, 2011 at 8:13 AM
that is so beautiful.
Babcock Avatar
March 1, 2011 at 7:56 AM
A wonderful series of Haiku John. I love the ocean and anything written about it. I have never tried to rhyme Haiku so will have to give it a try sometimes. God Bless Phyl
La France Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 10:16 PM
Just beautiful John, I am really liking the rhyming haiku, actually, I find them a bit more difficult to write, best of luck~~
Mannan Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 10:09 PM
Love this foursome of yours. all the very best.
Roberts Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 9:08 PM
wonderful set of haikus, best of luck in the contest John
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