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For Edward Ibeh's This or That volume 23 poetry contest

17 February 2024

 

 

 

In the narrow margin between life and death, I feel as I'm walking a tightrope - but balancing. I'm a portrayal of metaphors, illuminating like spring's moon, who sunk like winter sunset, but arose like summer sunrise - my last breath an autumnal leaf. What is life but a blank canvas of expectations.. Time is an enemy of a poet's existence, death an end to battles with illusive ink, where a resonance of reflections, mirror window-winged moths of memories, which erase and rewind yesterday's tunes, composing a butterfly massacre of consciousness. I'm tired from inhaling and exhaling expression, when the other half of my sanity strums strings of sombre sounds of paranoia, resembling psycho motions inside a cocoon. Yesterday, I was seduced by sinister shadows, with frigid breaths haunting like black chilling spectres. My solitude became a sanctuary full of shattered shards, sheltering souls from synonyms of stolen secrets, protecting them from the thesaurus of thieves. Life is like an eclipse, cleansing sins of the sulfuric sun. When it tried to abandon me, I fought back the tears I never cried. Adrift in the mists of misunderstanding, lost in a valley of melancholic mountains, re-enacting unspoken stories of a forsaken flower, I planted seeds from pigments of an Autumn rainbow. Hoping destiny would light up this emptiness. Today, I've discovered soothing words. Nourished my garden into an archetypal vision, where champagne clouds in scarlet skies intoxicate the senses in emerald meadows. I sit on a throne of sapphire sepals, listening to sounds of whispering waves kissing coral dreams, but I'm persecuted by liars resembling lunar lanterns, who hide their wicked schemes behind halos. I'm submerged in rose water, but not drowning, trying to grab onto untouched blossoms of devotion. If truth was an instrument, then I would be free from wrath, not a prisoner liberating petal hearts through poetic justice, releasing waterfalls flowing into a lake of tears. Although my muse rests in a glass casket, you cannot prevent a poet from personifying pain. It comes alive once twilight moves out of sight. Needing no guidance upon paths of darkness, flashing like lightning between broken lines of thunder. But in every storm there is suffering. There are no winners nor losers in this emotional race we call humanity. Poetry tried to say goodbye with an envelope of empty words - yet I'm still the voice behind silent sonnets. When fate dilutes my pen and there is no ink, my veins burst, bleeding in vivid verses, but I remain content - no longer seeking. I need no legacy nor identity. I would rather portray a blank page, than gain a reputation for popularity. Life can cremate me into ashes, like an unremembered memory, but time after time I'll be reborn from wildfires - continuing to build bridges that connect words.

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Date: 4/14/2024 12:12:00 PM
Wow. Wow. Wow. Keep writing though there is no ink in the well. Keep building bridges when there is only the chasm. You remind me of Ben Franklin, a key between the kite and heavens in the storm.
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Date: 4/11/2024 12:45:00 PM
Wow! Congrats on being #1 of top 100 poems!
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Date: 4/7/2024 7:27:00 AM
SO, congratulations on being on the best poems of the week. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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Date: 3/29/2024 3:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem being at the top of hundred popular poems. "When fate dilutes my pen and there is no ink, my veins burst, bleeding in vivid verses," - my favourite lines in this poem. I am in awe at the depth, vocabulary, poetic devices, intriguing thoughts expressed in each and every line. " a sanctuary full of shattered shards, sheltering souls from synonyms of stolen secrets," - what a stunning alliteration!
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Date: 3/26/2024 8:33:00 PM
Wow!! Congratulations on topping the 100 new best poems with this mind blowing masterpiece S.O. This is a fave also!
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Date: 3/17/2024 7:33:00 PM
Congrats. I agree, my fav line is "I need no legacy nor identity. I would rather portray a blank page." You are like a key strung up between a kite and those below in a lightning storm. Electrifying!
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Date: 3/10/2024 7:42:00 PM
Hi SO, I so loved the style of this poem I tried to emulate (feeble attempt, though) that I just wrote one and submitted it here. Thanks for the model of this.
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Date: 3/8/2024 8:05:00 AM
I found this poem captured the true loneliness of poets who see the world through all its disguises
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John Hamilton
Date: 3/15/2024 1:06:00 PM
Well said Frederic!
Date: 3/4/2024 8:34:00 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest with this magnificent poem, SO. Vivid imagery throughout! It's a fave for me.
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Date: 3/2/2024 5:27:00 PM
Very Nice additioin to my Fave's, Silent One--Aloha, William
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Date: 3/1/2024 7:53:00 PM
"What is life but a blank canvas of expectations.." - Highly thought-provoking. The entire poem is beautifully written.
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Date: 3/1/2024 8:03:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What an opening, middle, great ending. I enjoyed reading it more than once. "Love It" FAV... Have a great/blessed day with your win.....................
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Date: 2/29/2024 9:49:00 AM
Hearty congratulations on your win dear friend SO, it's a pleasure to share with you the podium. Blessings
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Date: 2/21/2024 7:50:00 AM
Ah this, right here is the definition of intense and profound truth, woven in such a philosophical manner! I love the flow and wordplay and how youv written so many lines in this truly stood out for me.especially the opening lines were soul hitting! “ I'm a portrayal of metaphors, illuminating like spring's moon, who sunk like winter sunset, but arose like summer sunrise - my last breath an autumnal leaf.“ wow! Im speechless reading that! The creativeness! So artistic! “ those last lines were
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Ink Empress
Date: 2/21/2024 7:52:00 AM
So accurate and so true! “ releasing waterfalls flowing into a lake of tears. Although my muse rests in a glass casket, you cannot prevent a poet from personifying pain.” Couldnt have said it any better! This poem is one of those one would read and be in awe captivated by the impeccable flow and depth of your thoughts and diction! Brilliant! Fave it is
Date: 2/19/2024 4:12:00 AM
My friend. No words from me can describe the brilliance of this powerful, yet beautiful masterpiece. This one rivals as one of the best poems I've read. A most favorite of favorites, Silent One.
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Date: 2/18/2024 2:40:00 PM
I'm glad you are here to remind us to enjoy every day. I am also glad you write about death as well. It's a subject that many find very difficult. You are not afraid of anything.
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Date: 2/18/2024 2:34:00 PM
Dear Silent One, Your poem has great depth that transcends the boundaries of mere words. In the narrow margin between life and death, you navigate the complexities of existence with grace and eloquence. Your portrayal of metaphors, shifting like the seasons, captures the essence of human experience in its rawest form. The imagery you conjure, from the spring's moon to the autumnal leaf, creates great emotions and reflections.
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Daniel Henry Rodgers
Date: 2/18/2024 2:35:00 PM
Time, indeed, emerges as both a companion and adversary in the poet's journey, while death looms as the ultimate reckoning with the ephemeral nature of life itself. Your verses pulsate with an intensity that echoes the struggles and triumphs of the creative soul. From the haunting shadows of yesterday to the soothing words of today, you traverse the landscapes of the mind with unwavering resilience. Amidst the chaos and solitude, you find solace in the power of words, constructing them into a body of truth and beauty that transcends the confines of mortality. Your commitment to authenticity, even in the face of uncertainty, is a testament to the enduring spirit of the poet. As you continue to forge your path through the realms of imagination and expression, may you find strength in the knowledge that your voice, your truth, will forever resonate in the hearts of those who dare to listen. With deepest admiration, Daniel
Date: 2/18/2024 6:55:00 AM
Dear Silent One, This is so deep I dare to comment on it. I adored the alliteration thru out though. It was so somberly soulful, this poet voice of yours is so powerful.
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Date: 2/18/2024 5:29:00 AM
This feels quite deep and splendidly poetic, SO--Time is an enemy of a poet's existence, death an end to battles with illusive ink, where a resonance of reflections, mirror window-winged moths of memories...
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Date: 2/18/2024 1:46:00 AM
What a wondrous poem filled with such artistic creativity. Dear S1 when faced with challenges, a true poet like you never stops creating. They don't crave fame or notoriety; they just want a blank page to pour their heart and soul into. Regardless of how life may try to bring them down, they always rise from the ashes, weaving together words to create connections that inspire and move us all. A fave as always ...Hugs
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Date: 2/17/2024 4:52:00 PM
What an evoking truth. I had goosebumps reading this. So many favourite lines; "What is life but a blank canvas of expectations" We wake up every day not knowing what life throws at us, we just expect and sometimes we draw. "resembling psycho motions inside a cocoon." I tried to picture a psychotic motion in my head, it would be too razz for anyone to phantom. "but I'm persecuted by liars resembling lunar lanterns."
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Tonye George
Date: 2/17/2024 4:53:00 PM
This piece has too many powerful weapons and metaphors that shook me. It's funny how we are indeed clapped back by people who come in as foxes, showing light but meaning darkness. "you cannot prevent a poet from personifying pain" Oh Silent, these words are filled with so much wisdom. This is all a poet knows how to do, interpret their agony on an ever-welcoming blank surface. I can't imagine a better piece for this contest, success
Date: 2/17/2024 4:29:00 PM
so much I want to say about your poem. First, your poetic talent and voice are incredible, a cut above the average for sure. Wonderful metaphors and meaningful imagery left me astounded. I especially liked: When fate dilutes my pen and there is no ink, my veins burst, bleeding in vivid verses, but I remain content - no longer seeking. I need no legacy nor identity. I would rather portray a blank page, than gain a reputation for popularity. Have to fave! Have a splendid weekend, Sara
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Date: 2/17/2024 2:04:00 PM
Margins may confine us...but they don't need... necessarily... to define us. An exemplary piece, S O.
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Date: 2/17/2024 9:37:00 AM
This is surely a fave for me... Your ink spills, not only poetry, but mystery, music, me.. When fate dilutes my pen and there is no ink, my veins burst, bleeding in vivid verses, God bless you kind soul, Love, Gina
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Date: 2/17/2024 9:16:00 AM
this reads like the forever poetic "margin call"....A FAVE......A DOUBLE FAVE....TWO BRAVOS AND A BOSTONIAN "WICKED PISSA".....too much in here to comment on but I shall have to review it several times to allow its depth to sink in...
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Silent One
Date: 2/18/2024 1:49:00 AM
Always know you comments are genuine, so that is a massive compliment... especially a Bostonian one... Thank you..

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