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For Janice Canerdy's Trimeric poetry contest.

According to Poetry soup and various other syllable counters, 'rhythms' has one syllable, whilst 'rhythm' has two.  I used 'rhythms' in this poem as one syllable.

 

 

Mystic Ways TRI

Beneath soft stars and moonlight rays,
I watch her dance without a care.
Her feet enchant in mystic ways,
as gusts entwine through her gold hair.

I watch her dance without a care.
Her passion lights up the night skies.
A blaze ignites within her eyes.

Her feet enchant in mystic ways.
With swirls and twirls she casts her spell.
In rhythms where angel spirits dwell.

As gusts entwine through her gold hair,
her shadow fades into the dark.
In my soul her light leaves its mark.

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Date: 2/1/2025 3:47:00 PM
Well crafted. Congratulations on your win, Silent.
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Date: 9/8/2024 1:38:00 AM
Very nice, well done.
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Date: 9/5/2024 1:19:00 PM
Congratulations on your podium finish, S1. You say that meter is not your forte, but the content of the poem definitely made up for it! Regards // paul
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Date: 9/4/2024 8:42:00 AM
Bravo!! I just love the flow of this form and your topic and words are perfect for this. I expected nothing less from such a talented poet. Congratulations! Xo
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Date: 9/3/2024 10:03:00 PM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 9/3/2024 11:35:00 AM
Nice one.
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Date: 9/2/2024 7:55:00 PM
Silent One, CONGRATULATIONS on your second-place win in my contest with this lovely, romantic piece. Judging was NOT easy! Janice
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Date: 9/3/2024 9:17:00 AM
Thank you Janice, pleasantly surprised, as meter is not my forte..
Date: 9/2/2024 5:49:00 PM
SO, it's wonderful to see beauty and share it with us. I hope you had a chance to thank this beautiful soul. I often think that we should give complements even though the performer may not have their hat out for a contribution. There is beauty and art everywhere for a true poet, which of course you are!!!
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Date: 9/2/2024 12:53:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Mystic Ways TRI" write. I love your line, "I watch her dance without a care." That is a true dancer. "Good Luck"  Have a wonderful day writing away..................
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Date: 9/2/2024 9:18:00 AM
"her shadow fades into the dark. In my soul her light leaves its mark." Love that!! Good luck in contest.
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Date: 9/2/2024 2:43:00 AM
This contest is now closed and I am sure it will place high.
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Date: 9/1/2024 5:09:00 PM
Dear silent one, im not here much as i am not feelng well but wanted to read you! My muse! Maybe get some inspiration! I cant help but as i read get the line “ Her feet enchant in mystic ways.” Out of my head! Its almost hypnotic, no, more like addictive and intriguing! Must be some beautiful feet! I think that line will catch the eyes of many! And the ending is deeply moving! Sometimes from a distance we watch seraphic silhouettes swirl! Gold hair and gusts rushing through them depicts something so metaphorical! gusts can pull so many to the dark side and as they leave, theres always a magical light that lingers! Your rhymes are perfect and rhythm is 2 syllables! Youv written a magical poem! So divine and had a spiritual touch to it too while it can also be perceived as poignant with a sense of longing flowing in eloquence! Llve this! Fave it is! Best wishes and sending you love and light always
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Date: 9/1/2024 4:55:00 PM
Very lovely- the rhyme was beautiful and enchanting
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