Myopic

Yellow pollen drifts converge,
adorn nude logs in gros point lace;
red veined, orange campfire strings glaze
blue-gray above my lover's face.

I succumb to reflected eyes,
greening hazel like wise old frogs,
feel black water breast swiftly swell
against a quickening white fog.

Swamped, rose-gold tinged moments,
rocking red boat danger portends;
I glimpse distorted, fear-gray image . . .
his eyes foolish and young again.

Copyright, July 29, 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 1/20/2018 10:32:00 AM
Delightfully beautiful and colourful imagery. Loved your winning poem. Congrats, Faye!
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Date: 1/20/2018 9:01:00 AM
Such lovely imagery and flow in your beautifully-written Quatrain, Faye. Congratulations on your nice placement on such a short list of winners. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/18/2018 4:43:00 PM
Oh, this is wonderful, Faye - I love everything about this, (my winner) ... so whimsical and tender, but full of unusual and fresh imagery! Congratulations on your win ... this is first for me! Blessings, friend! :-) <3
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Date: 1/18/2018 9:39:00 AM
Congratulations, Faye! ...Fran
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Date: 8/6/2014 10:28:00 PM
FAYE.. AWESOME WIN...PD
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Date: 8/5/2014 8:15:00 AM
Your flow is fluid and tone of expression balanced. Congrats to your well, deserved win Faye! ^_^ <3
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Date: 8/4/2014 1:13:00 PM
colorful! grats on your winner!
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Date: 8/4/2014 5:04:00 AM
Congrats...Sara
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Date: 8/4/2014 3:49:00 AM
This is absolutely LOADED with colors and vivid imagery...Every line is a true gem but if I had to pick a favorite it would be: "against a quickening white fog." and the last line? Well, I'm speechless...
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Date: 8/2/2014 8:22:00 AM
Faye, I love the way the last line almost startles the reader(at least this one) and leads to a tender smile. Congrats.
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Date: 8/2/2014 4:38:00 AM
'Short-sightedness' does not affect beautiful imagery at all!! Very well expressed and pleasant to read. Congrats, Faye on a lovely top win. // paul
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Date: 8/2/2014 1:54:00 AM
Great free verse imagery, Faye, it's no surprise at all that you scored so high!! Congratulations to you.
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Date: 8/2/2014 1:11:00 AM
Fabulous write Faye,, congrats on top win!
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Date: 8/1/2014 7:03:00 PM
Faye this is such a spectacular piece...Filled with imagery and metaphors.... Congrats Tim
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Date: 8/1/2014 6:50:00 PM
This poem rose to the occasion. Wonderfully well done. Congratulations.. Love, Joyce
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Date: 8/1/2014 5:12:00 PM
Oh wow.........the title first, just caught my attention, but the descriptions in every line are simply stunning! Not a line that falls flat! Kuddos to you, Faye.......it is my honor to share this place with you! :)Congratulations!
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Faye Gibson
Date: 8/1/2014 5:39:00 PM
Thank you, Carrie. It is a delight to share this win with you. Haven't had a chance to read yours or the others, but will do so soon. YAY!!!!!
Date: 8/1/2014 4:52:00 PM
this poem impressed me greatly as soon as I read it; it has everything I was looking for: imagery, striking description, original simile and metaphor, colour...congrats on your 1st place win in my contest! :)
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Faye Gibson
Date: 8/1/2014 5:38:00 PM
I am absolutely delighted with this win, Charlotte. I had entered another poem and pulled it after your update. Went to work and wrote this; thank you so much for appreciating this effort.
Date: 7/31/2014 1:14:00 PM
such a lovely detailed image of youth's charm, faye... i like this.. wow!.. huggs
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Date: 7/30/2014 8:19:00 AM
Very nice, Faye. I will read this a few more times so I can get the complete message. Pleasure to read, my friend.... Robert.....
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Date: 7/29/2014 12:23:00 PM
Ahhh foolish & young again - most men do keep that charming peter Pan self![great metaphors!] Light & Love
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