Myopic

Yellow pollen drifts converge,
adorn nude logs in gros point lace;
red veined, orange campfire strings glaze
blue-gray above my lover's face.

I succumb to reflected eyes,
greening hazel like wise old frogs,
feel black water breast swiftly swell
against a quickening white fog.

Swamped, rose-gold tinged moments,
rocking red boat danger portends;
I glimpse distorted, fear-gray image . . .
his eyes foolish and young again.

Copyright, July 29, 2014
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Gauthier Avatar
January 20, 2018 at 10:32 AM
Delightfully beautiful and colourful imagery. Loved your winning poem. Congrats, Faye!
Haight Avatar
January 20, 2018 at 9:01 AM
Such lovely imagery and flow in your beautifully-written Quatrain, Faye. Congratulations on your nice placement on such a short list of winners. Hugs, Sandra
Barden Avatar
January 18, 2018 at 4:43 PM
Oh, this is wonderful, Faye - I love everything about this, (my winner) ... so whimsical and tender, but full of unusual and fresh imagery! Congratulations on your win ... this is first for me! Blessings, friend! :-) <3
Grasso Avatar
January 18, 2018 at 9:39 AM
Congratulations, Faye! ...Fran
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August 6, 2014 at 10:28 PM
FAYE.. AWESOME WIN...PD
Kimathi Avatar
August 5, 2014 at 8:15 AM
Your flow is fluid and tone of expression balanced. Congrats to your well, deserved win Faye! ^_^ <3
Nance Avatar
August 4, 2014 at 1:13 PM
colorful! grats on your winner!
Kendrick Avatar
August 4, 2014 at 5:04 AM
Congrats...Sara
Ryerson Avatar
August 4, 2014 at 3:49 AM
This is absolutely LOADED with colors and vivid imagery...Every line is a true gem but if I had to pick a favorite it would be: "against a quickening white fog." and the last line? Well, I'm speechless...
Lawless Avatar
August 2, 2014 at 8:22 AM
Faye, I love the way the last line almost startles the reader(at least this one) and leads to a tender smile. Congrats.
Callus Avatar
August 2, 2014 at 4:38 AM
'Short-sightedness' does not affect beautiful imagery at all!! Very well expressed and pleasant to read. Congrats, Faye on a lovely top win. // paul
Dietrich Avatar
August 2, 2014 at 1:54 AM
Great free verse imagery, Faye, it's no surprise at all that you scored so high!! Congratulations to you.
A. Sharma Avatar
August 2, 2014 at 1:11 AM
Fabulous write Faye,, congrats on top win!
Smith Avatar
August 1, 2014 at 7:03 PM
Faye this is such a spectacular piece...Filled with imagery and metaphors.... Congrats Tim
Johnson Avatar
August 1, 2014 at 6:50 PM
This poem rose to the occasion. Wonderfully well done. Congratulations.. Love, Joyce
Richards Avatar
August 1, 2014 at 5:12 PM
Oh wow.........the title first, just caught my attention, but the descriptions in every line are simply stunning! Not a line that falls flat! Kuddos to you, Faye.......it is my honor to share this place with you! :)Congratulations!
Gibson Avatar
August 1, 2014 at 5:39 PM
Thank you, Carrie. It is a delight to share this win with you. Haven't had a chance to read yours or the others, but will do so soon. YAY!!!!!
Puddifoot Avatar
August 1, 2014 at 4:52 PM
this poem impressed me greatly as soon as I read it; it has everything I was looking for: imagery, striking description, original simile and metaphor, colour...congrats on your 1st place win in my contest! :)
Gibson Avatar
August 1, 2014 at 5:38 PM
I am absolutely delighted with this win, Charlotte. I had entered another poem and pulled it after your update. Went to work and wrote this; thank you so much for appreciating this effort.
Onclaud Avatar
July 31, 2014 at 1:14 PM
such a lovely detailed image of youth's charm, faye... i like this.. wow!.. huggs
Nehls Avatar
July 30, 2014 at 8:19 AM
Very nice, Faye. I will read this a few more times so I can get the complete message. Pleasure to read, my friend.... Robert.....
Guzzi Avatar
July 29, 2014 at 12:23 PM
Ahhh foolish & young again - most men do keep that charming peter Pan self![great metaphors!] Light & Love
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