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My Tears Still Fall

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Silent white snowflakes fall from the sky, shrouding the ground where you now lie I brush away flakes to reveal your name though it’s etched inside my heart, bitter tears start flowing You were born asleep, and never smiled nor opened your eyes of blue, I miss you so much my precious child So I whisper I love you Your hand and foot prints displayed in a silver frame are all that remain I cannot mask my heartbreak Life goes on; my tears still fall It’s all about four Contest Sponsored by Broken Wings 4/1/18

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/29/2018 5:53:00 PM

Jan, this is a well deserved win. It echoes the theme and style of Constance's preferred type of poetry. You did so well . Congrats!

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/29/2018 4:37:00 PM

Sadness is so deeply felt through your words in these four poetic forms, Jan. Congratulations on your 1st Place win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/29/2018 1:19:00 PM

So very sad. Congrats, Jan!

Artsieladie Sharon Donnelly

Date: 4/29/2018 8:45:00 AM

Such a deeply touching but very sad poem about a grief that never really goes away for those who've gone/are going through this extremely difficult experience, which you've captured well here, Jan. Congrats on your win my friend. :) hugs ~ Artsie xx

Constance La France

Date: 4/29/2018 8:43:00 AM

Jan, CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest with this sadly beautiful write. You told me once you are not good at writing sad, I beg to differ, you write sad perfectly, this one brought tears to my eyes, well done !

James Inman

Date: 4/29/2018 7:47:00 AM

Beautifully done Jan, a very smooth emotive read.

Jerry Hackett

Date: 4/29/2018 5:24:00 AM

Nice, even though I never lost a child it hits me hard, thank you. A most compelling topic.

Susan Gentry

Date: 4/29/2018 1:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your wonderful win with this heartfelt, painful poem. You captured and revealed the emotions and the 4 pieces came together without a flaw. Well done.

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 4/29/2018 1:04:00 AM

Congratulation, Jan on your win.

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/28/2018 10:26:00 PM

Back with congrats on your top win, Jan.

Eve Roper

Date: 4/28/2018 10:20:00 PM

Back with congratulations sweet lady ...

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/3/2018 4:51:00 PM

OMG! I saw the title, was scared to read, and my fears were justified: the heartbreak, the pathos. So Stirring!! We struggle to comprehend the mysteries of life and death, each one of us, as we shuffle onto and off of "this mortal coil," as the Bard phrased it. Absolutely awesome write, Jan, in the real sense of that word. Blessings, gw

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2018 4:59:00 PM

Thanks so much for your awesome feedback Gershon, I never know where my muse will take me I much prefer humour but I do pen the odd more serious poem it just depends on my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/2/2018 5:56:00 PM

A lovely poem for a sad occasion. Funny how we must sweep away so we might see the name. Something about the tactile touch and the eyes. Not to mention we don’t want to believe. Well done, sweet friend!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 6:00:00 PM

thanks for that lovely comment Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Fj Thomas

Date: 4/2/2018 3:14:00 PM

My goodness Jan just yesterday I read the obituary of a little stillborn boy and they described his blue eyes that took after his father's. It's as if you wrote this just for them.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 3:52:00 PM

oh gosh Shadow that is so so sad. I'm so sorry you can relate to this tragedy. Thankfully for me it's fiction but I know for some it's sad reality. I much prefer to write humour, but my muse takes me to different places and I just go with the flow but hopefully folks can see a different side to me with serious poems like this:-) hugs Jan xx

Niall Fulham

Date: 4/2/2018 8:25:00 AM

Hi Jan , the loss is heart breaking and always with you as you describe with such emotion :) beautiful write good luck in contest::))Hugs~~Niall

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 8:30:00 AM

Thanks Niall, I'm lucky its not a real event I've been through but sadly it has happened to people I know who have lost children both as babies but also as young adults:-( hugs Jan xx

Charles Messina

Date: 4/2/2018 8:18:00 AM

Hi Jan, what timing. My best friends son and daughter-in-law just lost their baby, Strangled by the umbilical cord just 2 days prior to giving birth. Great poem my dear friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 8:20:00 AM

I have tears reading your comment Charles, i can't think of anything more tragic than losing a child of any age:-( hugs jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/1/2018 9:17:00 PM

Great use of the contest forms in your sad poem, Jan - this reads like a winner to me.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 10:32:00 AM

Thanks so much Agnes:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 4/1/2018 9:09:00 PM

excellent , Jan ! luck in the contest! Happy Easter hugs eve!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 10:32:00 AM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

James Peranteau

Date: 4/1/2018 8:26:00 PM

Jan my dear poet, I know the loss of child....this write causes the heavy within mine torso...certainly a write I'll remember. Have a wonderful Spring love....Much love, james

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 11:37:00 AM

Thanks James I'm sorry you can relate to this from personal experience, its pure fiction for me. Hope you had a wonderful Easter:-) hugs jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/1/2018 5:31:00 PM

Heart wrenching, such a moving and lovely poem, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 11:38:00 AM

Thanks Line:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/1/2018 5:09:00 PM

There are no words to describe this kind of pain and love, and yet, you did. This is a mystical miracle, and I am pleased to say I know a woman who can write like this.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 11:39:00 AM

Thanks Caren, I have a very vivid imagination and thankfully this is fiction for me but i know sadly others can relate to it:-( hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/1/2018 4:50:00 PM

Such a lovely verse Jan, one cannot really understand what people in that situation are going through.It must be heartbteaking. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 11:39:00 AM

I can't begin to imagine the pain of losing a child of any age Tom:-( hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 4/1/2018 4:45:00 PM

beautifully written, jan, on such a sad topic. your poem is very touching...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/2/2018 11:40:00 AM

Thanks Ilene i prefer to write humour but my muse was having none of it:-( hugs jan xx