My Home

there's an ardent desire burnt upon the umbrage of my mind's deepest thoughts on fields of green i sit lost in the strokes of time's hands yearning to feel you like a whisper of wind as it twirls my hair in its gentle breath i long to strip layers of life that bind my heart in the torment that moans through the valley in heavy sighs i want to gambol like fragrant petals in summer's warm caress not suffocate on smokey breaths in winter's colorless drab i suspire beneath mist of dusk laden upon my skin and suffice in the bitterness of your absence through the traces etched upon my face as the years pass by without you August 13, 2019

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/13/2020 12:03:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Your pen always writes a beautiful poem............

Sandra Adams
Date: 3/17/2020 9:54:00 AM

thank you so much Paula :) hugs

Ralph Sergi

Date: 8/21/2019 12:24:00 PM

Hi Sandra: I love this free verse poem where therythmn staggers!

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/21/2019 6:19:00 PM

Thank you Ralph :) hugs

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/20/2019 12:24:00 PM

This is absolutely stunning Sandra! So well deserved is your first placement my friend. Congratulations! : ) xxoo

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/20/2019 12:37:00 PM

Thank you again my sweet friend :) hugs

Brenda Chiri

Date: 8/20/2019 11:26:00 AM

Wow beautiful! Congrats on your win!;)

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/20/2019 11:56:00 AM

Thank you :)

Lu Loo

Date: 8/20/2019 10:23:00 AM

wow I am never surprised to see you at the top sweet Sandra! You astound me daily- Thank you for your participation and congrats on your placement. I was honored to read your poem :)-luloo

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/20/2019 10:38:00 AM

Thank you so much my friend, not only for your kind words, the honor of a great win but also for hosting the contest that fueled my muse! hugs :)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/17/2019 9:09:00 AM

"i want to gambol like fragrant petals in summer's warm caress" - beautifully done; beautiful!

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/17/2019 8:38:00 PM

Thanks again Caren... sometimes you long for the love you once had but when they are gone it’s just a longing that can’t ever really be replaced :) hugs

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/16/2019 9:58:00 PM

Wow Sandra! I am in awe of how profoundly you capture the pain of lost love. This is so beautiful! I am putting this rare gem into my faves! : ) xxoo

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/20/2019 10:37:00 AM

Thank you so much my sweet friend...for all your support, kind comments and the honor of being in your faves :) hugs

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 8/16/2019 3:32:00 PM

Lovely penning of home Sandra, so eloquent and insightful. Blessings, Gordon

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/16/2019 3:45:00 PM

thank you Gordon :) hugs

John Hamilton

Date: 8/16/2019 10:19:00 AM

Second read and I find a sadness I didn't notice first time, this poem is so beautiful in it's sadness, it would have done well in my contest beautiful sadness, but that was a while ago.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/16/2019 12:11:00 PM

Thank you John...i have only been back a few months and i am sure i would have entered it, so it must have been right before i came back...i enter as many as i can, unless they are forms that i do not think i can do, such as a limerick~ hugs :)

Joseph May

Date: 8/15/2019 7:43:00 PM

The heart yearns for beautiful colors of love...Well written Sandra..

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/16/2019 12:09:00 PM

Thank you Joseph....sometimes my muse surprises me when she digs deep.... hugs :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/15/2019 2:29:00 PM

geez, sandy, why can't I do this?? My free verse sucks next to this one on "my home" sure wish i had your talent for free verse.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/15/2019 3:31:00 PM

as i wish i had the rhyming talent you and others hold...i have a lot of emotional scars, pain that runs deep...i wish sometimes my muse would grab happy upbeat thoughts and run with them....we are who we are and each of us unique in our techniques and that's what makes poetry so beautiful....it would be boring if we all wrote the same... hugs :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/15/2019 10:49:00 AM

Such a haunting poem. Yearnings frustrated. Beautiful in its sadness. Here's to happier days and memories. :) gw

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/15/2019 3:29:00 PM

Thank you Gershon....some scars run deeper than others and come through when memories are sparked.... hugs :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/15/2019 8:53:00 AM

Home is where the heart is and does remain. Enjoyed reading your work. Very descriptive and expressive work. Thanks for drop0ing by my page. Sara

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/15/2019 3:27:00 PM

Thank you Sara....my oldest son's father passed at 24, i left him when he turned towards drugs, though i get why he needed them, he had severe rheumatoid arthritis and was in constant pain...prescriptions drugs lead to more which lead to death...i always hoped he would find the way back home and be a part of our lives and although we weren't together i took his death very hard...all my son had were a few pictures and my memories... hugs :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/15/2019 8:51:00 AM

It’s not entirely sad, their is a certain beauty in longing. Thanks for your visit Sandra. Hugs Rick.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/15/2019 3:23:00 PM

thank you Rick...i suppose you have a point.... :) hugs

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/14/2019 4:09:00 PM

Love this Sandra, a wonderful poem of nostalgia, i relate to your sentiments, and sincerity.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/14/2019 7:19:00 PM

Thank you Harry...sometimes what we write helps another relive the moment through our poetic expressions....i read other's poems sometimes and feel as though they wrote them for me because of how well they relate.... hugs :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 8/14/2019 9:17:00 AM

A sad poem Sandra but refined and captivating, and your emotions are expressed so creatively. Your poems are all written with such imagery and depth - only a poet with talent can paint such awesome poetry with a quill! Blessings, Jennifer.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/14/2019 7:17:00 PM

Thank you for that wonderful comment Jennifer...my muse often expresses pain through nature...sometimes happy thoughts too but usually the more painful ones compare more so :) hugs

John Hamilton

Date: 8/14/2019 9:13:00 AM

You always find a way to express how you feel using nature as a metaphor, it is so appealing the way you write, loved this one!

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/14/2019 7:15:00 PM

I think because i was so full of pain as a child and often went in a tree or in the fields of flowers to be alone and just observed so much nature that i see the beauty in all of it and relate it to feelings.... hugs :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/14/2019 8:51:00 AM

So sad and eloquently expressed. Hugs Rick.

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/14/2019 7:14:00 PM

Thank you Rick...i suppose longing for a ghost's touch would be sad.... hugs :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/14/2019 4:39:00 AM

- A home ... we want to share with someone we love, Sandra ... lack of response, damage our self-esteem - A heartbreaking poem - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/14/2019 7:13:00 PM

I so agree Anne-Lise... so many people are unable to love because they themselves are damaged...sometimes we just lose the love we so crave and end up longing for it :) thank you!!!! hugs

Constance La France

Date: 8/14/2019 12:32:00 AM

Sandra, great write with so many amazing words and lines, best of luck with your poem ~

Sandra Adams
Date: 8/14/2019 7:10:00 PM

Thank you Dear heart...this one just kind of came out of the blue....I wanted to write loving, my muse wanted to reminisce about lost love... :) hugs