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My Heart Drops

i cant' hear myself think only my heart beating my pulse weakens my breathing is faint the touch of reality has hit me if i could only hold the moment before the bottom dropped from my heart

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Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 5/4/2012 7:56:00 PM

Sounds as though a disaster has taken place; the emotions certainly are there!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/2/2012 2:53:00 PM

Very emotive and expressive work..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..I have been in a situation or two when this has happened so I can relate..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Regina Branham

Date: 5/1/2012 6:01:00 PM

I think you could tighten this by dropping the word 'my' in the 3rd line and the word 'the' in the 5th line and change 'If i could only' to 'If only I could' - just a suggestion - use if you want or leave as is. Otherwise I think is well done. Oh and put your ' between the n and the t in the word - can't.