My Heart Drops

i cant' hear myself think
only my heart beating
my pulse weakens
my breathing is faint
the touch of reality
has hit me
if i could only hold the moment
before the bottom dropped from my heart
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Wesley Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 7:56 PM
Sounds as though a disaster has taken place; the emotions certainly are there!
Kendrick Avatar
May 2, 2012 at 2:53 PM
Very emotive and expressive work..Enjoyed reading this afternoon..I have been in a situation or two when this has happened so I can relate..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
Branham Avatar
May 1, 2012 at 6:01 PM
I think you could tighten this by dropping the word 'my' in the 3rd line and the word 'the' in the 5th line and change 'If i could only' to 'If only I could' - just a suggestion - use if you want or leave as is. Otherwise I think is well done. Oh and put your ' between the n and the t in the word - can't.
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