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My Foolish Heart

What kind of foolish heart would let you slip from grasp?
In a land of ten-thousand fools, I would be the king of them
I will now forever walk a lonely path that I have laid myself;
sorrow, torment, regret will be my ever-present burden.

In a land of ten-thousand fools, I would be the king of them
I strayed, lapsed, and failed to stay my earthy urges.
Sorrow, torment, regret will be my ever-present burden.
If it were possible to turn back the clock, I would in instant.

I strayed, lapsed, and failed to stay my earthy urges
Senseless self-gratification, a massaged ego, failure.
If it were possible to turn back the clock, I would in instant.
Could I sing "Non, je ne regrette rien." No, it would be a lie.

Senseless self-gratification, a massaged ego, failure.
Empty glasses in empty bars, this empty foolish heart
Could I sing "Non, je ne regrette rien." No, it would be a lie.
I said my sorries, yet you knew weakness would lead me to repeat.

I saw you gliding by across a busy street today and realized
I will now forever walk a lonely path that I have laid myself
Your beauty, within you and without, what have I done?
What kind of foolish heart would let you slip from grasp?

MY FOOLISH HEART Cash Prize Poetry Contest; placed 5th
Sponsored by: L MILTON HANKINS  
Date wrote: 3rd April 2022

Copyright © Terry Miller | Year Posted 2022

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Suzanne Delaney Date: 9/1/2024 2:39:00 AM Terry, An amazing Pantoum, that didn't have the monotonous feel of a Pantoum when reading it. Complex emotions that come across with a raw honesty. A Fav for me. SuZ Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 9/1/2024 1:31:00 PM Oh, what a surprise, thank you so very much

Malabika Ray Choudhury Date: 5/2/2022 10:38:00 AM Oh Terry, I love this poem so much! Many of us had been foolish, and let go the precious relationships in life. Fave for me - want to read it several times. BW ~ Mala Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 6/24/2022 12:24:00 AM Thank you so very much for your kind comments

Meghan Hutchings Date: 4/7/2022 7:29:00 PM Congratulations, Terry! Your poem is beautiful! I can only hope every man and/or woman who has been foolish could be so humble as to express remorse in brilliant poetic form! Excellent job! God bless and much love...Meghan! Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/12/2022 12:49:00 AM Thank you Meghan for your kind comments.

Sam Kauffman Date: 4/7/2022 11:48:00 AM Excellent Terry. I really like this one especially as the foolish heart realizes what it threw away - great perceptive outlook! Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/12/2022 12:49:00 AM Thank you so much, Sam.

Caren Krutsinger Date: 4/6/2022 8:48:00 AM Congratulations! You nailed this one! Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/7/2022 8:03:00 AM Appreciate it, Caren

Evelyn Judy Buehler Date: 4/5/2022 7:55:00 AM Terry, this is a beautifully written pantoum, filled with the anguish of regret. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Evelyn :) Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/7/2022 8:02:00 AM Thank you, Evelyn

Jenna Logan Date: 4/5/2022 4:26:00 AM I see congratulations are due to you as well. A self-exposed failure at letting love slip away... well done, Terry. Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 7:20:00 AM Thank you Jenna

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 4/5/2022 3:51:00 AM Dear Terry, your pantoum had a beautiful rhythm like a heart beat it rolled off my tongue as I read it, congratulations on your win, it was a well delivered verse, this is not an easy form you can be proud of your achievement, have a great day, brave it like a soldier, :) Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 7:21:00 AM Thank you so much

Valsa George Date: 4/5/2022 2:40:00 AM Back to your great poem once again with Congratulations ! A deserving win, dear friend ! Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 7:21:00 AM Thank you again Valsa

Christuraj Alex Date: 4/4/2022 10:51:00 PM Pantoum at its best. Congratulations! Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:53:00 AM Thank you so much

Eve Roper Date: 4/4/2022 6:07:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Terry. A lovely write. Blessings my friend Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:53:00 AM Thank you, Eve, I appreciate your kind comments.

L Milton Hankins Date: 4/4/2022 1:01:00 PM Congratulations, Terry, on your fine poem in my contest, My Foolish Heart. I really enjoyed reading it. Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:54:00 AM Thank you Milt, I appreciate the placement and your running of these contests.

Paula Goldsmith Date: 4/4/2022 12:56:00 PM Congratulations on your win. A wonderful write. Our foolish heart will let us do many things in life. Have a blessed day/week................. Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:54:00 AM This is true, Paula. Thank you for your kind comments have a great week yourself.

Mike Gentile Date: 4/4/2022 11:02:00 AM Terry, you perfectly extolled the makings of a foolish heart and did it with such beautiful style! I loved it! Good luck! Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:55:00 AM Thank you, Mike, I always appreciate your visits and kind comments.

Reason A. Poteet Date: 4/4/2022 7:22:00 AM Love that repeating line, "In a land of ten thousand fools, I would be king of them." not to diminish the power of "I've said my sorries..." Well-written pantoum indeed with details and imagery galore. Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:55:00 AM Thank you so much for your too kind comments.

Caren Krutsinger Date: 4/4/2022 7:22:00 AM Terrifically well penned "Could I sing "Non, je ne regrette rien." No, it would be a lie." Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:56:00 AM Thank you, Caren.

Regina Mcintosh Date: 4/4/2022 5:40:00 AM WOW! I love love love this. Such a beautiful write and a sure winner. Love it. God bless you my friend. Love, Gina Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:57:00 AM Thank you so much; I do appreciate your comments. Regina Mcintosh Date: 4/4/2022 5:40:00 AM A FAV!!!

Valsa George Date: 4/4/2022 4:23:00 AM Yes, it was foolish to let her slip from your grasp ! It happens sometimes, not because you are foolish.... but because you became impotent before 'a foolish fate'.... ! Terry you are a gifted writer and never foolish.... Lol :) :) Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:58:00 AM Thank you Valsa, it was many years ago now.

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 4/4/2022 3:53:00 AM Oh Terry, my heart is mush when I read soft poetry such as this, your soul is tenderized, your words pastel and liquid. I see it on a winners list, brave the day and hope for tomorrow, better things await, give love not hate, :) Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/5/2022 1:58:00 AM Thank you so much

Line Gauthier Date: 4/3/2022 12:38:00 PM Love your inclusion of "Non, Je ne regrette rien" but I would recommend lower case 'je' and no punctuation within the quote, maybe a period. A beautiful poem ~ Login to Reply Terry Miller Date: 4/3/2022 1:36:00 PM Thank you for your constructive comment I sincerely appreciate it