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There was a place I used to know,.. where summer evenings spoke in long shadows that were heard by the sun blending dark into light Where sweet grass, fragrant and damp, would buckle and bend under the weight of a child's hide and seek, then quickly spring back, upright and sleek, as if to experience a last moment of fun Tonight I recall how I'd watch from the window My face pressed intimately against the cool glass, while the children ran up and down the grassy knoll, to stretch that last ray of light before it was time to come in It was there where perfume coming from small, sweaty foreheads would rise to meet me, making my eyes smile, and my heart swell... and the faint scent of childhood, mingled with the breeze I remember kissing salty cheeks at bath time Stroking feathered hair that fell into lathered curls Soon after, when nestled, blissfully clean, swathed in contentment, between cool, crisp sheets, they would wait for a last goodnight kiss. Young faces scrubbed red, and expectant Reeking of soap, and joy, and love complete Words?…. Most of them were left, unsaid It matters little now We had it all back then for just a little while Tonight I find myself within the nimbus of a memory, while evening shadows tell about the laughter that is gone But together we will listen, as the echoes linger on... reminding me, of a place I used to know ______________________________________________________ 8/13/18 Contest : Five Senses

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Date: 1/28/2021 5:29:00 PM
Beautiful ~ I particularly love the last two stanzas ~ I was very happy to find this awesome poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology, Carrie ~
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Date: 6/9/2019 6:31:00 PM
What a delightful picture you have painted with your words of this write. Very nicely done.
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Date: 9/4/2018 1:50:00 PM
Whenever I want to feel good I come to your poems. That has never changed
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Date: 8/21/2018 3:23:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work ..Way to go.. Sara
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Date: 8/19/2018 3:24:00 PM
Congratulations for your win. This is very good :)
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Date: 8/16/2018 6:47:00 AM
Oh gosh! I can see why this is #1. Congratulations!! What a profound and well-written poem about our senses that also touches our emotions. Beautiful!
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Date: 8/15/2018 7:29:00 PM
Such a well-written, moving poem, Carrie. You have painted your imagery so well using 'senses' to help recall the many longed-for reminiscent scenes of dedicated motherhood followed by the inevitable empty nest, which so many of your readers can relate and empathize with. A Fave for me! And congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 8/14/2018 1:30:00 PM
You always know how to paint with all your senses, this is no exception, congrats on your win Carrie
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Date: 8/14/2018 9:39:00 AM
SO lovely, Carrie! Congrats on top win. Janice
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Date: 8/14/2018 8:19:00 AM
Congratulations, Carrie, I found this deeply moving and so beautifully put together. Well done. Viv x
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Date: 8/14/2018 7:28:00 AM
Your poem speaks to me deeply, Carrie. Yes: "We had it all back then for just a little while" - and while it happens, we don't know how short the time will be. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 8/14/2018 7:15:00 AM
A lovely write! I feel the moment sweeping over me. Congrats on your top win, Carrie!
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Date: 8/14/2018 7:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your Trophy First Place win Carrie...so deserving! Applause! : )
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Date: 8/13/2018 11:08:00 PM
When we reflect on days gone by melancholy grips the heart. Your words "what is gone....is gone" hit home with the poignancy of an empty nest...yet my grand children return me to the joys of being needed and loved again. I hope you have that too Carrie. This is a moving poem that cuts right through, composed brilliantly! xxoo ; )
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Date: 8/13/2018 7:36:00 PM
Nicely crafted Carrie...should do well my friend...love & light...^WW^
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Carrie Richards
Date: 8/13/2018 7:44:00 PM
Thank you so much WW. Your comments are always so kind and well appreciated ! :)
Date: 8/13/2018 5:05:00 PM
I could really relate to this nostalgic journey of the senses,Carrie. Beautifully described.
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Carrie Richards
Date: 8/13/2018 7:44:00 PM
Thank you Wendy, for stopping by my poem :)

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