My Dear Heart Broken

i danced in bubbling innocence, but shrouded with tainted boundaries- no more simplicity without redemption; my soul complicity, my essence like dying memories i strike a fever like waves of lightning, the storm never ceases even in autumn breezes i find this affair of dread most frightening weeping with willows without resilience, wiping away tears with tissues of desuetude, -for they never knew their worth- and o, they have such fortitude; i lay on the barren ground, desperately nude, no sight no sound misconstrued- i allude i ran in exotic light, searching for brilliance, spreading stardust amongst universes too far for one to reach; but i reach because i was taught, i fought to find my speech- words can be so deceiving, for there is worry in my insight i need a remedy… something relieving and now i suture what needs mending, saturated with scars that won’t fade- this life of not knowing is never ending, for i’ve been taken in chains hell made never accepting what can bring adoration- i fly with ravens i LACK love- a failure with frail fingers pointing down, disappointment of the worst; i have but two wishes… to collapse in a home of hope, and finally learn how to cope melancholy moments linger in my mind… for i never saw what i should have seen in my youth- no time to seek freedom when you can’t release what you united without fear but i know the truth and i will not accept what can’t be given, cannot comprehend the world i live in forever needing a haven of harmony-MY DEAR HEART BROKEN
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ this poem is a mixture of rhyme, free verse, senryu and monoku 1.13.20 Dear Heart Poetry Contest
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Date: 1/19/2020 1:27:00 PM
Another wonderful write Laura, I liked the mixture of free verse and rhyme, really works well, congrats on another top win!
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Date: 1/19/2020 8:10:00 AM
Lu, I love your emotional poem, one line really struck me as a line that could be anyone's sorrow - "for i never saw what i should have seen in my youth-". Congratulations on your wonderful win _Constance
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Date: 1/19/2020 10:08:00 AM
thank you sweet Dear Heart, honored you enjoyed this poem! be blessed x:-)-luloo
Date: 1/19/2020 6:51:00 AM
wow... no one commented on this? One of your best poems, in my humble opinion.. I felt every word and loved the choice words and how you paired them and it is so creative.. i can see where you got the inspiration lol... Love that fourth stanza... So glad this contest inspired you.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest.
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Date: 1/19/2020 10:07:00 AM
thank you, it was sort of longer than usual, but the muse wouldn't stop- though this was fictional, it was buried somewhere deep in there I think. many thanks and have a great day. x:-)-luloo
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