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FICTIONAL POEM FOR CONTEST

thoughts of faded autumn embers,
        sedated with a mind cluttered-
               oh, dear friend, if you only knew…
                  my heart flawed since we said adieu

                  I need not a fear to surpass my sight, 
               nor feel the desire to watch ravens soar-
        no, I crave the emotions you left behind…
    now absolute integrity I must find

   I seek amber when darkness prevails;
        (redeem myself somehow)
            for my dear friend, if you only knew…
                my essence ebon since we said adieu

              little stars of ivory dust sprinkle tonight;
           they flatter themselves in cosmic depth-
       shower me in riches of the heart…
    forgiving two willows who weep apart

     timbers of a forest, emerald with ease,
        for I am left breathless without rest-
          oh, my dear friend, if you only knew…
             my soul apprehended since we said adieu

                 melancholy eyes without pain’s surprise,
                   leaning onto bridge rails for safekeeping-
                     for falling into reveries of silent tides…
                       made me comprehend why my mind hides

                           for my sweet friend, if you only knew…
                              emptiness follows since we said adieu




August 24, 2019
Silent One 

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Date: 8/31/2019 3:13:00 PM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, L.L. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/29/2019 4:00:00 PM
so many do not know, even those so close to us.. and many times it is too late... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 8/25/2019 7:02:00 PM
This is perfect poetry Laura, I think SO will love it, as do I!
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Date: 8/29/2019 1:43:00 PM
aww thanks dear John, why are you always soo sweet...:)-luloo
Date: 8/25/2019 7:06:00 AM
This is absolutely exquisite, Lu Loo. Chillingly beautiful!
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Date: 8/29/2019 1:43:00 PM
thank you lovely Caren :)-luloo
Date: 8/24/2019 6:23:00 PM
wow... love the depth of metaphors and emotions in the one, fictional or not, it is a poignantly beautiful poem...i think this one will do rather well in the contest... great write! :) hugs
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Date: 8/29/2019 1:43:00 PM
many thanks sweet Sandy, your kindness shines all over this site :) rainbows....-luloo
Date: 8/24/2019 3:04:00 PM
- Beautiful with deep emotion, L.L. - A winning poem, I'm sure ... best wishes :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/29/2019 1:42:00 PM
thank you sweet SS :)-luloo