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My Crystal Blue

We walked home
Hand in hand
You were just a girl
me a boy 
pretending to be a man

We held tightly to our nothing
Wrapping it fully within the wanting
Not really knowing 
who we were 
or what we were needing
So it was so easy 
to sink into heavy breathing 
Me the innocent boy
you my ingenue 
We loved each other for a time
It seemed the right thing to do

You were my cynosure 
a crystal blue eyed angel
naked and demure
Tentatively  innocent
yet somehow you seemed so sure
I wanted you to unlock my sad lonely 
still I kept looking elsewhere for a cure
A panacea 
for the missing parts inside of me
So I searched
wanting to see
my sempiternal possibility

Feelings ineffable
I wanted so bad to feel full
Why couldn't I hold onto us
or resist the pull
I was a sad black sheep
searching for virgin wool

I thought maybe
beyond my awkward stammer
in the wider world of glamour 
I could be a mellifluous camper
Yet secretly I knew
I was neither lissome or free
Why did I give up the us in we?
Binding myself in a place 
I was never meant to be
There in a chatoyant box
locked with a golden key 
It would take years
For me to be able to see
What my crystal blue baby
seen inside of me
In the end
knowing I was loveable
is what set the boy free
You showed me
the man I was meant to be!


I completed Silent's ten word challenge.

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Lynn Marie

Date: 8/24/2016 1:31:00 PM

A sweetly demure piece that captures the awkwardness, uncertainty and vulnerability of youth. I see some word choices were contest requirements but that just made it all the more interesting to read :-) The title is excellent and you really did a superb job with those words...I 'll go 'read' the dictionary now..lol This was very enjoyable...your skills show wonderfully:-) blessings, lynn

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/24/2016 2:43:00 PM

Thanks Lynn, I was a bit naughty with this one.

Funom Makama

Date: 5/20/2016 6:47:00 AM

This is wonderful and beyond awesome. A great write here Richard

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/17/2016 11:05:00 PM

Silent wanted me to do this challenge, buuuut ... those words kind of intimidate me ... ha ha. In any case, you sure pulled it off with flying colors ... they felt very natural in the place they were, in the poem. You found the perfect one to dedicate poetry too ... a great piece.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 5/17/2016 8:23:00 PM

You did this one very well Richard. Verlena

Mama Bear

Date: 5/16/2016 10:43:00 AM

So you in your writing Good luck in the contest. Love Mom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2016 9:05:00 PM

Love back to you mom.

Red Fiery

Date: 5/16/2016 9:07:00 AM

This is indeed a gr8 entry and deserves all the admirations.... Brilliant write... Cheers !

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2016 9:46:00 AM

Good morning and thanks Red. Hugs Rick.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/15/2016 8:35:00 PM

wow, this is my second favorite one I have seen using Silent One's words. LOVE this, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2016 9:47:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, these were words I would never have used in a million years.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/15/2016 10:51:00 AM

This is just such a beautiful poem! A7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2016 9:47:00 AM

Thanks Arthur.

Paul Callus

Date: 5/14/2016 8:55:00 AM

You not only completed the challenge, Richard, but I hardly realized that you had gone in for it, considering that the suggested words fitted elegantly into place. Excellent! ~ Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/14/2016 9:05:00 AM

Hi Paul, I can think of no greater compliment. Thank you my friend.

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/13/2016 1:48:00 PM

Such an excellent use of the words, Richard. Congratulations on your meeting this challenge so well with this excellent Rhyme. 7, Sandra

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 6:02:00 PM

Thanks Sandra, I learned some new words along the way.

John Hamilton

Date: 5/13/2016 10:15:00 AM

What a write, Richard, Silents ten word challenge really brought out the best, certainly I learned a few new words. This is masterfully done, typically you!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 6:03:00 PM

Thanks John, you are kind.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 5/13/2016 8:20:00 AM

Fantastic Richard.I love this gem.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 6:03:00 PM

Thanks Charmaine. ;0)

Edlynn Nau

Date: 5/13/2016 2:19:00 AM

Love the innocence and growing from start to finish. Lovely completion of the task. You added Silents new colors to your pallet and painted such a sweet scene. I just love nice endings and there seem to be so few. Thanks for writing us one.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 7:54:00 AM

For the most part I too tend to gravitate to happy endings. I guess I am the eternal optimist, I believe in the end God will indeed provide us our happy ending, either in this world or the next.

Becca Teagan

Date: 5/12/2016 2:03:00 PM

Wow, Rick, you really did a great job! Using all those words was not an easy task, I'm sure. Really turned out nice :) I love the message.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 7:55:00 AM

Hi Becca, I'm pleased with the result. It was indeed a tough one and I hope I used the words properly. Hugs Rick.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/12/2016 12:10:00 PM

Beautiful....you rose to the challenge

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/13/2016 7:58:00 AM

Hi Eileen, sorry for the delayed response, I was travelling home yesterday from Vancouver. I had a couple of beautiful sunny days while I was there. I'm pleased you like this piece. My last two have leaned to the passionate side. They are not to the caliber of the Queen of passion but I enjoyed writing them none the less. Hugs Rick.