My Crystal Blue

We walked home
Hand in hand
You were just a girl
me a boy 
pretending to be a man

We held tightly to our nothing
Wrapping it fully within the wanting
Not really knowing 
who we were 
or what we were needing
So it was so easy 
to sink into heavy breathing 
Me the innocent boy
you my ingenue 
We loved each other for a time
It seemed the right thing to do

You were my cynosure 
a crystal blue eyed angel
naked and demure
Tentatively  innocent
yet somehow you seemed so sure
I wanted you to unlock my sad lonely 
still I kept looking elsewhere for a cure
A panacea 
for the missing parts inside of me
So I searched
wanting to see
my sempiternal possibility

Feelings ineffable
I wanted so bad to feel full
Why couldn't I hold onto us
or resist the pull
I was a sad black sheep
searching for virgin wool

I thought maybe
beyond my awkward stammer
in the wider world of glamour 
I could be a mellifluous camper
Yet secretly I knew
I was neither lissome or free
Why did I give up the us in we?
Binding myself in a place 
I was never meant to be
There in a chatoyant box
locked with a golden key 
It would take years
For me to be able to see
What my crystal blue baby
seen inside of me
In the end
knowing I was loveable
is what set the boy free
You showed me
the man I was meant to be!


I completed Silent's ten word challenge.
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Marie Avatar
August 24, 2016 at 1:31 PM
A sweetly demure piece that captures the awkwardness, uncertainty and vulnerability of youth. I see some word choices were contest requirements but that just made it all the more interesting to read :-) The title is excellent and you really did a superb job with those words...I 'll go 'read' the dictionary now..lol This was very enjoyable...your skills show wonderfully:-) blessings, lynn
Lamoureux Avatar
August 24, 2016 at 2:43 PM
Thanks Lynn, I was a bit naughty with this one.
Makama Avatar
May 20, 2016 at 6:47 AM
This is wonderful and beyond awesome. A great write here Richard
Hicks Avatar
May 17, 2016 at 11:05 PM
Silent wanted me to do this challenge, buuuut ... those words kind of intimidate me ... ha ha. In any case, you sure pulled it off with flying colors ... they felt very natural in the place they were, in the poem. You found the perfect one to dedicate poetry too ... a great piece.
Walker  Avatar
May 17, 2016 at 8:23 PM
You did this one very well Richard. Verlena
Bear Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 10:43 AM
So you in your writing Good luck in the contest. Love Mom
Lamoureux Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 9:05 PM
Love back to you mom.
Fiery Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 9:07 AM
This is indeed a gr8 entry and deserves all the admirations.... Brilliant write... Cheers !
Lamoureux Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 9:46 AM
Good morning and thanks Red. Hugs Rick.
Dietrich Avatar
May 15, 2016 at 8:35 PM
wow, this is my second favorite one I have seen using Silent One's words. LOVE this, Richard.
Lamoureux Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 9:47 AM
Thanks Andrea, these were words I would never have used in a million years.
Vaso Avatar
May 15, 2016 at 10:51 AM
This is just such a beautiful poem! A7
Lamoureux Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 9:47 AM
Thanks Arthur.
Callus Avatar
May 14, 2016 at 8:55 AM
You not only completed the challenge, Richard, but I hardly realized that you had gone in for it, considering that the suggested words fitted elegantly into place. Excellent! ~ Regards // paul
Lamoureux Avatar
May 14, 2016 at 9:05 AM
Hi Paul, I can think of no greater compliment. Thank you my friend.
Haight Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 1:48 PM
Such an excellent use of the words, Richard. Congratulations on your meeting this challenge so well with this excellent Rhyme. 7, Sandra
Lamoureux Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 6:02 PM
Thanks Sandra, I learned some new words along the way.
Hamilton Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 10:15 AM
What a write, Richard, Silents ten word challenge really brought out the best, certainly I learned a few new words. This is masterfully done, typically you!
Lamoureux Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 6:03 PM
Thanks John, you are kind.
Chircop Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 8:20 AM
Fantastic Richard.I love this gem.
Lamoureux Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 6:03 PM
Thanks Charmaine. ;0)
Nau Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 2:19 AM
Love the innocence and growing from start to finish. Lovely completion of the task. You added Silents new colors to your pallet and painted such a sweet scene. I just love nice endings and there seem to be so few. Thanks for writing us one.
Lamoureux Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 7:54 AM
For the most part I too tend to gravitate to happy endings. I guess I am the eternal optimist, I believe in the end God will indeed provide us our happy ending, either in this world or the next.
Teagan Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 2:03 PM
Wow, Rick, you really did a great job! Using all those words was not an easy task, I'm sure. Really turned out nice :) I love the message.
Lamoureux Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 7:55 AM
Hi Becca, I'm pleased with the result. It was indeed a tough one and I hope I used the words properly. Hugs Rick.
Manassian Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 12:10 PM
Beautiful....you rose to the challenge
Lamoureux Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 7:58 AM
Hi Eileen, sorry for the delayed response, I was travelling home yesterday from Vancouver. I had a couple of beautiful sunny days while I was there. I'm pleased you like this piece. My last two have leaned to the passionate side. They are not to the caliber of the Queen of passion but I enjoyed writing them none the less. Hugs Rick.
Nance Avatar
May 12, 2016 at 10:55 AM
Whoa! This was fantastic! Brilliant in lines like "Tentatively innocent yet somehow you seemed so sure" Your flow was amazing, this read great!
Lamoureux Avatar
May 13, 2016 at 7:59 AM
You make me blush, thanks Casarah.
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