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TAYLOR SWIFT ROCKS

 

My crazy dream is to begin again back when I ran breathless in fields of green, enchanted and well past the age of ten, yet back when my slate of life was still quite clean. Back when I ran breathless in fields of green, a woman child, and not so innocent, yet back when my life’s slate was still quite clean, crazier I’d be, never hesitant! A woman child, and not so innocent, sweeter than fiction I’d make each romance. Crazier I’d be, never hesitant. I’d jump then fall, and always I would dance. Sweeter than fiction I’d make each romance. My Superman I‘d know this time around! I’d jump then fall, and always I would dance. Much smarter now, I’d still be safe and sound. My superman I’d know this time around. At men more treacherous I now would scoff. Much smarter now, I would be safe and sound, and every woe - I’d simply shake it off! At men more treacherous I now would scoff. The lucky one, I’d see life through new eyes, And every woe - I’d simply shake it off. Inside my wildest dreams, I could be wise. The lucky one, I’d see life through new eyes. Everything has changed. I want to be inside my wildest dreams! I could be wise - yet back when starlight still shone bright for me! Everything has changed. I want to be enchanted and well past the age of ten, yet back when starlight still shone bright for me. My crazy dream is to begin again! Written May 30, 2016 for the Musical Pantoum Contest of Silent One
At least one Taylor Swift song title used per line and verse (each line is repeated) L1 V1 and L4 V8: Begin Again L2 V1 and L1 V2: Breathless L3 V1 and L2 V8: Enchanted L4 V1 and L3 V2: Clean L2 V2 and L1 V3: Innocent L4 V2 and L3 V3: Crazier L2 V3 and L1 V4: Sweeter than Fiction L4 V3 and L3 V4: Jump Then Fall L2 V4 and L1 V5: Superman L4 V4 and L3 V5: Safe and Sound L2 V5 and L1 V6: Treacherous L4 V5 and L3 V6: Shake It Off L2 V6 and L1 V7: The Lucky One L4 V6 and L3 V7: Wildest Dreams L2 V7 and L1 V8: Everything Has Changed L4 V7 and L3 V8: Starlight

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Date: 1/23/2023 8:31:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this! Yours is a more inspirational and upbeat theme. I remember that contest that Silent One did and thinking back to that as inspiration to using song lyrics in a poem.
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Date: 3/17/2022 4:56:00 AM
This is absolute perfect! I am a fan of Taylor Swift and I can tell you pull this off brilliantly! Great job and hats off!!!!Have a great day :)
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Date: 8/18/2016 7:26:00 PM
Love your crazy dream Andrea...so well crafted! You are a far better disciplined writer than I...hats off!
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Date: 6/16/2016 5:25:00 PM
Very well done....I'm sure it took a lot of work Congratulations on your placement
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Date: 6/15/2016 3:08:00 PM
Wonderfully done my lovely friend. Rings in ear the music of this poem. Congrats on your beautiful win. Loved always my smiling friend, bl
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Date: 6/14/2016 4:33:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea on your win! A beautiful song pantoum! :-) Very involved!
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Date: 6/10/2016 10:19:00 AM
This doesn't seem like the easiest of contests, but you made it seem like it was, your lines flowed so smoothly. There was a free spirit woven all the way through. Great write!
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Date: 6/10/2016 7:52:00 AM
Wonderful, Andrea! Pantoums are hard enough... but to 'enforce' pre-selected titles/phrases seemed an impossible task... until reading yours!!! Terry
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Date: 6/9/2016 4:49:00 PM
Beautifully done with beautiful pictures of the past kept beautifully in beautiful heart. Good luck in the contest with a nice 7 my lovely smiling friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 6/7/2016 3:07:00 PM
Excellent work, good luck in the competition.
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Date: 6/7/2016 11:52:00 AM
I don't know the song or Taylor Swift. I can get into the if-i-had-it-to-do- over- again thing. I always have to think - my, God, I may have really screwed up! Super write. Love, daver
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Date: 6/6/2016 8:43:00 AM
You thrive on challenges and these titles are so seamlessly done. Excellent job sis.
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Date: 6/6/2016 3:38:00 AM
A brilliant and enchanting write, Andrea:) All the best for the contest:)
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Date: 6/5/2016 11:02:00 PM
Andrea, this is brilliant! :-)
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Date: 6/5/2016 10:26:00 PM
Well what can I say, Andrea? You pulled off this difficult challenge with flying colors, and hid those repetitions so naturally and, dare I say, "swiftly" ... did it take you as long as you thought? I know mine did. The only thing that could have made it better was ME being a fan of Taylor Swift ... lol!
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Date: 6/5/2016 9:43:00 PM
Perfect poetry... Beautifully executed with an enchanting story. Winner! ...Fran
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Date: 6/5/2016 9:26:00 PM
in credibly superb stuff Andrea!!!Anybody will go crazy and fall in love after reading this write.....Lovely so lovely!!! 7
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Date: 6/5/2016 9:22:00 PM
Wow Andrea.This was great. Even though I am not a fan of the form the way you put together the repeated lines made it stand out. This should be the example they have for a pantoum....
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Date: 6/5/2016 7:58:00 PM
Hello dear poet... well I read your wonderful write and then came to the footnote that you left. Very interesting. I completely love the write! Ironic wouldn't you say... when we are 10... we want to be 30...* smiles... Miss you... Have a beautiful weekend ... Much love, james
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Date: 6/5/2016 7:30:00 PM
Andrea!! OMG!!!!! I love this! it is a winner to me lady :) good luck it will be a winner for sure :)-luloo
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Date: 6/5/2016 6:41:00 PM
Ew la la, my friend. Never considered that you'd select Taylor. Everything is woven together in a natural and lovely flow. The amount of effort you employed, effectively hid all the effort in this seamless write. All the best .. CayCay
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Date: 6/5/2016 5:52:00 PM
impressed by the amount of work put in to write this poem...good luck
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Date: 6/5/2016 5:24:00 PM
So - you are incorporating pop music lyrics in your poems! Maybe I will do the same! Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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