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My Brother -In a Heartbeat

He met his death alone and instantly one winter’s night, the blackest of the black. Were there the slightest possibility, my brother - in a heartbeat- I’d bring back. His accidental death, a tragedy, would leave in all our hearts a giant crack. If there were but one soul that I could see, my brother -in a heartbeat- I’d bring back. So brilliant, sweet, and still so young was he. No matter what he tried, he’d have the knack! What waste of life! If only it could be, my brother -in a heartbeat- I’d bring back. “Dale, take a break from your eternity,” I’d shout to Heaven, “and don't even pack!” If God would grant one miracle to me, my brother -in a heartbeat- I’d bring back. Oct. 16, 2018 for Caren Krutsinger's Who Would You Bring Back In A Heartbeat Poetry Contest

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Date: 10/27/2018 11:27:00 AM
Back with more well deserved congrats, Andrea.
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Date: 10/27/2018 7:29:00 AM
Heartfelt rhyme of sisterly love and affection can't be denied our attention. Fine work.
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Date: 10/27/2018 5:23:00 AM
So nice.
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Date: 10/25/2018 12:22:00 PM
This tribute is indeed moving and heartfelt Andrea. Congratulations on your number one placement! : )
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Date: 10/24/2018 3:36:00 PM
Beautiful! Congratulations on #1 in contest. The depth of emotion touched my heart.
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Date: 10/24/2018 7:00:00 AM
Wow.. only catching up now , but emotive brilliance..loved it
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Date: 10/22/2018 10:07:00 AM
Back with well deserved congrats on your top win, Andrea.
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Date: 10/22/2018 6:10:00 AM
Sad to hear of his death, Andrea, a lovely tribute:)
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Date: 10/21/2018 10:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Andrea. I remember your story of his death.. Grief is so very hard to except..
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Date: 10/21/2018 6:03:00 PM
Acutely touching. How did you ever get through writing it. Boundlessly, ink guided by a cogent muse flows daily from your pen. And there I stand within the crowd to echo lasting praise.
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Date: 10/20/2018 9:21:00 AM
Hi Andrea, an emotional and heartfelt write from your golden pen. Your words come straight from the heart, an excellent tribute. Your heart sings out a winner Andrea. have a wonderful weekend. Hugs.... Mike. XX
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Date: 10/20/2018 8:52:00 AM
Deep emotion, love and sorrow in this poem, Andrea, a wonderful tribute to Dale. Best of luck. John
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Date: 10/20/2018 8:48:00 AM
This must have been hard to write. When someone goes suddenly, it leaves that void that can never be filled. Great message for everyone who would love a loved one back.
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Date: 10/20/2018 8:09:00 AM
A lovely one...All the best Andrea
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Date: 10/19/2018 5:53:00 PM
Well written Andrea. Expressed perfectly :)
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Date: 10/19/2018 2:57:00 PM
Such a lovely personal honest piece Andrea, indeed makes one think who we would bring back but again God always knows best. Have a blessed day,Gordon
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Date: 10/18/2018 3:32:00 PM
This is true, so straight off - personal, and I could feel that. It is dramatic with the emotion, intense with longing missing often causes and beautifully delivered. I hate thinking of your sadness as a winner, but I do think the poem is one and should automatically dispense tissues to readers. Love ... CayCay
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Date: 10/17/2018 12:25:00 PM
Death is the most unfortunate thing about this life, even the thought of separation can make your blood go cold and it is also main reason behind most of the sadness which is in the world, whenever we lost someone close to us, the pain is immense and it just never goes and the worse thing is that even in most cases we can't even say a proper goodbye, you wrote a really beautiful and heartfelt poem, I could fell the pain in your words, good luck for the contest and have a really nice day
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Date: 10/17/2018 11:44:00 AM
So sad Andrea, best wishes in the contest...
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Date: 10/17/2018 8:23:00 AM
Your poem rings true. After all those years, you must still miss him very much. Love how you worked with the repeated line.
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Date: 10/17/2018 7:08:00 AM
I feel in your words, how much you miss your brother. A heartfelt depiction..touching story..it hurts.
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Date: 10/16/2018 11:13:00 PM
lovingly write on brotherly true love /// excellent
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Date: 10/16/2018 11:07:00 PM
What a heartfelt write, Andrea. Love it. Hugs. Line xx
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Date: 10/16/2018 10:42:00 PM
i cried. what a beautiful tribute.
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Date: 10/16/2018 10:19:00 PM
This is so poignant, Andrea. I wish you could have him back!
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