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My Brittle Brittle Wall I Hide Behind

A huff and puff brittle wall created out of receding grains of hopeless sinking sand Purpose built to keep standing tall protecting the meek Something in Or Something out When placed up against the ravages of circumstance and the elements of time Will eventually succumb crumble and fall As even a wall no matter how well built Can only withstand an allotted amount of slings and arrows fired and slung at it Until eventually it let's something in it was purpose built in order to keep out Perhaps upon reflection the sand would have been better off being used to pass through an egg timer Or for someone who had placed all their eggs in one basket or traded for some magic beans instead

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Date: 2/12/2021 6:33:00 AM
A pleasure to find your delightful poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology, Christopher~
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Christopher Flaherty
Date: 2/15/2021 9:10:00 AM
Cheers Line thank you so very much indeed , obliged and appreciative
Date: 11/30/2020 2:42:00 PM
I remember commenting on this one it really is brilliant pensive brooding deep, and most important poetic, it comes easy and flows like silk, it deserves to be on page 1 cheers David
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Christopher Flaherty
Date: 11/30/2020 2:59:00 PM
Thank you David my friend your words and comments are to kind. Cheers obliged and appreciated as always
Date: 8/28/2020 5:23:00 AM
Great use of metaphors Christopher. I'm not sure if it's just me but I find myself reading each poem of yours more than once because invariably another theme rears its head in some shape or form. I particularly like the lines "Something in or something out" I once wrote a poem where the wall was a metaphor for a defense mechanism ..until it starts to crumble. I think too deep sometimes :) Great poem! Cheers - Gary
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Christopher Flaherty
Date: 8/28/2020 11:28:00 AM
Cheers Gary Thank you very much high praise indeed. The reason why i actually asked you in the 1st place to read 1 of my poems is because i like reading your poems they are great and would value your opinion. So thanks again for taking the time to read 1 and your fanyastic inspirational comments. Ta bud have a great weekend
Date: 8/27/2020 2:02:00 PM
A gem on introspection Christopher, time is indeed never on our side, we all succumb, no everything succumbs, but the sand eventually settles and forms into stone again a new foundation, fantastic poem will outlive the sands of time, cheers David
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Christopher Flaherty
Date: 8/27/2020 2:17:00 PM
Cheers David Rebirth recycled with a new stronger foundation. Ta bud
Date: 8/27/2020 1:07:00 PM
In many ways I can relate ... i think we can all put up barriers and hide behind them for so many reasons mainly for self preservation - a thought provoking sad piece Christopher :-( hugs Jan xx
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Christopher Flaherty
Date: 8/27/2020 1:24:00 PM
Yes indeed Jan so very sad but true . On reflection self preservation may well be a more appropriate title for this poem than my initial one. Cheers hugs x

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