My Boat Broke

Somewhere between an in and out wave,
my boat broke; it's an essential
scaled down vessel of my body -
I become somewhat alarmed.

Water being almost always in a fluid state
did the unexpected and played dead.
It attained a most unusual state
of neck down paralysis 
and so, head moving left and right
yet frozen beneath,
(assuming there was a beneath),
I remained trapped upwards,
caught like a fruit fly in a glass of merlot.

The boat, though riddled with holes,
sinks only to the gunnels yet plows on,
gliding gracefully upon a moon-path
toward a moon that had hid its face under
a soggy pillow.

By now I could hear the bed creaking
under the strain of being nudged
by several icebergs.

‘I am not a fruit fly’, I shouted,
as a rising sun
raced to a corner of the bedroom
to watch my dreaming brain
struggle up to the level of its eyes

while I reluctantly bobbed
in the stale undercurrent
of that fourth unwise
glass of red wine.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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De Beaulieu Avatar
September 25, 2020 at 12:14 PM
Hello Eric Ashford, in the beginning of the poem, i thought you were in a boat. As i read on it was a fourth glass of wine. So very clever my friend. Enjoy your day.
De Beaulieu Avatar
September 26, 2020 at 11:34 AM
Hello Eric Ashford, well i do think it was done very well. Your poem does not need any changes. Enjoy your day my friend.
Ashford Avatar
September 25, 2020 at 1:42 PM
Thanks for the comment Darlene. It probably needs a better edit. When you run out of ideas for a poem, there's always dreams to fall back on! Best e
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