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My Boat Broke

Somewhere between an in and out wave, my boat broke; it's an essential scaled down vessel of my body - I become somewhat alarmed. Water being almost always in a fluid state did the unexpected and played dead. It attained a most unusual state of neck down paralysis and so, head moving left and right yet frozen beneath, (assuming there was a beneath), I remained trapped upwards, caught like a fruit fly in a glass of merlot. The boat, though riddled with holes, sinks only to the gunnels yet plows on, gliding gracefully upon a moon-path toward a moon that had hid its face under a soggy pillow. By now I could hear the bed creaking under the strain of being nudged by several icebergs. ‘I am not a fruit fly’, I shouted, as a rising sun raced to a corner of the bedroom to watch my dreaming brain struggle up to the level of its eyes while I reluctantly bobbed in the stale undercurrent of that fourth unwise glass of red wine.

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Date: 9/25/2020 12:14:00 PM
Hello Eric Ashford, in the beginning of the poem, i thought you were in a boat. As i read on it was a fourth glass of wine. So very clever my friend. Enjoy your day.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 9/26/2020 11:34:00 AM
Hello Eric Ashford, well i do think it was done very well. Your poem does not need any changes. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Eric Ashford
Date: 9/25/2020 1:42:00 PM
Thanks for the comment Darlene. It probably needs a better edit. When you run out of ideas for a poem, there's always dreams to fall back on! Best e

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