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My Bloody Valentine

(a swap quatrain poem) My greatest love – a man divine will always be my valentine. I tragic tale I tell you of a man divine –my greatest love. I’d had to leave another man. No one I knew was crueller than that beast! I thought I’d found reprieve. Another man I’d had to leave. I knew not that he’d reappeared. An ugly head his vengeance reared. Nearby my house my ex then sat. He’d reappeared. I knew not that. He had no clue of my new guy as he sat stewing so nearby. To murder me he’d planned to do. Of my new guy he had no clue. I’d called that night my beau to see not knowing what awaited me. There would ensue an awful fight. My beau to see I’d called that night. My boyfriend came to my front door. We kissed, but we could do no more. Oh, my sweet guy. He had no blame! To my front door my boyfriend came. From where he hid my ex flew out - gun in hand and an awful shout. I can’t get over what he did. My ex flew out from where he hid. My boyfriend tried to take the gun. Too brave was he to ever run. By saving me, my darling died. To take the gun, my boyfriend tried. My ex died too, thanks to my beau. But oh, I just cannot let go of dreams I shared with one so true. Thanks to my beau, my ex died too. From his dear face – how red the flow. My bloody valentine! I know one day in heaven we’ll embrace. How red the flow from his dear face.

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Date: 2/26/2025 7:18:00 PM
Hey, that's something difficult to overcome such a loss, you potrayed it quite well in this poem.
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Date: 2/16/2025 5:04:00 PM
Andrea, this is very different from other poems I've read recently with the same title. I think there was a bloody valentine contest. Anyway, this is quite a story of love and loss. At least you'll have a second shot in heaven. This shows some interplay between different lovers and has a most extreme outcome. It is fun to read it the way you put it together. Smiles!!
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Date: 2/14/2025 10:32:00 AM
Brilliantly used swap quatrain Andrea and great story telling
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Date: 2/14/2025 8:51:00 AM
oh wow Andrea this is a gripping tragic murder tale and I love the form you chose:-) hugs Jan xx
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/14/2025 10:08:00 AM
Thanks, Jan I knew it would not place but I sure spent a lot of time doing this. Haha
Date: 2/14/2025 8:14:00 AM
Hi Andrea that was a tragic story, hopefully it didn't really happen. xx
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Joe Maverick
Date: 2/16/2025 12:42:00 PM
I suggest a change Andrea dear..' have you ever considered? Taking Up writing.?? Lol))) even poetry maybe.? Oh I just could not help It... My counterpoint to the heavy write.? Do take care.? And my Best goodnight.!!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/14/2025 10:07:00 AM
It happens all the time on the true crime stories I watch
Date: 2/14/2025 7:14:00 AM
Edgar Poe incarnate . . . which is cool!
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Robert Warlov
Date: 2/16/2025 12:56:00 PM
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/14/2025 10:09:00 AM
Thanks
Date: 2/14/2025 5:26:00 AM
Sad tale, Andrea, well composed:)
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/14/2025 10:10:00 AM
Thanks, Joanna
Date: 2/14/2025 4:13:00 AM
A sad tale Andrea but your poem flowed with great rhythm . The swap lines were perfect. Well done. I enjoyed reading it good luck cheers.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/14/2025 10:11:00 AM
Thanks. Swap quatrains are so fun to do
Date: 2/13/2025 7:56:00 PM
Really sad.The story very nicely told.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/14/2025 10:09:00 AM
Thanks again, Akham
Date: 2/13/2025 7:22:00 PM
This is really tragic, so the tale goes with so many these days - people are crazy
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/14/2025 10:10:00 AM
It's an all too familiar scenario these days
Date: 2/13/2025 7:20:00 PM
Happy bloody Valentine, great story, sorry to say, it does happen.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/14/2025 10:10:00 AM
Yep

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