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Murder In the Tunnel

Each morning I took the train to work, each evening I took the train back home. Each way we went through a long dark tunnel, the train lights were soft like a candle's glow. I loved seeing the light from outside, the countryside as we passed by. One evening it was raining cats and dogs, everyone was wet and cold. In the tunnel we heard a scream, we could not see where it came from. Then came the light from outside, then came the blood for all to behold. Johnny the prankster was on this train, he had rubbed ketchup all over the seat and screamed. He was laughing at us being scared, he thought he was so cute. There was almost bloodshed on that train, the passengers were mad. They wanted to kill him right there, the conductor yelled stop and get in your seats. One lucky Johnny, he got back home safe that day. Date Written: 1/29/2021

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Date: 4/4/2021 10:47:00 AM
Well that poem was certainly a thrill. I hope Johnny has learned his lesson in his older years. Great composition and storytelling. With a marvelous ending...This is an honor to read your poetry. Now off to the next
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 4/6/2021 9:23:00 AM
Thank You, for your note and for your very kind words. Glad you like this fun write. I am so glad this poem was a thrill for you to read. Have a blessed day.....................
Date: 2/3/2021 3:53:00 AM
Last part of this poem is so true, angry people only we see in such situations. Good take on contest. All the best. Have a great day ahead friend. Thanks for making me happy through your wonderful poems. Keep the ink flowing. Take care. God bless!
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 2/3/2021 7:31:00 AM
Thank You, for your note and for your best wishes in the contest. Glad you like this fun write. I am so glad my poems are making you happy. I love to make people happy/smile/laugh. Have a wonderful and blessed day.....................
Date: 1/30/2021 10:19:00 AM
Hi Paula, This is a great take on the contest theme. Johnny shouldn't prank like that, but he is young, and they do such things. I went into the dark side for this challenge, didn't think to be more creative like you did. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great weekend:-) Alexis
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 1/30/2021 3:18:00 PM
Thanks for your note and for your best wishes in the contest. Glad you like this write. Good Luck in the contest. I will enjoy writing your write. Have a blessed day.....................
Date: 1/30/2021 1:40:00 AM
Haha..great one dear Paula...Here in Busan I used to ride in train passing through tunnels...We have to pass I think 38 tunnels from Busan to Seoul. But I love most the train to Busan journey haha..Have a great day,, Happy writing..
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 1/30/2021 3:15:00 PM
Thanks for your note. Glad you like this one. I like riding on a train but I do not think I would like that many tunnels. Have a blessed day.....................
Date: 1/29/2021 6:18:00 PM
Nice story, Paula. I rode a train to work for 30 years through dark tunnels and we actually had some incidents. A prank like Johnny's might have had some unintended consequences. ~Eric
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 1/30/2021 3:13:00 PM
Thanks for your note. Glad you like this write. Have a blessed day.....................

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