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written for Grook contest sponsored by Constance La france.
this is about death of trust, trust, when broken, it remains a corpse , with too many memories ... often it is friends and familiar faces and names that break our trust! Sad reality.

“When trust is a walking phantom, draped in dying dandelions, let the wind blast forth its shattered promises, as rain rinses away piercing pain of memories lost” Quote by Poet the sky is a catacomb of faceless promises and ghosts clothed in tangled treachery as trust is a wilted tulip~ embalmed in golden tears… O’ deceived heart of the eclipsed sun you were once glazed in jewels… now a mourning mausoleum~ chanting a moonless requiem resting in ashes of skeletal lies….

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Tonye George

Date: 2/1/2025 8:16:00 AM

Congratulations Hun. Trust leaves the broken on guard, which stops them from being vulnerable to others or not letting themselves get the most out of love because they fear it would sting again. "now a mourning mausoleum~ chanting a moonless requiem resting in ashes of skeletal lies…" Damn! This is what becomes of trust when altered. Great one, Ink.

Constance La France

Date: 10/1/2024 10:17:00 AM

Ink, congratulations on your win in my Grook contest with this beautifully penned poem, love the quote, Constance

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/13/2024 1:19:00 PM

Back with congratulations on your winning work in Constance's contest. Way to go. Thank you for sharing your gift with us. Sara K

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/23/2024 1:31:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! I enjoyed reading your "mourning mausoleum" write with a great quote. Have a blessed day writing away...........

Joseph May

Date: 8/23/2024 6:25:00 AM

Well penned, Congrats on your win

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 8/22/2024 12:30:00 PM

Fine words that evoke great emotion through your imagery. Congratulations Inky! :)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/22/2024 10:42:00 AM

Dearest Inky! Back with congratulations for your win with this poetic gem!! I had a feeling it would place first as it is a stunning write! The artistry of this poem was the source of motivation and inspiration for me when writing some recent poems. So grateful for your talent and your friendship! High fives and continued blessings of summer joy!! Samzy~

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/22/2024 8:11:00 AM

First line is a power punch. I’ve been to the catacombs of Paris, which is something. Likewise wow: a mourning mausoleum~ chanting a moonless requiem. Congrats!

thriveni c mysore

Date: 8/22/2024 4:44:00 AM

'in ashes of skeletal lies' amazing thought. congratulations on your win dear poet.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/17/2024 10:21:00 PM

Yes, when a person does something to destroy your trust in them, it would be so very hard to try to rebuild it that it would take so many more years than the first time around. Sometimes when something like that happens to a child, they will or never can trust again or it would take years of hard work for them to trust anyone again. A very creative one. I am wondering about the contest's theme now. LOL..If it is about trust. Sara K

Ink Empress
Date: 8/18/2024 12:30:00 AM

Awwn haha it is about death, in this case i wrote about death of trust thank you sara

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 8/17/2024 9:15:00 PM

Sadness in this poem It is written with great angst. Lies crush the soul.

Ink Empress
Date: 8/18/2024 12:30:00 AM

Thank you dear hilda

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/15/2024 10:03:00 AM

Dearest Inky, you have penned one amazing poem. It is stunning in the flow of its intense imagery that live in each line, in the way your metaphoric meaning lives in vibrancy in every line. The death throes of trust in agony is powerfully expressed. You have such a gift for uniquely spoken imagery. This is a fav for me as I want to savor its excellence many times over. How could this not be a winner, dear friend? Sending you blessings and healing for a "deceived heart." Samzy~

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:19:00 PM

Awwn dear samzy! AlwYs good to hear from you you are so kind and generous with your words! And i always feel the sincerity of your presence. Truly grateful

Joe Dimino

Date: 8/15/2024 5:39:00 AM

"now a mourning mausoleum~ chanting a moonless requiem resting in ashes of skeletal lies…." -- Wow. Powerful, gut wrenching. Like others, I have had a lot of pain and suffering in my life, and something I read many years ago has helped me: "Do not eat thine own heart" -- I try not to let their treachery become a part of my own recorded record played over and over. Let the evil stay with them. I try to move on with love. With practice and time, it becomes easier, almost second nature, to even respond to hate with love. Great, honest writing!

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:24:00 PM

So true and much needed words, sometimes some become bitter when reality hits them hard, its important to remind all to love and spread light amidst darkness. Your words are soothing and uplifting, for that im grateful

Valsa George

Date: 8/15/2024 4:54:00 AM

Trust once broken cannot be mended. It becomes sadder when trust is broken by those we hold dear to our hearts. It can be our loved one, a dear friend, a sibling or anyone in whom we have put our trust. You have handled a serious subject in the most effective way. The quote by you itself is excellent poetry. A deceived heart is a 'mourning mausoleum'. What a powerful metaphor. When trust is broken , it is like 'a wilted tulip'. Excellent and so beautifully penned dear sweet friend.

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:28:00 PM

Dear sweet valsa, thank you always for being so kind and generous with your words and for being such a supportive soul! I truly am grateful for that.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 8/15/2024 12:36:00 AM

A great Grook poem Ink, it’s hard to love someone when trust is gone. All the best, Beryl

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:33:00 PM

Thank you dear beryl, so grateful for your support truly

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 8/15/2024 12:29:00 AM

So many great metaphors . Beautifully inked

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:36:00 PM

Thank you so much dahlin

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 8/14/2024 11:21:00 PM

Trust can be fickle. Love your interpretation of this Grook despite its sadness. A great contender for the contest.

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:37:00 PM

So true, thank you so much dear victor for always being so supportive truly im grateful

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/14/2024 10:41:00 PM

Wow. So descriptive. I think this is exactly the kind of poem Constance is looking for in her contest.

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:48:00 PM

Thank you so much sweet andrea! I really hope so , hah you are always the best

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/14/2024 8:29:00 PM

a mourning mausoleum~ the image burns in my mind long after the read dear Ink, you have a special talent for making your emotions understood, what a great gift that is !

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:49:00 PM

Awwn divine rose! I appreciate always your sweet presence

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/14/2024 7:01:00 PM

sullen yet truthful commentary about trust-- the beginning lines surely setting the tone for the rest of this remarkable work, ink

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:54:00 PM

Thank you for your kindness

Tom Woody

Date: 8/14/2024 2:59:00 PM

This is so devastating Inky, yet irresistible at the same time. So true. Trust, when broken, can shatter a pure and honest heart, leaving scars that may last a lifetime. Without going into details, I've lived it. I don't know what the flip a grook is, but I know good poetry when I see it!

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:57:00 PM

Ah it is but something we never get used to, death of trust , im so sorry youv been through the same. Thank you for always being so encouraging!

Clive Culverhouse

Date: 8/14/2024 2:41:00 PM

Right from the get go this is quite a poem, the sky is vast and open and catacombs are enclosed and squalid, one airy, one stale, so the juxtaposition in the first line alone is sheer brilliance, very well written IE

Ink Empress
Date: 8/16/2024 1:57:00 PM

Thank you so much for appreciating this poem i truly am grateful always for your support

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 8/14/2024 2:18:00 PM

faceless promises and ghosts clothed in tangled treachery…. Mmmm the audacity!!! trust is a wilted tulip… mmm we can seen a good amount of those wilted tulips … no good twats … XD.. ooo that ending is gorgeous.. chanting a moonless requiem … resting in ashes of skeletal lies…. Ooooo the flow n the absolute essence of this piece is powerfully written.. elegant and enchanting papi!!! To the ones that break our trust!!! Amen

Silent One

Date: 8/14/2024 2:05:00 PM

I think I have only written this form once and that was such a long time ago... I really like the selection of words you have used here.. You vocabulary is always of a high standard and you always create poetry is emotions and vivid imagery.. Trust is such a fragile thing.. It can take time to trust someone and its really hurts when someone breaks it.. I can be difficult to forgive and trust again... It has happened to so many people... A great poem for the contest.. Best of luck..

Paige Hind

Date: 8/14/2024 2:01:00 PM

This is powerful, you said so much with little words...words that I've read from you that must be from experience. <3 Thanks for your empathetic nature and words-