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Mountain Oasis

The trail to the peak was a long and arduous climb Which skirted a pristine glacial lake about midway. Shimmering below, it offered a cooling balm for the heat And a picturesque spot to rest and refuel for a while. A short down-climb led to a high cliff that overhung the depths Of aquamarine waters; crystal clear, revealing a rocky bottom. Chartreuse lichen grew from the wetted rock face While damsel flies of cerulean hue darted to and fro. In the shade of a small oak we were content to eat our lunch. From our vantage we watched the cutthroat trout feed; Rising to a caddis hatch. Splashes of watermelon, coral and saffron Under their jawlines divulged the source of their strange name. Fronting the shore, a spacious open meadow served as a refuge. A doe and twin fawns lay surrounded by tall grass and wild flowers. Tangerine bells, snow-white lupine, and purple daisies with lemon eyes In hues of lavender and lilac covered the park in waves. After a short dip in the icy waters, we took a few moments to gather our things And reflect on the beauty and grandeur of this unknown retreat. Truly we were blessed, our bodies, minds and souls rejuvenated As we climbed the slope to continue our trek to the snow-capped peak. 8/1/2017 Free Verse 6th Place Seasonal Color Contest Sponsor: Dale Gregory Cozart

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Date: 8/25/2017 7:53:00 AM
Truly exceptional free verse IMHO. I found it to be very pleasing to read this morn, with its uplifting verses describing Nature's beauty and man's blessing when his eyes are opened and his mind clear.. A GEM AND A FAV ....
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Dean Wood
Date: 8/25/2017 11:30:00 AM
Thank you so much Robert. I count you as one of the best poets I have read on this forum. It means a great deal to me that you enjoyed my poem. Have a great day!
Date: 8/19/2017 4:04:00 PM
A beautiful write Dean. Congrats on your placement! :)
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Date: 8/19/2017 2:26:00 PM
When I first read it, I was sure I'd find this fine write on the winner's list. Well done and congratulations, Dean.
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Date: 8/19/2017 12:59:00 PM
Congrats Dean!
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Date: 8/19/2017 12:38:00 PM
Congrats!!! Dean...great job my friend...
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Date: 8/19/2017 12:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your 6th Place win! This was a very tough contest to judge. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter.
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Dean Wood
Date: 8/20/2017 1:13:00 AM
Thanks Dale. I am struggling to get my head around free verse. I chose to try free verse on this contest. I am happy with how I choose to use the required words but the verse was more of a narrative. I am honored to have placed so high. Thanks for the effort you put into sponsoring this contest. -- Dean
Date: 8/7/2017 5:38:00 PM
Oh my gosh, I just had to see how you would use the words. I have not tried this one out yet, but I just don't think I can utilize the words as amazingly as you did here. FAVE
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Dean Wood
Date: 8/7/2017 5:54:00 PM
Wow, thanks for the compliment Andrea. I am still working on this free verse form. I don't quite get it yet.
Date: 8/4/2017 8:27:00 PM
Beautiful such imagery and color WOW purple daisies with lemon eyes loved it Good Luck in contest
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Dean Wood
Date: 8/7/2017 9:09:00 AM
Thank you Alesia! So glad you enjoyed it. Have a great day! -- Dean
Date: 8/2/2017 7:23:00 PM
what incredible imagery Dean, I don't think I can add anything more to what the others have said - an exceptional poem I hope this places high on the winners list:-) hugs jan xx
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Dean Wood
Date: 8/3/2017 7:20:00 AM
Thanks Jan! I'll leave it to you to wonder about how the bears "go" in the woods, hehe. I am truly happy you enjoyed it.
Date: 8/2/2017 7:09:00 PM
Dean, this has exceptional beauty with almost palpable imagery! Very impressive! However this would be considered more narrative than free verse. I hope this fares really well. : )
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Dean Wood
Date: 8/3/2017 7:18:00 AM
Ah, now that's the kind of feedback I've been looking for. I really don't have a handle on free verse. I'll study some more. Thank you for this Connie!
Date: 8/1/2017 3:42:00 PM
Exceptional write in imagery and in using the required colors. Your secret lake sounds like a sanctuary. Well done, Dean!
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Dean Wood
Date: 8/1/2017 3:53:00 PM
Thanks for this thoughtful comment Lin. I haven't written much free verse. I'm still trying to figure it out. I appreciate the feedback. -- Dean
Date: 8/1/2017 3:39:00 PM
This was a beautiful adventure to read! I like the purple daisies with lemon eyes line. I love mountains, so this is enjoyable. Good luck in the contest :)
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Dean Wood
Date: 8/1/2017 3:52:00 PM
Thanks Heidi. You are always so supportive. Glad you enjoyed it. -- Dean

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