Mountain Oasis

The trail to the peak was a long and arduous climb
Which skirted a pristine glacial lake about midway.
Shimmering below, it offered a cooling balm for the heat
And a picturesque spot to rest and refuel for a while.

A short down-climb led to a high cliff that overhung the depths
Of aquamarine waters; crystal clear, revealing a rocky bottom.
Chartreuse lichen grew from the wetted rock face
While damsel flies of cerulean hue darted to and fro.

In the shade of a small oak we were content to eat our lunch.
From our vantage we watched the cutthroat trout feed;
Rising to a caddis hatch. Splashes of watermelon, coral and saffron
Under their jawlines divulged the source of their strange name.  

Fronting the shore, a spacious open meadow served as a refuge.
A doe and twin fawns lay surrounded by tall grass and wild flowers.
Tangerine bells, snow-white lupine, and purple daisies with lemon eyes
In hues of lavender and lilac covered the park in waves.

After a short dip in the icy waters, we took a few moments to gather our things
And reflect on the beauty and grandeur of this unknown retreat.
Truly we were blessed, our bodies, minds and souls rejuvenated 
As we climbed the slope to continue our trek to the snow-capped peak.



8/1/2017
Free Verse

6th Place
Seasonal Color Contest
Sponsor:  Dale Gregory Cozart
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Lindley Avatar
August 25, 2017 at 7:53 AM
Truly exceptional free verse IMHO. I found it to be very pleasing to read this morn, with its uplifting verses describing Nature's beauty and man's blessing when his eyes are opened and his mind clear.. A GEM AND A FAV ....
Wood Avatar
August 25, 2017 at 11:30 AM
Thank you so much Robert. I count you as one of the best poets I have read on this forum. It means a great deal to me that you enjoyed my poem. Have a great day!
Ashley Avatar
August 19, 2017 at 4:04 PM
A beautiful write Dean. Congrats on your placement! :)
Lane Avatar
August 19, 2017 at 2:26 PM
When I first read it, I was sure I'd find this fine write on the winner's list. Well done and congratulations, Dean.
Pandit Avatar
August 19, 2017 at 12:59 PM
Congrats Dean!
Warrior Avatar
August 19, 2017 at 12:38 PM
Congrats!!! Dean...great job my friend...
Cozart Avatar
August 19, 2017 at 12:30 PM
Congratulations on your 6th Place win! This was a very tough contest to judge. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter.
Wood Avatar
August 20, 2017 at 1:13 AM
Thanks Dale. I am struggling to get my head around free verse. I chose to try free verse on this contest. I am happy with how I choose to use the required words but the verse was more of a narrative. I am honored to have placed so high. Thanks for the effort you put into sponsoring this contest. -- Dean
Dietrich Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 5:38 PM
Oh my gosh, I just had to see how you would use the words. I have not tried this one out yet, but I just don't think I can utilize the words as amazingly as you did here. FAVE
Wood Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 5:54 PM
Wow, thanks for the compliment Andrea. I am still working on this free verse form. I don't quite get it yet.
Leach Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 8:27 PM
Beautiful such imagery and color WOW purple daisies with lemon eyes loved it Good Luck in contest
Wood Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 9:09 AM
Thank you Alesia! So glad you enjoyed it. Have a great day! -- Dean
Allison Avatar
August 2, 2017 at 7:23 PM
what incredible imagery Dean, I don't think I can add anything more to what the others have said - an exceptional poem I hope this places high on the winners list:-) hugs jan xx
Wood Avatar
August 3, 2017 at 7:20 AM
Thanks Jan! I'll leave it to you to wonder about how the bears "go" in the woods, hehe. I am truly happy you enjoyed it.
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 2, 2017 at 7:09 PM
Dean, this has exceptional beauty with almost palpable imagery! Very impressive! However this would be considered more narrative than free verse. I hope this fares really well. : )
Wood Avatar
August 3, 2017 at 7:18 AM
Ah, now that's the kind of feedback I've been looking for. I really don't have a handle on free verse. I'll study some more. Thank you for this Connie!
Lane Avatar
August 1, 2017 at 3:42 PM
Exceptional write in imagery and in using the required colors. Your secret lake sounds like a sanctuary. Well done, Dean!
Wood Avatar
August 1, 2017 at 3:53 PM
Thanks for this thoughtful comment Lin. I haven't written much free verse. I'm still trying to figure it out. I appreciate the feedback. -- Dean
Sands Avatar
August 1, 2017 at 3:39 PM
This was a beautiful adventure to read! I like the purple daisies with lemon eyes line. I love mountains, so this is enjoyable. Good luck in the contest :)
Wood Avatar
August 1, 2017 at 3:52 PM
Thanks Heidi. You are always so supportive. Glad you enjoyed it. -- Dean
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