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Are You A Mouse Or A Mountain Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Matt Caliri Contest Description: Poem on the theme of the perspective of a mountain. First-person narrative, think Kafka.
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Mountainous - there's a joke in there somewhere Funny how I just appeared one day Or at least that's how it feels I've observed others rise and fall Whilst I stay put There's more to me, weight, heaviness I hold the skeletons of thousands My soil fertile with their bodies and brains All that thinking, then endings To keep me engaged, the longest endings help; the most thought goes into them, me I'm gifted with seasonal change, so many of my days frozen, never to the core The only way to enjoy verdancy - contrast of profusion and sparsity To be layered is exquisite, I'm exquisite Particularly with the sun as a backdrop That's the thought, the beauty in death's thought Decomposing whilst composing - no body (or brain) finds that amusing, but I'm here for millennia - I'll work on my delivery Being mostly a graveyard and a place of other fertilising contributions doesn't make me less fun It's a funny slant; needs some crafting into an act It's a thought that was planted a while ago: "Comedian" - I loved it immediately Deadpan seems generally my go to, perhaps black humour: "the final act, you'll die for" More walk ins than worth of mouth, obviously, zero repeat visitors, though some repeat on me Maybe I'm looking to die on stage, maybe that's my fascination Or at least get a heckler - I'd like that, just for the summer season.

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Date: 5/28/2024 12:30:00 AM
Dear DD...you have the most inventive mind...just a thoroughly spellbinding journey into another reality. You have a real talent for ignoring boundaries much to the enjoyment of the reader, good exercise for the imagination...definitely NOT deadpan. A really good poem my friend.... Paul
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Date: 5/29/2024 10:35:00 AM
Thank you Paul - it's for a contest and not my usual ponderings. Just happened to be writing it in a daft mood and let it spin :) thank you for your comment, appreciated
Date: 5/27/2024 11:57:00 AM
This one is definitely a kafkaesque journey from mountain gravitas into the valley of dark humour, perhaps even menippean satire, you have certainly delivered big time on the contest theme, and taken it to higher ground, forgive all these puns, but my mind is blown after reading this one, what an imagination and killer sense of humour you have, now get off the stage, I’m your summer heckler lol! Cheers David
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Date: 5/27/2024 12:27:00 PM
You've outsmarted me and sent me googling - I like that expression (menippean satire), I'm rather partial to being told I have a great imagination and killer sense of humour too to be fair haha (although I'm not sure I've mastered heckler banter) - thanks again David - this comment really cheered me up :)

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