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Moonlight Laugh

Napping on small boat,
adrift in the bay currents,
crimson moon rose enticing.
Red rays in the dark.
A shadow jumped like a fish.
Too indistinct in the darkness.
Did I hear a laugh in the moonlight?
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Proxenos Avatar
August 22, 2022 at 1:44 PM
Hi Victor, a clever humorous poem which reminds me of a camping trip with the boys when most their fishing trips were on an crocodile infested estuary, at night, you can imagine how scared I was until they returned. Hugs and blessings Jennifer.
Fowler Avatar
August 20, 2022 at 6:30 AM
Eerie and fun Victor. :) Love you ending line! Linda
Tor Avatar
August 17, 2022 at 9:08 PM
Such a relationship with the moon you write Victor so clever and thoughtful my friend emjoyed reading...
Ricci Avatar
August 17, 2022 at 12:08 PM
Hello Victor. I see so much beauty within this entry. Even with brevity it speaks with imagery. Thank you for sharing Victor. I hope today was a good day. Love Peace and Blessings now and always. It was an honor seeing this entry. Please remain safe.
Anaya Avatar
August 16, 2022 at 11:04 AM
Stephen Crane comes to mind "A Man Adrift On A Slim Spar" "Your mind is out to sea" is an old idiom to describe one who's mind is playing tricks on him. Voices carry, but laughter--maddening and ghostly. Audio hallucinations makes hard to live with oneself. Love the mystery, Victor!
M  Avatar
August 16, 2022 at 9:37 AM
A scary encounter Victor….glad you survived to tell the story! Ha….enjoyed…Debx
Roper Avatar
August 15, 2022 at 4:37 AM
Enjoyed reading. Blessings friend
Seeker Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 10:42 PM
Another who dun it mystery
Lawless Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 5:46 PM
yep, alone in a small boat in the moonlight every little sound stirs the imagination. Nicely done Victor
U.D Palawon  Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 4:36 PM
I like the sense of humor by the end. Awesome. :) Sunita UPD
Poet Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 2:52 PM
Excellent work, as always, Victor! You have produced a spooky atmosphere that is occasionally broken up by shadows and laughs.
Dietrich Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 11:33 AM
I love this kind of shorter free verse with the awesome last line!!
Buehler Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 10:53 AM
Was it a mermaid or a dream? A beautiful and mysterious verse. :)
George Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 9:02 AM
You have created an eerie experience ! It could be a mermaid or a wraith....! Well written !
Cunningham Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 8:17 AM
The dark certainly plays tricks on your mind Victor. Tom
Kendrick Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 7:39 AM
A mermaid maybe? I enjoyed reading this short one. Sara
Pandit Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 7:06 AM
Moments beautifully captured, Victor. Excellent as always.
Rodrigues Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 5:55 AM
Love this imagery! Easy to take in the sights and sounds in this brief glimpse. Pierces the imagination! Hugs ~ Kim (Fave)
May Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 4:32 AM
A serene moment interrupted by shadows and laughter, Very nicely penned Victor
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