Moon Wave

MOON WAVE

Poseidon drew up from the salty sea,
a silver splash of wave from Earth to Moon.
High was the crest as it arced and fell free,
from the chilled night sky and onto the dune.
The sand danced ribbons across the shore, 
it caught it's breath in the eye of a wave. 
Then it rolled and thundered its silken score, 
and dug a dune song in carving the cave. 
From out of the dark and damp of the hole, 
to slip past the shells and pools from the tide. 
It oozed in white foam to swallow the knoll,
then pulled by the moon to start a new ride.
Full Moon in the night, it prowls like a cat,
to stalk the next swell, give rise, and fall flat.

By Edlynn Nau
© May 28, 2016 

For the Contest: Pin A Sonnet On It
Sponsor: Janis Thompson 
Placement: 5th

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Skat A

Date: 7/17/2016 5:59:00 PM

Edlynn, Great Penned sonnet win.... SKAT

Edlynn Nau
Date: 7/17/2016 7:22:00 PM

Oh Thank you Skat! I found I LOVE writing Sonnets. They are like a dance! Fun! Still going nuts this summer with older family at ages 67, 85, 90 and 102. I hope it gets better so I can read poetry, catch up with all of you, AND WRITE! Sigh! PS needs me to scare up annual membership (and that's a tug right now). I am trying to keep in here. I actually had to remove 4 poems to enter in contests or publications. Odd, isn't that?

Hansteven Selfa

Date: 6/1/2016 6:32:00 AM

A great work all throughout Ed! Congratulations! :) _Hans

Edlynn Nau
Date: 6/1/2016 1:54:00 PM

Thank you Hans for the review! It was indeed a fun one to write but lots of work in getting the movement down. -Edlynn

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/31/2016 9:43:00 AM

Absolutely great, Edlynn. Congrats on your win! Janice

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/31/2016 1:17:00 PM

Ha ha ha! You made me laugh Janice! 0F COURSE you may use Monday as an excuse, or... or... or... what about we go blind writing on these *#€#%¥ devices! Rainy days and Monday's always get me down! THANK YOU for the review and noticing the win. My peers entered some fantastic sonnets and I'm in awe of the judge that had to decide this. I saw at least THREE First prizes. How difficult!

Joyce Johnson

Date: 5/30/2016 8:01:00 PM

This is absolutely lovely and a winner in my book. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/30/2016 8:04:00 PM

Thank you so much Joyce! We are all pleased & I suspect this was very hard to judge.

John Watt

Date: 5/30/2016 6:37:00 PM

Edlynn, lovely nature sonnet... love the references to mythology and the moon and all your descriptive aspects of the seashore and the tides. Beautiful.

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/30/2016 7:09:00 PM

Thank YOU SO MUCH! As you know, I loved yours too! This one must have been very hard to judge. Ain't we got fun!

Beautiful Scars

Date: 5/30/2016 5:55:00 PM

Edlynn, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/30/2016 6:32:00 PM

. . .and to you too! This was fun. I was by to read your sonnet. My favorite part is getting to read new Sonnets!

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 5/30/2016 4:50:00 PM

Edlynn, I can see that you really thought this through....Congratulations on your win Lovely sonnet

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/30/2016 5:25:00 PM

Thank you so much! It was a lot of work but all fun! Thank you for sponsoring us and for your VERY DIFFICULT task! Gosh darn, I wanted to give three First Placements! REALLY TOUGH! I haven't been around but, I will read all of them & leave off a note! Thank you. I love when someone says, just write for this genre!

John Fleming

Date: 5/30/2016 9:22:00 AM

Superbly penned! You certainly demonstrate absolute command over all your words, Edlynn. What fantastic descriptions these are of a waves motion. An undisputed seven! My very best regards. :) john

John Fleming
Date: 5/31/2016 2:44:00 PM

It most certainly did work here, Edlynn! Like Ted Hughes (Poet Laureate) once said: "When writing poetry about a thing, whether it be animate or inanimate, try to think about it from that things perspective". A strange comment perhaps - But not so strange when one thinks carefully about it. My very best regards, Edlynn, as always. :) john

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/30/2016 1:56:00 PM

Oh thank you John! Nothing better that a seven from your very talented peers. I WISH I had the command over words in real life. Ha! We seldom get to mull over thoughts for an hour before speaking! We'd all do so much better if we could! Thank you for coming by and you know I'm so delighted you rode that wave with me. I'm working with kinetics now. We all right the visual, sometime the auditory but, movement is only rarely there. Did it work here?

Paul Callus

Date: 5/29/2016 10:32:00 AM

Having just read your collab with Robert I can easily work out how your muse behaves and dances to a different tune. You sure know how to make waves:) ~ Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/29/2016 12:54:00 PM

Ha ha! Maybe you are detecting the ballet dancer! Good spot! It is a challenge to bring to poetry the kinetic with the challenge of implied movement as well as the auditory or visual. I think usually we give pictures. I try with some effort to get thing moving. Ha ha! Thank you Paul! A huge compliment that you used dance & tune. Ya got me in at least for Sonnets. €;-D

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/29/2016 9:06:00 AM

I am drawn to the moon and the ocean, you have capture both!

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/29/2016 12:49:00 PM

Thanks RICHARD! Me too! Something irresistible about a full moon on the waves at night! I'm so delighted you were able to ride the wave!

Jan Allison

Date: 5/28/2016 6:33:00 PM

such wonderful imagery Edlynn I especially love the final two lines oh so true what a marvellous description of the sea and the pull of the moon:-) hugs Jan xx7

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/28/2016 7:08:00 PM

Thank you JAN and I hope you went for a ride. I am missing Cambria, CA and a favorite beach that I'd love to be on just now! If only I could fly! Ha! Thank you for taking the time to read and share!

CayCay Jennings

Date: 5/28/2016 6:31:00 PM

You just blew me away in a good way! Lovely, intelligent expression broken down to individual elements that create the whole fierce, intense, yet mesmerizing beauty of an ocean swell. Your poem captured what cannot be captured ... 7 ... CayCay (thanks for your continued support and patience - Last night, I read the SF Street one, but in the end I could not bare my mind's visual and ran, so it was excellent.)

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/28/2016 6:44:00 PM

You are the best ever CayCay! You NEVER Rubber Stamp your reviews. This just made my whole weekend! That you became part of the wave or ran from the three men clinging to each other's ankles as they slept round a grate, is exactly my intention. Dance with me, witness the atrocities, let us be AWAKE together. Poetry is the wakes up call and we are the chimes.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/28/2016 5:16:00 PM

At one with the sea. Enchanting Edlynn! #7 ; )

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/28/2016 6:02:00 PM

I was trying to be the wave. I thought if I could think in terms of the ballet, then maybe I could do this? Thank you Connie for stopping in to read. This is a busy weekend for most! You are so thoughtful!

Robert Lindley

Date: 5/28/2016 4:30:00 PM

A great creation and those two verses were fine ones to write on my friend. I am too busy moving this weekend to do my own but will get to it soon. Every verse is a gem.... A7

Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/28/2016 5:59:00 PM

Ugh! MOVE? That is the WORST four letter word I know. I'd rather pay taxes, clean toilets, kill mold, change diapers, than MOVE! I hope for you it is a GOOD move with fun adventures in store. Nice of you to stop to read this Robert. How can you even do that? I should be studying but I'm procrastinating BIG TIME! Thank you for your very kind input.