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Moon Struck - Collaboration

I am the traveller with stones in my coat Made opaque by staying nameless Though dark I am not darkness Swallowing the edges of days, overtaking I rinse my dirty fingers in a painted lake Running tributary off canvas Humpbacks of dull pebbles huddle underfoot As wanting pulls my bones from me A millennia enveloped in sweet pedal caress Undertow to both capture and drag Beneath streams prolonged by a yearning Forever intended to flow back to source Still, waiting for the abrasing escalation When we halt all this and become whole Not just part of a cycle sloughing off Waiting to be bludgeoned, skull-cracked Hoping to meet a fellow traveller With stones in their coat ready to oblige

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David Kavanagh

Date: 3/3/2024 1:57:00 AM

I remember as a child on holiday in Wicklow going to the stream with my parents and family, and those smooth humpback stones underfoot, and my dad telling me the water shaped them, of course I couldn’t comprehend the forces involved, nor the abrasion of time, thanks so much for rekindling that memory, and the thought of one day all becoming whole again, is quite uplifting, a beautiful poem, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/3/2024 2:56:00 PM

Thank you David, collaborations are interesting as the ideas of two people combine on something abstract - it's fascinating experiencing the process with like minded others or indeed very different thinkers. I entered this one into a contest elsewhere but it didn't win and it felt a shame to leave it unseen. Thank you for your comment and shared story.

Vickey Rhymer

Date: 3/2/2024 9:38:00 PM

Wow,this one will be dogeared as it were As it is saying something I cannot quite Comprehend over my own heads chatter but that I intuitively feal I need to hear. Hours and many reads later and contemplating the comments of others.Let he without cast the first stone.Though not a full representation of this scripture is not the word sin synonymous with missing the mark,falling short,being without another application of the principal of being less than the whole .Thought provoking Dilly .

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/3/2024 2:52:00 PM

I've visited the idea of sentience in stone a few times, not sure why - although I suppose they've been around a long time. Poems are there to be interpreted hopefully in many ways, glad you enjoyed it enough to return again. Appreciated x

Paul Willason

Date: 3/2/2024 8:26:00 PM

Quite spellbinding imagery....had to hold onto the page to avoid being carried off...splendid, thought provoking write.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/3/2024 2:49:00 PM

Thank you Paul, it was great to work with another poet who has such skill to elevate what was being written.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 3/2/2024 7:23:00 PM

This is a deep and beautifully written poem.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/3/2024 2:47:00 PM

Glad you liked it Hilda, thank you

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/2/2024 1:27:00 PM

Dear Dilly Dally, your poem takes me on a journey through the unseen depths of existence. Your words create a feeling of longing and resilience, a dance between darkness and light, solitude and connection. The imagery of stones in the coat and the painted lake evoke a sense of weight and release, of transformation and acceptance. Your wonderful poem speaks to the universal human experience of seeking companionship amidst the vastness of uncertainty. It's a profound exploration of the human condition, that in our shared journeys, we find peace and understanding. Thank you for this beautifully evocative piece. - Blessings, Daniel

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/3/2024 2:47:00 PM

Thank you for the beautiful comment Daniel, it's a theme I regularly return to but my collaboration on this occasion allowed the exploration to take different turns. I appreciate your detailed comment and enthusiasm.