Moon and Sun

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9/30/2024 for the JUST BECAUSE Poetry Contest sponsored by John Lawless

The sun and the moon, together, watched over me night and day. In every kind of weather, they'd shine on the place where I play. So, why did the sun hurt the moon, up where she looks down from the sky, as the cracks in her palor shewn, and silvery tears she did cry. I gazed to the sky's lofty vault and watched helplessly as they fell. It must have been my selfish fault, her pieces to the sea, farewell.

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Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/1/2024 3:05:00 PM

Poor moon. It's sure to rise again. I enjoy the surprise ending and the tragic outcome.

David Crandall
Date: 10/1/2024 9:15:00 PM

Thanks Hilda. Yep, the moon and sun seem to be pretty dependable!

David Crandall
Date: 10/1/2024 9:14:00 PM

Thanks Hilda. Yep, the moon and sun seem to be pretty dependable!

Ink Empress

Date: 10/1/2024 12:45:00 PM

“ her pieces to the sea farewell” love that last line and also how you’ve written this dear david! I am a fan of sun and moon poems and how you’ve written here is just brilliant! I especially love the lines “ as the cracks in her palor shewn, and silvery tears she did cry.” so beautiful!! Pleasure reading your work! Sending you light always

David Crandall
Date: 10/1/2024 9:14:00 PM

Thanks for the light, and that for the nice comments. I noticed that you commented on a few poems that I wrote when I was in a certain mood, which doesn't happen too much. I'm glad you liked them.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/1/2024 6:27:00 AM

Oh my. I think John will like this work of a maddened muse. Creative and imaginative. Love it! :)

David Crandall
Date: 10/1/2024 9:12:00 PM

Thanks elle!