Minus Identity, Who am I

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June,26-2024
Minus my Identity Who am I Poetry Contest
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Line of inquiry ‘Minus Identity Who am I’ ‘What a piece of work is a man!’ ……… ……… And yet, to me, what is this quintessence of dust’ (Shakespeare’s Hamlet, Act II, scene 2) From Shakespeare, through Hamlet, It rings down to generations And falls heavily in my ears too. In vain, I attempt to probe into the mystery Nay, the enigma called man, Both in the silence of my solitude, And in the learned circle of friends. (Fool…! Unable to find who you are, Can you venture to say who the other man is?) Man is a jumble of contradictions, I know, a hard nut to crack! So unfathomable, so mysterious At once a Satan and an angel To the outer world I am someone. But in the well-guarded cellars of my privacy Aren’t I different? Hiding my innards to light, as every other man. Am I not a masked player in life’s pantomime! I wonder what’s true to my being And what makes me, the real me. I see contradictions abound in me And my personality, like an ocean is volatile, Sometimes tranquil, sometimes agitated Placid without waves very often, But at times roaring with billows crashing! I am openminded, but hide many secrets. I am instinctively emotional, but mature. I am an extrovert and feel happy in company, But I like to withdraw into loneliness often. I am mostly thoughtful, but tend to overthink. I act confident but am diffident at heart. Though satisfied with what I get, I tend to crave more for the love people give me. I am a poet and an artist, feeding on the encouragement I get And stimulated by internal inspiration. I am never a nosy parker, but curious about things That pique my interest, be it of people or of the world. I am a good listener, but need someone to listen to me. I am easy to get along with, but get easily flustered. I am compassionate, adjustable, loyal and humble. At best I am a child of God, but lets the Satan, Take over me sometimes when my temper rises. How often, I wish to change myself Change some of my characteristic traits But minus my identity, I fear who I will be?

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Date: 11/18/2024 7:10:00 AM
Very well said my friend. You are who you are and that makes you unique.
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Date: 7/2/2024 9:58:00 PM
amazing dear poet, congratulations on your win.
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Date: 7/1/2024 2:02:00 PM
Congrats on your win with this outstanding work,valsa...I would have placed this higher...allbtge best!
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Date: 6/30/2024 4:01:00 PM
Dear valsa, gosh! I really love how you’ve written this poem in the most seamless and sincere manner! I think from what iv read theres alot in common ; like how you’ve described how sometimes you can be withdrawn and alsoo how youv compared yourself to the ocean, sometimes volatile and calm tranquil and also tumultuous! I think most of us do have these traits but do not really express that or are aware of the fact that they are how they are. This truly is a fave for me as it resonates with me and how youv written is truly impressive! Impeccable write! Pleasure reading this! Best wishes
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Date: 6/30/2024 9:50:00 AM
I think you have a great character and at the risk of sounding egotistical, I'm quite OK with mine. Loyalty is a big thing with you, you.have it in abundance, I am loyal also but have been disappointed by some I thought were friends, however, have some wonderful friends on Soup. Wish we loved closer to one another and could talk and listen and listen and talk. I think you have an incredible Identity. I expect your entry to the contest to be highly placed but good luck my friend. Hugs Jennifer
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Date: 6/30/2024 4:08:00 AM
You have executed this entry with such realism. You seem to have a lot of secrets, despite your open-mindedness. When your emotional side is strong and your maturity level is high. You enjoy being around others and are a social person, yet you also appreciate spending time alone. Careful, but prone to overthinking, you are generally. What a conundrum! Hey Valsa, And it's alright. To desire more, to yearn for more. Whether it's water, affection, pride, or solace, it's up to you to create and maintain.
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Date: 6/28/2024 11:16:00 AM
You are paradoxical Dear Valsa. So am I. And that's okay. To want more, to crave more. Whether it's food, love, happiness or comfort. You have done this entry so realistically well. "I am openminded, but hide many secrets. I am instinctively emotional, but mature. I am an extrovert and feel happy in company, But I like to withdraw into loneliness often. I am mostly thoughtful, but tend to overthink." Best wishes for the contest. Cheers.
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Date: 6/26/2024 12:55:00 PM
For sure you do not have any loss of identity, dear Valsa. This is sure to be a winner.
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Date: 6/26/2024 10:30:00 AM
Nice poem from a great poet.
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Date: 6/26/2024 10:29:00 AM
"Am I not a masked player in life’s pantomime!" Very original expression -- profound. "I tend to crave more for the love people give me." Love is indeed what it is all about. "At best I am a child of God, but lets the Satan, Take over me sometimes when my temper rises." We are born double-minded, our spiritual task to be singular in spirit and devotion to God.
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Date: 6/26/2024 8:32:00 AM
WOW!!! What a wonderful write. With a great ending. "Good Luck"  Have a blessed day...........
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Date: 6/26/2024 3:27:00 AM
I think we women have to adapt to change all our lives as to who we are. We have within us all those components of child, teenager, young adult, young bride, young mother, then mother to teens and young adults then grandmother. We have to adjust to each stage and relearn who we are. Good writing. I guess for a contest, reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing part of yourself with us. Sara K
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