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Michael Kisssed Me

michael kissed me held my hand at the movies opened the truck door for me then one night he squatted on one knee my heart dropped as he proposed with tears i agreed then michael kissed me again

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Regina Branham

Date: 6/2/2012 11:55:00 PM

Michael's kiss, held my hand at the movies, opened up the truck door made me agree, when he dropped to one knee and proposed to me - Michael kiss me again! Hey Karen I was tryin to mix up your words a little - It sometimes is better to mix your tone and rhythm - surprise the reader - hold their attention. Each word should hold it's own - try using more verbs - hope this helps

Regina Branham

Date: 6/2/2012 11:53:00 PM

ichael's kiss, held my hand at the movies, opened up the truck door made me agree, when he dropped to one knee and proposed to me - Michael kiss me again! Hey Karen I was tryin to mix up your words a little - It sometimes is better to mix your tone and rhythm - surprise the reader - hold their attention. Each word should hold it's own - try using more verbs - hope this helps

David Williams

Date: 6/2/2012 6:19:00 AM

Karen fantastic, I hope you said yes!..David