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Michael Cheval - Song of a Journey

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Steel should slice through rust The stringing should slice the fingers There's no damage to either Despite the tension Everything is quite perfect I'm the balance, not the weight There is no sign of drag - firmly stationed Eyes stay down, unfought serenity As in this moment there is beauty Fingertips to taut steel Energy exchanged for music Music exchanged for emotion Emotion stilled, somehow The strength of me dissipates on the air Like the tune played A moment can be gone You can wish it away Then the sky eats it up The waves sweep the debris And I'm just there On the shore Holding on still Averting my eyes

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David Kavanagh

Date: 3/25/2024 1:02:00 PM

I never seen this painting before, but it’s absolutely brilliant, a little bit Sirenesque perhaps, love your opening lines sharp, stark, yet beautiful, setting the tone for the whole poem, the balance throughout is quite exquisite, definitely a Dilly Dally inimitable masterpiece, cheers David

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/25/2024 4:11:00 PM

Oh I have my moments ;-)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/25/2024 1:20:00 PM

It's like an alternate version of my first law of thermodynamics limerick :D definitely think the thoughts fed through from that one. You do say the nicest things David :)

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/25/2024 9:02:00 AM

Dear DD, a hauntingly beautiful poem! The imagery of the taut steel strings and the exchange of energy for music is so vivid. I love the paradox of tension and serenity. The ending is particularly striking - the fading music like a moment disappearing, the sky "eating it up." It leaves a sense of melancholic beauty and the bittersweetness of impermanence. Loved It, - Blessings, Daniel

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/25/2024 9:05:00 AM

You're sweet, thank you! Glad the intention came across. Cheval creates such interesting images. I appreciate your commentary