Message In a Bottle

Ordinary wasn't good enough for his love-filled notion So he bottled his message and floated it into deep ocean. Telling her he knew, red rose was her favorite flower Made of sweet memories and petals that never cower, Adorned with his sweet love of heart to heart appeal Destined for heavenly encounter by cupid's secret deal. In a faraway land a couple argued causing a breach When boyfriend split, leaving her alone on a beach. Disappointed she sought refuge from ocean breeze, As evening dimmed and anguish refused to ease. Twilight made a futile attempt to cheer her teary eyes When moon peeked with assurances in distant skies, Seeing the tides reaching their final leg on ocean Delivering the bottle swiftly with bouncing wavy motion. She opened the bottle curiously as angels watched merrily Hanging about to ensure she read every word carefully. Reading cherubic verses, enamored by his sincere plea Embracing heightened elation, she set herself free. Smiling broadly she called him, amid visions of divine sign And he cheered mightily having found his sweet-valentine. January 30, 2018 Placed 2nd: Brian's Choice 7 Contest by Brian Strand Placed 3rd: Best rhyming 2018 contest by John Hamilton Placed 8th in premiere valentine contest by Nayda Ivette Negron
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George Avatar
December 17, 2022 at 3:30 AM
After a trivial squabble, though the lovers drifted apart, the bottle in the message talked to her in audible tongue, how deeply he loved her. This kept all misunderstandings at bay and once more she became his Valentine ! Lovely romantic poem.
Mishra Avatar
May 12, 2020 at 6:42 AM
"Embracing heightened elation, she set herself free"....the beauty of emotions flows throughout your poetry. Congratulations :)
Goldsmith Avatar
May 9, 2020 at 4:38 PM
Congratulations on your win. "A Beautiful Story." If only the bottle could tell where it had sailed. Enjoy your win and day................
Raven Avatar
January 10, 2019 at 2:37 PM
Hi Vijay, I love the romance within your story my friend. The beauty shines in gold my friend, your words painting such a wonderful vision. That message in the bottle, what an excellent poetic gem. Have a wonderful Thursday. Your |friend always....Mike.
S     Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 1:04 PM
Back with Congratulations Vijay :)
Ashley Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 9:49 AM
I love this beautiful and romantic love story, Vijay. Awesome imagery and great rhymes. Such a pleasure to read. Congratulations on your wonderful win..
Canerdy Avatar
February 24, 2018 at 7:38 PM
SO beautiful--deserving of your win, Vijay! Janice
Gauthier Avatar
February 24, 2018 at 4:36 PM
Back with congrats on your win, Vijay. Well done.
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 24, 2018 at 2:42 PM
A lovely story and a wonderful win for you Vijay! Congratulations! I loved this poem!
Hamilton Avatar
February 24, 2018 at 1:45 PM
Great rhymes Vijay, congrats on a top placement!
Gauthier Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 1:52 PM
Beautiful delivery of a romantic scene. Well done, Vijay, and congrats on your win.
Pandit Avatar
February 6, 2018 at 6:38 AM
Thank you Line.
Haight Avatar
February 3, 2018 at 2:45 PM
Such a lovely, well-written poem, Vijay. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest! Sandra
Pandit Avatar
February 3, 2018 at 3:12 PM
Thank you Sandra.
Sands Avatar
February 2, 2018 at 4:18 PM
Congratulations for your win Vijay :)
Pandit Avatar
February 2, 2018 at 4:37 PM
Thank you Heidi.
Gentile Avatar
February 2, 2018 at 7:51 AM
Congrats on your placement, Vijay Happy Friday!!
Pandit Avatar
February 2, 2018 at 9:04 AM
Thank you Mike.
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 10:50 PM
I am so happy to see you on the list Vijay! Back to congratulate you! : )
Pandit Avatar
February 2, 2018 at 9:04 AM
Thank you Connie.
Roper Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 8:31 PM
Vijay, congratulations on this lovely piece :)
Pandit Avatar
February 2, 2018 at 9:03 AM
Thank you Eve.
Williams Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 6:38 AM
What a beautifully Valentine's day story you have woven in such romantic verses. Which girl wouldn't wish to receive such a message in the bottle. All the best in the contest Vijay - It's got to be a FAVE...Maria
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 7:21 AM
Enjoyed reading your comments Maria..much appreciated.
Swartz Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 11:56 PM
Great poem with great ending Vijay! Good luck in the contest!
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 6:11 AM
Thank you James.
Y. Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 8:02 PM
WoW! Vijay , I found this piece to be sooo romantic and well written. It is a good write for the Valentine's contest. It looks like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 6:10 AM
Enjoyed reading your comments..thank you Alexis.
S     Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 5:53 PM
Ahhh beautiful and romantic! I would love to find such a lovely message in a bottle :) Best of luck in the contest Vijay! ~Judy
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 6:09 AM
Thank you for your kind words Judy.
May Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 4:40 PM
A lovely ending to this romantic poem Vijay...best wishes
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 6:09 AM
Thank you Joseph.
Williams Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 1:46 PM
Excellent Rhyme and passionate write. Reading it was certainly a great delight. Keep up the excellent form and writes. Blessings amigo.
Pandit Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 3:14 PM
Thank you Ronald.
Andresen Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 1:39 PM
- Vijay, you filled this bottle with romance and love - Beautiful - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pandit Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 3:13 PM
Thank you Anne-Lise.
Lamoureux Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 8:36 AM
Romance in a bottle I love it!
Pandit Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 3:13 PM
Thank you Richard.
Dietrich Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 12:25 AM
ahh, very sweet and with such a happy ending, Vijay. Just right for the Valentine contest.
Pandit Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 6:14 AM
Thank you Andrea.
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