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Memory Lane

I took a trip down your memory lane searched for myself but I was nowhere to be found It seemed like you erased me left me hidden beyond the shadows rewrote your feelings silenced our meaning Everything looked the same your mothers house the swing the tree where I carved our names the rose that I picked from the garden it somehow was held in anothers hand He was taller more handsome hair blowing in the breeze I felt lost as I fell to my knees how could you forget me with such ease You more beautiful than I remember A gorgeous angel born in September Black hair and Raven eyes seeing you made my spirit rise I listened as you whispered his name how could it be, mine was the same was this all some silly game Within your memory was an enhanced me the two of us there kissing under that tree On memory lane I'm who you wanted me to be Trying something new, I reduced each stanza by one line.

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Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 5/20/2014 5:40:00 PM

This is very beautiful Richard. It was always you. Sometimes it is nice to take those trips, but make sure you come back. Thanks for sharing.... Lucilla

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/20/2014 6:39:00 PM

Thanks Lucilla. ;0)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/19/2014 3:02:00 PM

If only and all would be right..Enjoyed reading the emotive memory lane that you penned..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/20/2014 10:40:00 AM

Thanks Sarah

Kelly Deschler

Date: 5/19/2014 1:24:00 PM

We shouldn't live in the past, but it is nice to revisit, once in awhile. Even though, memory lane can be a sad place.... A very nice write from you, Richard! This would have been a good entry in my last contest, "Just Down The Road".

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/20/2014 10:42:00 AM

Many have taken up permanent residency in their yesterdays. Thanks for the visit and comment.

Mel Merrill

Date: 5/19/2014 1:49:00 AM

Hi Richard. I noticed that. Very clever, my friend. Just dropping by to say hello :)...mel

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/19/2014 8:03:00 AM

Hi Mel, I'm glad you dropped by.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/18/2014 3:53:00 PM

by the way, I have an interesting form that uses decreasing lines AND decreasing words at the same time. I want to feature it in one of upcoming contests. I have a few ideas brewing at the moment!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/18/2014 3:52:00 PM

wowowow, this is the one my poem inspired in you?? I am wowed as you can see. This is picture perfect,Richard. A fave on thee!!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/19/2014 8:00:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, I am always amazed how a word or a comment can blossom into a poem. You never know when inspiration will strike.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 5/18/2014 7:35:00 AM

Everyone remembers differently and moments that loom large in our minds are often only a blip in someone else's. I love the way you traveled down another lane in this poem.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/18/2014 8:51:00 AM

Thanks Monterey. Hugs Rick.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 5/18/2014 5:07:00 AM

love this Rick memories are very selective things we just remember what we want and push the rest aside lol hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/18/2014 8:52:00 AM

At times that helps us survive. Thanks for the visit.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/17/2014 7:51:00 PM

It's fun to experiment glad to see you enjoying yourself. Light & Love

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/17/2014 10:11:00 AM

You have taken me to the past, as if I were watching it all unfold with you. So melancholy, yet so beautifully sad. I love this side of your poetry! (my kind of poem) Well done, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/17/2014 12:30:00 PM

Thanks Carrie, Andrea had written a poem and talked about memory lane, a few days later I started to think what it might be like to travel down someone else's memory lane. That was the birth of this little story.

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 5/17/2014 8:50:00 AM

Unique, poignant write Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/17/2014 8:54:00 AM

Thanks Keith.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/17/2014 1:58:00 AM

Richard, I noticed that about halfway through your poem sounded more like rhyme. I was wondering if you wrote part of this and then picked it up again later? It doesn't really matter. The way you reduced each stanza by one line WORKS! I enjoyed your poem and applaud your creativity! Excellent! a 7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/17/2014 7:17:00 AM

No I wrote it at one sitting. If you read some of my other free form poems you will see that I often switch into rhyme part way through. I'm not sure why, it is just some thing that I do. Thanks for the comment, curiosity and the Seven.

Leon Enriquez

Date: 5/16/2014 11:57:00 PM

Dear Richard: Now that's memory lane for us. Lovely tale. Nice read my friend. Leon

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/17/2014 7:17:00 AM

Thanks Leon.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 5/16/2014 7:29:00 PM

wow! i wouldn't have realized what you did with the format had you not pointed it out and it's quite brilliant! i enjoyed the poem very much even without knowing that...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/17/2014 7:21:00 AM

What a great comment, you are kind. Thanks for your thoughtful visit ilene.

Jan Allison

Date: 5/16/2014 5:04:00 PM

Loved the poem loved the format Richard. Hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2014 6:12:00 PM

Thanks Jan

Faye Gibson

Date: 5/16/2014 4:44:00 PM

Hello, Richard. Like your new form; like the content very much.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2014 6:12:00 PM

Thanks, just having fun playing with words.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/16/2014 4:21:00 PM

What is the name of your new form? Lovely! Memory lane can be a pain. Now is reality. .... make your own pretty lane. She's the looser! Handsome is as handsome does. ..... In this case.... you sure are handsome! Good night from Bensheim, Germany!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/16/2014 6:17:00 PM

Eileen, so nice to get a visit from Germany. Two days to your Birthday! I hope you have a great time celebrating. I read your Dolphin poem, I will comment when I have a bit more time. In this poem her memory of me was idealized it was only at the end that I figured it out. So much better than being forgotten.