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Melbourne

A pathway along the river
leads to where its waters widen
into the bay, an armada of small boats 
tug on mooring lines and beyond,
rising up out of a reflected sky,
the city sends golden spires
high into the evening air.

It's more than just a place, a city
compounded of asphalt, concrete
and plate glass, parklands with trees
from countries overseas that read
the changing seasons with green,
red and yellow. Sprawling suburbs, 
cafes and coffee, all just a part 
of a greater whole where I live 
and is home to me.

Not some sugary, thick spill 
of a patriotism born of a shallow pride
is evoked here, no boast of better
but a calm, silent sense
of connection to the spirit of the soil
and what grows here, what is built
upon its spread and more, those I love 
who walk across its breadth.

The soul must have a space
to house its presence in this world,
somewhere to relate to, to grow in,
be part of and after being away,
to return to and rest. There must be
something sacred to nurture 
in the cradle of its ground, a love 
that holds back the harm of greed 
and the elevation of the self.
There are other places, sure, equal
if not better, some that have 
more charm or come near,
but I am thankful 
that I draw my breath here.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Kavanagh  Avatar
June 5, 2024 at 9:39 AM
Hard to put one’s finger on that X factor we find in a place that feels just right, still you’ve managed it here without grandiosity, a sedate contentment exudes off your poem into the reader’s psyche, hope I find it myself someday, I’m almost there but never quite, super poem! Cheers David
Willason Avatar
June 6, 2024 at 1:38 AM
Writing such poems comes with some risk...can easily enter into cringe territory...glad to hear that it maintained a disciplined tone. Value your trusted feedback David. Indeed count myself fortunate to have a place where the vibes are aligned and offer such pleasant surrounds. Take care my friend.
M  Avatar
June 5, 2024 at 7:01 AM
Paul l don't have a deep poetic explanation or words to tell you how your poetry makes me feel all l can say is your words evoke a strong relatability, real emotion and connection….l just get it!! It just grabs me and takes me away! The last stanza in this poem “Oh my” did you read my mind then write it down with your incredible wordsmith gift!! Haha! In saying all that….l didn’t like this poem hehe!! Im so cheeky l know….its that wicked humour again!! Amazing write again my friend! Debx
Willason Avatar
June 6, 2024 at 1:21 AM
Quite moved by your comments Deb...thankyou for such positive support. Made my day. The photo was taken by my wife from a place about a block away at the end of the street, a short walk. Very fotunate to be surrounded by such scenery all within walking distance. Take care my friend.
M  Avatar
June 5, 2024 at 11:13 AM
Paul is that a photo you took in Melbourne in the area you live?? Debx
Lane Avatar
June 5, 2024 at 5:28 AM
I feel like Dorothy Gale from Kansas... I love to travel but always grateful to return home. We need a safe haven to rest our souls, a cradle in which we were rocked and feel comfortable enough for peaceful sleep. "...Sugary... patriotism born of a shallow pride." Vundabar!
Willason Avatar
June 6, 2024 at 1:14 AM
Nice to have such a place...a safe haven from the wear and tear of modern life, or at least a refuge offering temporary reprieve. Always good to get an informed take on a poem, value your input and support dear Lin....
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