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Melancholy Memory

on a stiff mattress in the camper trailer, I couldn't see the stars just ceiling... a long camping trip with too many board games, nothing worthy of note, but a thought: "What if you're cancer claimed you 'for I returned?" the loud storm did nothing for my mood... I tried to be brave for grandma slept with me; suppressed weeping due to thunder heads... I called my friend up, said, "Wanna chill?". He said, "I have something I must tell you first." For the Melancholy Memory Contest.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 3/20/2016 12:24:00 PM
Of course I am drawn to the title... ;) I am really glad I read this, Timothy. This is absolutely superb. Third stanza kills me...the stiff mattress, the suppressed weeping, and the storm certainly adds to the tension and perturbing thought..a sad moment in time, Timothy. Thank you for sharing. This intuition or premonition or instinct(whatever it was) is special, must have been shocking. Always, Laura
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/21/2016 6:48:00 PM
it was a shock, but I never told my friend about the premonition .... you have such great perception.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/21/2016 6:47:00 PM
Hey Laura! This was an odd moment for me ... several years ago I had a premonition (you could call it) of a friend of mine's mom dying of cancer (we knew she was dying, but didn't know how long) ... during a stormy night in the woods, that feeling came to me, for whatever reason, that she died. When I returned home and hung out with my best friend, he broke the news to me that it did happen ...
Date: 10/24/2014 9:19:00 AM
superb piece of timothy
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 10/24/2014 10:48:00 AM
Maybe not the most "bright" spot in my memories. But it will always stick with me...
Date: 6/8/2013 11:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning poem.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/8/2013 12:04:00 PM
Thank you Monterey!
Date: 6/6/2013 8:48:00 PM
Timothy , a nice winning poem. *Congratulations in Constance "Melancholy Memory" contest. always~ LINDA
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/7/2013 12:12:00 AM
Thanks Linda! It was an interesting contest...
Date: 6/4/2013 5:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/4/2013 10:39:00 PM
Thanks for stopping by Joyce!
Date: 6/4/2013 12:42:00 PM
Congratulations, Tim: You are so perceptive. SuZ
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 6/4/2013 10:38:00 PM
Thanks Suzanne! Much appreciated :)
Date: 5/24/2013 7:55:00 PM
Hi Tim, I have returned, been away on work trip, no idea where to start with yours now, you post so many lol. I'll catch up eventually. Hope your keeping well. Good luck in this contest, a good write here.Take care, Richard
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/24/2013 11:02:00 PM
I've been wondering where you were! Glad to have you back :) I post three a day so I don't blame anyone for feeling overwhelmed... lol. I'm doing well and I hope to see you around the boards!
Date: 5/15/2013 7:17:00 AM
Sorry to hear this was a real story. You certainly captured it well. I hope they recovered.
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Date: 5/14/2013 9:48:00 AM
Timothy, what a scintillating read. Congrats on your premium membership!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/14/2013 2:01:00 PM
Thanks Ndaba! It was because I won on the Worst Poem contest with my lyric Drunk Chicken... can't exactly say I'm proud of that one... LOL! Glad you enjoyed this one :)
Date: 5/14/2013 8:40:00 AM
Wow, this poem struck me honestly and deeply towards the end. Melancholy memory indeed. Wish you the best in the contest, Timothy! Well done!!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/14/2013 2:00:00 PM
Thank you Caleah! The memory refers to a premonition I had of someone dying... when I got back from the dull camping trip it actually ended up happening! It gave me a weird depression feeling to say the least...

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