Melancholia

It seems the rain is coming fast for me again— The winter ice is drenched with more space to freeze; Before and behind shadows, the clouds blind play child, And the moon's ring is further from maiden fingers. The winter ice is drenched with more space to freeze, While chimes are shaky and wile, And the moon's ring is further from maiden fingers; For the gloom don of outpouring time. While chimes are shaky and wile, Before and behind shadows, the clouds blind play child, For the gloom don of outpouring time— It seems the rain is coming fast for me again.

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Silent One

Date: 1/1/2024 5:23:00 AM

The vivid imagery in your poem paints a picture of the changing seasons and the relentless passage of time. The phrases like 'winter ice,' 'clouds blind play child,' and 'moon's ring' evoke a rich visual landscape.. There's a subtle sense of nostalgia in your words, as if reflecting on the cyclical nature of time brings a mix of emotions. It captures the bittersweet beauty of change and the passage of seasons...

Valsa George

Date: 12/31/2023 9:22:00 PM

Great Pantoum dear Paige. You have accomplished a beautiful task of writing a pantoum with remarkable skill. Have a happy New Year, dear poet friend !

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/30/2023 9:24:00 PM

Oh my, this is an incredible pantoum that depicts so many vulnerable emotions hued with poignant shades.. The imageries that you've painted here reflect a profound aura of sadness. I especially like the use of 'moon'.. My favourite muse, as always.. "The winter ice is drenched with more space to freeze", "And the moon's ring is further from maiden fingers", "While chimes are shaky and wile" Absolutely stunning, dear Paige.. I loved reading this, it's so soulful..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/30/2023 11:13:00 AM

I really liked the image of the moons ring further from the maiden's finger. So cool

Ink Empress

Date: 12/30/2023 1:26:00 AM

This is such a poignant and deeply heartfelt poem that depicts so many emotions using nature and seasons to deliver your thoughts in the form of pantoum, i especially felt the line “ It seems the rain is coming fast for me again” also “ While chimes are shaky and wile,“ soul stirring! Pleasure reading your work always. Sending you light always

Joseph May

Date: 12/30/2023 12:50:00 AM

A wintry scene with a persistent rain, Very nicely penned

Mat Ignacio

Date: 12/29/2023 7:35:00 PM

an absolute pleasure the phrasings in this - worth multiple readings to appreciate the deeper art embedded within