Eric Boddie Poet Monorhyme

Make It Count

line count and word number are equal in this selection....

"Make It Count"
by:  Eric L. Boddie

A
Man may
Come to play
But if you say
Oh no baby, not today
Do you think he would stay
Or would he go so far away
In search of another lover he could lay
Doing everything associated with rolling in that infamous hay
And if push came to shove, maybe he would pay
To relieve all the stress stemming from your hips' distant sway
Because something must give, there are more than fifty shades of gray
That's common knowledge to the freaks and all those upon which they prey
And once you learn them all, I promise your lover will never ever stray
But if you miss just a single one, then you may experience that dreadful day
Where you lose it all so try to find True Love and remember to always Pray

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John Michaels May 14, 2017 at 6:33 PM Interesting and clever write! Very well done! Regards, John.

Lena Smith Carter August 9, 2015 at 9:10 AM Great format--When placed this way, line length, rhyme, word count, etc., are all important to the ultimate chosen structure of the poem. Great insight! Terrific read. Eric Boddie August 30, 2015 at 1:59 PM thank you so much lena....when the idea of this hit me, I just had to pick up then pen....;)

Anindya Mohan Tagore August 4, 2015 at 10:59 PM Lovely write & Congrats.... Bobby Eric Boddie August 4, 2015 at 11:09 PM much appreciated bobby....

Tim Smith August 4, 2015 at 3:45 AM Stopping back with Congratulations on being featured today Eric Boddie August 4, 2015 at 9:24 AM thanks tim....much appreciated....

Kp Nunez August 4, 2015 at 1:42 AM Good point! It could be said either way...and such a nice form too...Congratulations on having your poem chosen as POTD! Kim Eric Boddie August 4, 2015 at 9:23 AM thank you so much....but I gotta stay at it though....;)

Yolanda Scott August 3, 2015 at 11:07 PM Awesome job!!! Congratulations on poem of the day!!! You are so deserving of it!!! Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 11:20 PM it is really touching since I have only been here a week....that's true commitment to the word....and thank you for the great comment....;)

Poet Destroyer A August 3, 2015 at 11:02 PM of course this is poem of the day, You are awesome like that and you know it. Congratulations.... LINDA Poet Destroyer A August 3, 2015 at 11:10 PM :) Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 11:07 PM thank you linda....and I know how good I am, but I am really no better than anyone else who pours their hearts on the paper....;)

Constance La France August 3, 2015 at 8:14 PM Eric, congratulations on having this awesome poem selected as Poem Of The Day, enjoy the honor Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 8:57 PM thank you bw.....it is an awesome honor and I am thoroughly flattered....;)

Tim Smith August 3, 2015 at 4:21 PM Congrats eric on having your work featured today...cheers Tim Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 4:35 PM thank you tim....but I would be much happier if they helped just one Live better....

Anne-Lise Andresen August 3, 2015 at 12:45 PM - Eric, congratulations on your p.o.t.d. !! - Best wishes :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 3:05 PM thank you so much.....and know that my eyes have been touched....by the words within your heart....I am glad your pen found them for they are truly art....;)

Eileen Manassian August 3, 2015 at 9:58 AM I'm so impressed how you kept that end rhyme going while so effortlessly getting your message across. Very impressive! Congrats on being POTD. Welcome to the soup. Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 3:14 PM you should read "Penetration" then....it was so much harder....lol....but thank you so much.....;)

Alexis Y. August 3, 2015 at 9:54 AM Eric, this is a well written piece. I heard your powerful message loud and clear. Congratulations on getting the poem of the day:-)Alexis Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 3:02 PM thank yioiu alexis, and I have just been exposed to your talent, but I intend to continue on....;)

Emilia Lasarus August 3, 2015 at 5:16 AM This is a great piece of poem that i enjoyed reading today. Very true, one must remember to always pray... (so as not to become a prey!) Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 2:53 PM so very true emilia....so very true....

Afolabi Muideen August 3, 2015 at 4:14 AM I love the form of your write, it always makes me smile, so much funny, but truth. I'm fav this beautiful piece............A.M. Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 2:50 PM thank you so much afolabi....this came as a total surprise to me since I have been gone all day....

Jan Allison August 3, 2015 at 4:02 AM love the form you used and the great message - many congrats on poem of the day:-) hugs jan xx Jan Allison August 3, 2015 at 2:47 PM :-) congrats xxx Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 2:46 PM I just now saw it and I am so flattered.... Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 2:42 PM what do you mean.....I don't know anything about poem of the day....

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 3, 2015 at 1:41 AM Eric, I like the format of your poem, the message etched within the lines!!! thoughtful and real! Witty!!!and lil bit funny but good!like the shifts of emotions! great!~Olive Eloisa =) Eric Boddie August 3, 2015 at 2:40 PM thank you olive, and I hope you know you are one of my favorite writers here....I Love the visual display of your mind....;)

April Walter Skyy August 2, 2015 at 7:43 PM Please excuse me expression but your a freak!!! LOL Eric Boddie August 2, 2015 at 8:35 PM why would i mind the truth....lol

Lycia Harding August 2, 2015 at 1:44 PM Nice advice. Heh heh Eric Boddie August 2, 2015 at 2:37 PM I hope you take it to heart....for your sake....;)

Yolanda Scott August 2, 2015 at 1:26 AM You made it count my poet friend!!! Another beautiful write by a talented man!!! Eric Boddie August 2, 2015 at 9:22 AM just a lil something I tried.....I am glad you liked it....;)

Magneeta Sojourner August 1, 2015 at 6:48 PM Eric those words jump right off the screen. Is it ok to read this at a poetry reading meeting I go to? Eric Boddie August 1, 2015 at 7:27 PM I don't mind but it is nowhere near the best on my page....lol

Poet Destroyer A August 1, 2015 at 3:43 PM Hello, Eric, with a good spirit. Like I~ How nice it is to meet another Libra. Like I! ... I'm here enjoying your poem. Make it count. It's almost a heartache. When it's too late to make it and break it. I have a sweet love, who I love even more, in these moments. We did part, for the moment. However, our visions are together, he and I are true. No reason to play, when the other is away. The will of one will only STRAY if it was not meant to be. Enjoyed the poem.... LINDA Eric Boddie August 1, 2015 at 3:56 PM are you trying to steal my comment style....lol....but I really enjoyed your comment linda....and you know us libras are well balanced with everything....but I will tip the scales in your favor always because as a woman you look a LOT better than me....;)

Constance La France August 1, 2015 at 10:31 AM Eric, admire the form and the words of advice, the phrase, make it count reminds me of the movie Titanic, Jack said that to Rose referring to life and thanks for visiting my poetry with wonderful comments Eric Boddie August 1, 2015 at 10:36 AM that's the Beauty of poetry....it touches each of us differently and independently....I named it make it count because the word count for each line is one more than the previous like simple counting....but thank you for your kind words bw....;)