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Magical Mist

Darkness descends as the smoky mist drifts along 
Swirling around on a gentle breeze
Creeping silently like a stalking cat
Enveloping everything it touches 
Billowing gently in the weeping willow trees
Veiled in secrecy it lingers mid air
Creating ghostly shadows with menacing forms
Producing diamond like dew on a spider’s web

Jan Allison
23rd August 2014
Written for Through the Mist Contest
Sponsored by Nette Onclaud
~Awarded 6th Place~

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Robin Davis

Date: 9/6/2014 7:40:00 AM

Jan A creative and descriptive write with so much imagery and meaning it captivates the reader. Thank you for the great comment on my My Nicknames poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/6/2014 10:52:00 AM

Thank you as ever for your comments Robin you always inspire me so much! Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/31/2014 11:28:00 PM

the cat did it making this piece semi-abstract and different, jan.. thank you for gracing my contest and congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/1/2014 1:03:00 AM

many thanks Nette you inspire me to try my hardest:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Angie Thomas

Date: 8/24/2014 11:59:00 AM

Awesome imagery... I was enraptured through and through...

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2014 6:00:00 PM

Thanks Angie i am learning so much being here:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/24/2014 12:35:00 AM

beautiful imagery Jan great pen gl in contest hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2014 2:19:00 AM

Thank you so much comment Shadow :-) Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/23/2014 10:41:00 PM

Jan...this is an ethereal feel to this. Absolutely fantastic, woman. Your prowess as a poetess is clearly see here...No mist can hide that. Love the weeping willow...Also, that is one busy spider...more than one web, eh? ;) THAT gives the shivers...arachnophobia and all! Hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2014 2:18:00 AM

Oh Eileen you are too kind:-) I feel I am growing and learning every day and there is something about the challenges Nette sets that inspires to try hard with my imagery and creativity- I just hope she likes the scene I have portrayed:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Jamie Turner

Date: 8/23/2014 9:54:00 PM

this is a good one

Jan Allison
Date: 8/24/2014 2:14:00 AM

thanks for dropping by Jamie:-) Hugs Jan xx

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 8/23/2014 5:42:00 PM

Weeping Willows, When I was a kid, there were two outside my bedroom window. Very creepy in the full moon and fog . Good Luck with the contest, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2014 5:59:00 PM

ooh love the new avatar Jerry that is so cute. Hugs jan xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2014 5:44:00 PM

Thanks Jerry for the lovely comment - I agree they are quite haunting especially when it is breezy> Hugs jan xxxx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/23/2014 5:05:00 PM

Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2014 5:16:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Sara:-) Hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/23/2014 3:30:00 PM

Ah great imagery Jan......hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2014 3:49:00 PM

U got mail lol:-) xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2014 3:42:00 PM

we should write some footles together! Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith
Date: 8/23/2014 3:36:00 PM

Slowly but the rain hasn't helped...maybe I'll do some funny heartache footles...lol

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2014 3:34:00 PM

Aww thanks Tim hope your day has got better and better my friend:-) Hugs as ever Jan xxx

Vassilis Comporozos

Date: 8/23/2014 3:24:00 PM

Excellent imagery. Creating ghostly shadows with menacing forms: It really evokes such feelings, your poem, I mean. Producing diamond like dew on a spider’s webs: What a nice poetic image....

Jan Allison
Date: 8/23/2014 3:27:00 PM

Thank you so much for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx