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LOVE'S WHAT IT'S ALL ABOUT - Collaboration with White Wolf and Space Cadet

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As Space Cadet in the comments already points out: follow the making of this lyric on our blog: The Poetry Brigade of Wayward Flowers

http://thepoetrybrigadeofwaywardflowers.blogspot.com/2017/01/rap-second-draft-up-and-being-edited.html

This is not the final version yet.

SECOND DRAFT

quite a shame, try to treat love like a game,
mother never said -- ya could of been bolder
only thing left you got’s cold, your icy shoulder
come on like an avalanche, snap like a tree branch
gave someone love, just didn’t say it then
on your knees for no one to please, when

I wonder if you knew love didn’t flow

the way ya knew when you use to show, and
spread your wings, screamed 
Love’s Obscene! again and again
you soon found out, taking to give nothing
leaves nothing to gain?

car ride beside the guy next door 
is now a baby's cry every time she awakes on the floor
nothing short of a shame or for what for 
Spring only has her love growing in spite of your doubt 
But you'll soon find out, that love is what it’s all about.

Spring only has one love growing older, wonder why

mama never reveals your cold shoulder no more
nothing short of a shame, not so much a game
time got you an icy red-spot blizzard, hear 
your snowstorm avalanche snap the tree branch

don't tell some one ya love them and leave just a name

Februari 6, 2017
White Wolf
Space Cadet
Darren White

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FIRST DRAFT
It’s quite a shame, how you treat love as a game,
Your Mother never told you that ya could of been bolder,
The only thing you’ve got is an icy cold spot,
Ya come on like an avalanche but snap like a tree branch,
When you tell some one ya love them but just can’t say when,
You’re like Summer on its knees with no one to please.
I wonder if you know that your love doesn’t flow,
The way that it should, do you know you could,
You spread your wings and scream, that love is just obscene,

But you will soon find out, that love is what it’s all about.
Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about
Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about

You ride your car like ya ride the guy next door
He yells like a baby every time you make him
Come on, you're a witch, you make this guy twitch
Like a jerky twerky perky pig before it's getting eaten
But you make me feel like I'm beaten.... yeah beaten

But you will soon find out, that love is what it’s all about.
Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about
Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about

Nothing short of a shame, love not so much a game,
Your mama never told you that you got a cold shoulder?
The only thing YOU got is an icy cold spot,
A blizzard, snowstorm an avalanche but snap like a tree branch,
Don't tell some one ya love them but just can’t say when,
You’re like Spring on its knees, only itself to please.
I wonder if ya know that your love doesn’t flow,
The way that it should, Do you even think you could?,
You spread your wings and scream, that love is just obscene...

But you will soon find out, that love is what it’s all about.
Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about
Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about

***

January 18, 2017
White Wolf
Darren White

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 2/15/2017 1:01:00 AM
I am having the second draft up here too, as well as on the blog.
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Date: 2/8/2017 8:54:00 AM
http://thepoetrybrigadeofwaywardflowers.blogspot.com/2017/01/rap-second-draft-up-and-being-edited.html
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Date: 1/23/2017 1:30:00 PM
Love it, fellows. Dig it. - Wesley C
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Darren White
Date: 1/26/2017 8:51:00 AM
Found it. Will work on it back home :)
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Space Cadet
Date: 1/25/2017 11:39:00 PM
see email
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Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 11:30:00 PM
Join in Wes :) Let's work this out!
Date: 1/18/2017 1:26:00 AM
Gee WiZ, that was quick, Duir! I'm having a few Dolce Rosso's right now. Love what you have done to this bro! All we need now is a DJ and a rap beat! Haha.
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White Wolf
Date: 1/18/2017 1:37:00 AM
Haha, I love the way your mind works!
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Darren White
Date: 1/18/2017 1:28:00 AM
Add your Dolce Rosso's to the poem man :D