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LOVE'S WHAT IT'S ALL ABOUT - Collaboration with White Wolf and Space Cadet

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As Space Cadet in the comments already points out: follow the making of this lyric on our blog: The Poetry Brigade of Wayward Flowers

http://thepoetrybrigadeofwaywardflowers.blogspot.com/2017/01/rap-second-draft-up-and-being-edited.html

This is not the final version yet.

SECOND DRAFT quite a shame, try to treat love like a game, mother never said -- ya could of been bolder only thing left you got’s cold, your icy shoulder come on like an avalanche, snap like a tree branch gave someone love, just didn’t say it then on your knees for no one to please, when I wonder if you knew love didn’t flow the way ya knew when you use to show, and spread your wings, screamed Love’s Obscene! again and again you soon found out, taking to give nothing leaves nothing to gain? car ride beside the guy next door is now a baby's cry every time she awakes on the floor nothing short of a shame or for what for Spring only has her love growing in spite of your doubt But you'll soon find out, that love is what it’s all about. Spring only has one love growing older, wonder why mama never reveals your cold shoulder no more nothing short of a shame, not so much a game time got you an icy red-spot blizzard, hear your snowstorm avalanche snap the tree branch don't tell some one ya love them and leave just a name Februari 6, 2017 White Wolf Space Cadet Darren White *** FIRST DRAFT It’s quite a shame, how you treat love as a game, Your Mother never told you that ya could of been bolder, The only thing you’ve got is an icy cold spot, Ya come on like an avalanche but snap like a tree branch, When you tell some one ya love them but just can’t say when, You’re like Summer on its knees with no one to please. I wonder if you know that your love doesn’t flow, The way that it should, do you know you could, You spread your wings and scream, that love is just obscene, But you will soon find out, that love is what it’s all about. Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about You ride your car like ya ride the guy next door He yells like a baby every time you make him Come on, you're a witch, you make this guy twitch Like a jerky twerky perky pig before it's getting eaten But you make me feel like I'm beaten.... yeah beaten But you will soon find out, that love is what it’s all about. Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about Nothing short of a shame, love not so much a game, Your mama never told you that you got a cold shoulder? The only thing YOU got is an icy cold spot, A blizzard, snowstorm an avalanche but snap like a tree branch, Don't tell some one ya love them but just can’t say when, You’re like Spring on its knees, only itself to please. I wonder if ya know that your love doesn’t flow, The way that it should, Do you even think you could?, You spread your wings and scream, that love is just obscene... But you will soon find out, that love is what it’s all about. Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about Ya, ya, ya soon find out, love's what it's all about *** January 18, 2017 White Wolf Darren White

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Date: 2/15/2017 1:01:00 AM
I am having the second draft up here too, as well as on the blog.
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Date: 2/8/2017 8:54:00 AM
http://thepoetrybrigadeofwaywardflowers.blogspot.com/2017/01/rap-second-draft-up-and-being-edited.html
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Date: 1/23/2017 1:30:00 PM
Love it, fellows. Dig it. - Wesley C
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Darren White
Date: 1/26/2017 8:51:00 AM
Found it. Will work on it back home :)
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Space Cadet
Date: 1/25/2017 11:39:00 PM
see email
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Darren White
Date: 1/23/2017 11:30:00 PM
Join in Wes :) Let's work this out!
Date: 1/18/2017 1:26:00 AM
Gee WiZ, that was quick, Duir! I'm having a few Dolce Rosso's right now. Love what you have done to this bro! All we need now is a DJ and a rap beat! Haha.
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White Wolf
Date: 1/18/2017 1:37:00 AM
Haha, I love the way your mind works!
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Darren White
Date: 1/18/2017 1:28:00 AM
Add your Dolce Rosso's to the poem man :D