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deep sigh ... expels sadness picture window filled with city lights, waltzing the park trundles out below like a black tongue, tasting ... lights there, too, scattered like fireflies 'til they meld into more sparkled structure breast of metropolis, bejeweled dangling upward to tickle heaven i oft' take it for granted but it steals breath ... when considered enough to help me forget, briefly ... your empty champagne glass on the table our song, haunting me delicately the cigarette with lipstick stains sputtering its last like the night ... like us. ~ 3rd Place ~ in the "Strand Choice H, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Juliet Ligon

Date: 3/17/2020 9:33:00 PM

Vivid descriptions. Well thought out.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/18/2020 12:37:00 AM

Thank you, Juliet.

John Watt

Date: 3/17/2020 1:27:00 PM

Another great evocative write from the Bard; love the arc from city lights to a love-light gone dark. Also the line "the park trundles out below like / a black tongue, tasting ..." I see that in the pic. Congrats on your win ~ John

John Watt
Date: 3/18/2020 12:41:00 AM

But if not grasped instantly, your writes are ALWAYS worth a second lap. Always.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/18/2020 12:37:00 AM

Many kind thanks to you, Sir John - so greatly appreciated, my friend! I love to create unusual imagery ... but it has to WORK, too, you know? The reader's mind needs to grasp it instantly, or you've lost them. Blessings, Bud! :o)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/28/2020 9:40:00 PM

I really like this one too, Greg. Sorry I do not see more of your poetry. Just never any time. I like how this one was patterned and ended with the short lines. The ending to this was so perfect.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/18/2020 12:35:00 AM

Thanks, Andrea, I appreciate it ... and no worries, I don't have time to give many lately, so I'm not getting many. We know that unspoken rule, don't we? Blessings, Buddy! ;o) <3

Arturo Michael

Date: 2/27/2020 5:48:00 PM

Burnt to the butt...I like the delivery...

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/18/2020 12:34:00 AM

Thank you, Arturo!