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Looming Pain

My Love, lest I grow, oh, weary of the wait, And get tangled in a web of hate, Forsaken and forgotten, My cruel Maiden, Save me from pain. Oh, do come, Quell my emotion, With sorrow I sit alone drawing me down into a dire fate, My Love, lest I grow, oh, weary of the wait!
~"An Invented Form" contest by Andrea Dietrich ~Form Suggestion: "Cascade Royal"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 2/27/2015 10:57:00 PM
Abdul, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~
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Date: 2/24/2015 12:33:00 AM
Lovely write Abdul,, well put up! Congrats on big win!
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Date: 2/23/2015 6:36:00 PM
Congratulations, Jan, very nice with a touch of alliteration to boot. Your repeating line flows like cream.
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Date: 2/23/2015 5:18:00 PM
nice smooth movement through the rigors of the form. Congrats.
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Date: 2/23/2015 4:24:00 PM
Wonderful poem for such a challenging form, Abdul! And yes, as Carrie indicates, it does sound like poetry from the masters! Congratulations on your fine win! Sandra
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Date: 2/23/2015 9:54:00 AM
This is such a classic style......love the way this sounds like poetry from the masters!! Congratulations to you!!
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Date: 2/23/2015 9:52:00 AM
A work of great genius! Congrats to you Abdul! ;-)
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Date: 2/23/2015 7:54:00 AM
Congrats Abdul!
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Date: 2/23/2015 7:36:00 AM
Great job on this new form, it was a challenge and you succeeded wonderfully with a high contest win!
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Date: 2/23/2015 1:58:00 AM
many congrats on your win with this challenging new form:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 2/23/2015 12:16:00 AM
Abdul, thanks so much for trying my new form. I think you did a very good job of it. The middle rhyme word is slightly off, but most importantly, I loved your theme and how you presented it so eloquently. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 2/14/2015 5:58:00 AM
such passion & imagery that made for a compelling read throughout, abdul...huggs
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Abdul Malik
Date: 2/16/2015 4:59:00 PM
Thanks nette, glad you liked it. Appreciate much.

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