Abdul Malik Mandani Poet Rhyme

Looming Pain

My Love, lest I grow, oh, weary of the wait,
And get tangled in a web of hate,
Forsaken and forgotten,
My cruel Maiden,
Save me from
pain.
Oh, do come,
Quell my emotion,
With sorrow I sit alone
drawing me down into a dire fate,
My Love, lest I grow, oh, weary of the wait!


~"An Invented Form" contest by Andrea Dietrich
~Form Suggestion: "Cascade Royal"

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Skat A February 27, 2015 at 10:57 PM Abdul, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 24, 2015 at 12:33 AM Lovely write Abdul,, well put up! Congrats on big win!

Reason A. Poteet February 23, 2015 at 6:36 PM Congratulations, Jan, very nice with a touch of alliteration to boot. Your repeating line flows like cream.

John Lawless February 23, 2015 at 5:18 PM nice smooth movement through the rigors of the form. Congrats.

Sandra Haight February 23, 2015 at 4:24 PM Wonderful poem for such a challenging form, Abdul! And yes, as Carrie indicates, it does sound like poetry from the masters! Congratulations on your fine win! Sandra

Carrie Richards February 23, 2015 at 9:54 AM This is such a classic style......love the way this sounds like poetry from the masters!! Congratulations to you!!

Teddy Kimathi February 23, 2015 at 9:52 AM A work of great genius! Congrats to you Abdul! ;-)

Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2015 at 7:54 AM Congrats Abdul!

Casarah Nance February 23, 2015 at 7:36 AM Great job on this new form, it was a challenge and you succeeded wonderfully with a high contest win!

Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 1:58 AM many congrats on your win with this challenging new form:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich February 23, 2015 at 12:16 AM Abdul, thanks so much for trying my new form. I think you did a very good job of it. The middle rhyme word is slightly off, but most importantly, I loved your theme and how you presented it so eloquently. Congrats on your win.

Nette Onclaud February 14, 2015 at 5:58 AM such passion & imagery that made for a compelling read throughout, abdul...huggs Abdul Malik Mandani February 16, 2015 at 4:59 PM Thanks nette, glad you liked it. Appreciate much.