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Look At Her Smile

` Ah, all I long to do is know her Ah, all I long to do is show her Look at her frowning Seeing the sadness now found in the tears in her eyes Silent her sighs Why is she waiting Here on the steps that are worn from the worry she bears Lost in her stares Life is very lonely She hasn’t much to say Life is very lonely She longs to get away Where is she looking Off to a place that is empty of something to hold No one is told What is she thinking Tossing some crumbs to the birds scattered out on the street Something to eat Life is very lonely I ask her to explain Life is very lonely She can’t get past the pain Ah, all I long to do is help her Ah, all I long to do is hold her Eleanor Rigby Gives me her hand as I lead her to someplace she knows Happiness grows Look at her smile All that she needed was someone to show her the way It’s a new day She’s no longer lonely Her heart it has been spared She’s no longer lonely She’s found someone who cared Written for the: Eleanor Rigby Who was she Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Jerry T. Curtis

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/23/2019 2:57:00 PM

congrats on a fine win in Jerry's contest. Well done.

Chris Green
Date: 10/23/2019 3:00:00 PM

Thanks Richard. It was a fun contest to write for.

Sandra Adams

Date: 10/19/2019 10:10:00 PM

Congrats on your win with this wonderful poem my friend...i think it was one of the first few of yours i read...hugs :)

Chris Green
Date: 10/21/2019 9:35:00 AM

Thank you Sandy. I think you are right and I am glad you found this one when you did. :)

Line Gauthier

Date: 10/18/2019 8:35:00 PM

Wow - a most deserving win, Chris. Superbly done.

Chris Green
Date: 10/21/2019 9:34:00 AM

Thanks so very much Line. This was fun to write.

DM Babbit

Date: 10/18/2019 1:01:00 PM

What a wonderful flow, switching from sad to happy.

Chris Green
Date: 10/18/2019 1:04:00 PM

Thanks so very much. Congrats to you as well my friend.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/21/2019 8:29:00 PM

Your lyrics fit the Beatles' song perfectly. Very nicely done! Warm wishes, Gershon

Chris Green
Date: 8/23/2019 2:48:00 PM

Thanks my friend. I thought I answered this but I guess I didn't. The site only let's me do two at a time and sometimes I forget and reply to a third one and it doesn't take.

John Hamilton

Date: 8/21/2019 10:08:00 AM

Nice write Chris, I could read it with the melody in my head, I know the Beatles had their impact on you, as well as almost all songwriters today. Hey did you hear Paul is doing a book signing in Liverpool, so great that he hasn't lost the human touch after so much success!

Chris Green
Date: 8/21/2019 10:36:00 AM

Thanks John, yes they did, a big impact. That is what made writing this poetic lyric to their melody so much fun. I did not hear that but you are right, it is nice that he hasn't lost touch with what helped get him where he is. Thanks again my friend.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/20/2019 2:19:00 PM

- A wonderful poem, Chris ... (many sad poems for this contest) ... and you made her smile :) - Good to see you back :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne -Lise :)

Chris Green
Date: 8/20/2019 2:27:00 PM

Thanks so very much Anne-Lise for always being so kind to me. I am happy you liked this one.

Sandra Adams

Date: 8/20/2019 10:07:00 AM

such a beautiful poem...one could picture her there and watch this one unfold...lovely write! :)

Chris Green
Date: 8/20/2019 10:50:00 AM

Thank you so very much Sandra. I appreciate your kindness today.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 8/20/2019 8:34:00 AM

I meant SO nice...

Chris Green
Date: 8/20/2019 8:37:00 AM

: )

Ilene Bauer

Date: 8/20/2019 8:33:00 AM

This is wonderful, Chris! Do nice to see you back here again...

Chris Green
Date: 8/20/2019 8:37:00 AM

Thank you so much Ilene.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 8/19/2019 10:44:00 PM

Wow! I was loving the musicality of this piece then boom, Elanor shows up, and suddenly the music was defined. Fantastic job! Good luck in the contest Chris, xomo

Chris Green
Date: 8/20/2019 8:36:00 AM

Thank you so very much Maureen. :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/19/2019 9:20:00 PM

Awesome! She finally found someone to care!

Chris Green
Date: 8/20/2019 8:36:00 AM

Finally... : ) Thanks so much Kim.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/19/2019 4:19:00 PM

Your such a romantic your poems always touch the soft side of me, thanks xo

Chris Green
Date: 8/19/2019 4:27:00 PM

Thank you so much Pixie Dust. I am happy my poetry touches you like that. I appreciate your kindness

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/19/2019 4:19:00 PM

This is great Chris. A sensitive, musical rhyme. I can hear it and ends with a special positive ending :)

Chris Green
Date: 8/19/2019 4:25:00 PM

Thanks so very much Heidi. I saw the contest and just couldn't resist participating because I was always a big Beatles fan. I appreciate your kindness.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/19/2019 3:49:00 PM

Wow! You certainly captured the spirit and melody of the original song, Chris! I could sing right along with your lyrics. Best wishes for success in Jerry's contest! Hugs, Carolyn

Chris Green
Date: 8/19/2019 4:24:00 PM

Thank you so very much Carolyn. Your beautiful poem inspired me. I am thrilled you liked this one.

Wendy Watson

Date: 8/19/2019 3:01:00 PM

Yes, so lovely to have your input again. How clever to set such meaningful words to the exact melody of the original, keeping the main theme of her loneliness but ending in contrast on such a positive note. I really enjoyed singing along to your lyrics,Chris.

Chris Green
Date: 8/19/2019 3:43:00 PM

Thank you so much Wendy for your nice comment and being so thoughtful and observant. :) I appreciate your kindness and am happy you sang along too.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/19/2019 3:01:00 PM

This is so good Chris. I love your positive ending, giving her someone who cares. Your rhyming and timing is superb in this piece! A big warm welcome back. I look forward to more! I hope this takes first place! xxoo : )

Chris Green
Date: 8/19/2019 3:36:00 PM

Thank you so very much Connie. I am happy you liked this one. It is always a pleasure to hear from you.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/19/2019 2:22:00 PM

Welcome back Chris long time no see, love the story you we've so well and the Impact of the repeated lines. Good luck in the contest this would make superb lyrics which could be used without reference to Eleanor rigby:-)hugs Jan xx

Chris Green
Date: 8/19/2019 3:34:00 PM

Thanks so much Jan. I saw the contest and couldn't resist. I appreciate you stopping by today.