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Lonely Schoolyard

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               Brisk wind brushes over grass and
                          sets the playground swing into motion





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for Brian's "A Couple of Lines" contest

Copyright © Carrie Richards | Year Posted 2010

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Timothy Brumley Date: 7/20/2010 5:16:00 PM I just had to come back and read this again! Excellent premise and imagery Carrie. Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/17/2010 8:30:00 PM Dear Carrie, Your poem sets a nostalgic mind in motion with your excellent imagery in this winning poem. Congratulations! Login to Reply

Timothy Brumley Date: 7/16/2010 8:50:00 PM Congrats on your big 2nd place win with this excellent couplet Carrie. Login to Reply

Destiny Orschell Date: 7/11/2010 4:48:00 PM I always loved the swings at recess when I was little. I remember it the swings where always still going when ever we had to go inside. Great poem and congrats on 2nd place. Love Destiny Login to Reply

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen Date: 7/11/2010 4:48:00 AM Congratulations on placing 2nd in Brian’s “A couple of Lines” contest with this wonderful poem. Smiles, Dane Ann Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 7/6/2010 1:52:00 PM memories of riders with wings on heels of pink ......so charming! Congrad's Login to Reply

Mike Butler Date: 7/6/2010 10:27:00 AM Congrats on the well deserved win! -Mike Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 7/6/2010 4:34:00 AM Congratulations Carrie on your win in Brian Strand's contest "A Couple Of Lines". Love, Carol Login to Reply

Rauwolfia Ra Date: 7/5/2010 10:07:00 PM 'playground swing into motion" these 2 lines say quite a lot, I really like the imagery, I can almost see the playground and the wind swerping through it. Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 7/5/2010 1:12:00 PM Lovely job Brian did in his picks. This is so well done. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/5/2010 12:51:00 PM Like a ghost story too. The lonesome swing in the wind. I relaly like this one. Congrats, Luv, Andea Login to Reply

Adeleke Adeite Date: 7/5/2010 12:35:00 PM Hey Carrie Congrats on your well deserved win in Brian’s contest. You are such a wonderful talent here. Please keep your poetry pens flowing with passion. Enjoy your win. Love, Adeleke Login to Reply

James Marshall Goff Date: 7/5/2010 10:26:00 AM volumes of imagination fill me with this great poem, Carrie! congrats! jimbo Login to Reply

Elaine George Date: 7/5/2010 8:07:00 AM Such a vivid haunting picture you have created with this sentaional 2 line couplet, dear Carrie. Congratulations on your win. Love, Lainie Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 7/4/2010 5:18:00 PM Good Show, my lady. Congratulations, agape, Moses Login to Reply

Charles Henderson Date: 7/4/2010 12:53:00 PM You surely painted a lonely picture, girl. congratulations on your tremendous win...........Charles, Login to Reply

Iolanda Scripca Date: 7/4/2010 12:41:00 PM Brisk wind of reality on a time long gone...Beautiful Criystalline, dear Carrie. Congrats, Iolanda Login to Reply

Audrey Haick Date: 7/4/2010 11:45:00 AM Exceptional imagery Carrie! As usual, a pleasure to read your work! Sweet memories this one brings to mind. Congratulations on your 2nd Place win, a well -deserved win for sure! Love, Audrey Login to Reply

Sharon Tideswell Date: 7/4/2010 10:47:00 AM Congratulations on your 2nd place win Carrie ~ Sharon :) Login to Reply

Tim Ryerson Date: 7/4/2010 10:29:00 AM Captured the picture and sounds perfectly, Carrie...I can hear the swing squeaking snd singing now...Also belated congrats on your hilarious yet insightful win in Carolyns' sheep contest - Tim Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 7/4/2010 10:27:00 AM Cpmgrats Carrie on your big win in Brian's contest with these remarkable words.. a wonderful win to enjoy on your holiday weekend.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii... AlohA.. Login to Reply

Brian Strand Date: 7/4/2010 8:40:00 AM Congrats on your success in my contest Carrie.Rgds Brian.My latest contest 'HIGH FIVES' is now open Login to Reply

Sharon Tideswell Date: 6/29/2010 1:56:00 PM Very nice couple of lines. Good luck in the contest # Sharon :) Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 6/29/2010 12:59:00 PM Very descriptive in just two short lines ...Sets my mind to seeing and experiencing a school yard during summer..Good luck in the the contest with this one that should be in the winners' circle..Fly in the coffee made me go yuck..Sara Login to Reply

Daver Austin Date: 6/27/2010 9:14:00 AM This reminds me of a visit to my old schoolyard. The wind is a very mysterious entity and I can see my favorite little girl on that swing, legs in the air. Love this little jewel. Love, daver Login to Reply

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