Lone Tree

on the edge of sloped hills i stand alone limbs outreached longing for warmth as i shiver within this cold december breath i am bare colorless and numb snapping within from the weight that hangs like icicles from branches of soulless life grounded beside me my shadow is falling more shallow in these darker days surrounding me where i struggle to flourish my boughs almost kissing the soil of twisted roots already deadened the raven has landed again to test the weight of my faithful branches only to see if i will surrender and succumb to the valley below as a lifeless figure like those before me i stand my ground colorless, naked and alone... december 22, 2019 I am a tree poetry contest Sponsored by Delilah Ventura

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Gideon Idudje

Date: 4/29/2020 5:46:00 PM

Perceptive and engagingly Captivating... Cheers

Paul Callus

Date: 4/17/2020 9:59:00 AM

You entwine personification and metaphor with an able pen, Sandra. A poem which touches the heart...despite all odds, strength is found to resist. ~ Congratulations on your top win! Hugs // paul

Michelo Mweetwa

Date: 2/5/2020 11:45:00 AM

I picked this poem randomly and i am glad I did. It felt like my own personal prayer. This poem is so, so hived up. Thanks for this great write!

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/5/2020 12:27:00 PM

Thank you so much Michelo. Glad you enjoyed this one :) hugs

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/25/2019 3:28:00 AM

This personified metaphoric write is delightful.

Sandra Adams
Date: 2/5/2020 12:27:00 PM

Thank you so much Caren :) Hugs

Chris Green

Date: 12/23/2019 7:18:00 AM

I read this three times, it was that special. Though if you were a tree my friend, you would never stand alone. Birds would flock from miles around to perch on your beautiful branches. The earth would protect your roots and keep them warm in the winter months and lovers would gather under your shade in the springtime. This was a little dark but gorgeous just the same. Best wishes in the contest.

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/23/2019 7:53:00 PM

third time is a charm, isn't that the old saying...lol.. thank you Chris for such an in depth comment to my poem...you made me smile even though i feel blah today, so thank you for that too... hugs :)

Juliet Ligon

Date: 12/22/2019 11:41:00 PM

I can sense how difficult it is to be strong in the midst of turmoil. You drew me into the life of a tree in a cold and dark season. Great take on the contest!

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/23/2019 7:50:00 PM

Thank you so very much Juliet... trees are bare now...except pines so i had to paint what i see when i look out any of the windows... hugs

John Hamilton

Date: 12/22/2019 9:58:00 PM

Excellent write Sandy you do these nature and emotional write like no one else...bravo (can you hear the standing ovation?)

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/23/2019 7:49:00 PM

Thank you John....i thought it was thunder since it was so loud...lol... thanks for such a wonderful comment... hugs :)

Jeff Connelly

Date: 12/22/2019 8:30:00 PM

You BECOME the tree Sandra. Like method acting written in words. I live this. Thank you.

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/23/2019 7:48:00 PM

Thank you so much Jeff :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/22/2019 3:39:00 PM

I like the metaphoric write, Sandy--you gave the tree emotions and feelings--and now it speaks eloquently through your poem.

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/22/2019 5:03:00 PM

Thank you so much my friend... i appreciate all the reads, and in depth comments you give my poems... Happy holidays Vijay :) hugs

Silent One

Date: 12/22/2019 2:14:00 PM

Always stand your ground! I can relate to how you feel.. great choice for the contest..

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/22/2019 5:01:00 PM

Thank you so much my friend...i know you understand, we must stand our ground... :) hugs... Happy Holidays to you Silent One... after dinner i will head over to read your newest write...

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 12/22/2019 1:36:00 PM

This is certainly a winner. I read your comment to Ann about compassion, I am the same. I love your poetry dear friend. Christmas blessings, Jennifer.

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/22/2019 4:59:00 PM

Thank you so much Jennifer... Merry Christmas to you and yours :) hugs

Na Na

Date: 12/22/2019 1:20:00 PM

Perfect observation of a tree. You slam dunked it. Best of luck in the contest.

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/22/2019 4:58:00 PM

Thank you Greg... have a wonderful evening :) hugs

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/22/2019 12:36:00 PM

Wow! I know that shaking of the tree. I recently experienced, prayed and stood my ground.

Sandra Adams
Date: 12/22/2019 4:58:00 PM

Thank you Kim...glad you stood your ground...happy holidays to you and yours :) hugs