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head empty awareness of skull like it is a texture I have placed my hand on the way you stroke marble dreaming of your gravestone eyes blink marionette style I could look for the strings should I have peripheral vision should I have peripheral vision? thoughts feel like words trapped behind unmoving lips instructions somehow bottlenecking rubbernecking at the scenes unseen my fingers tingle but words appear I wonder if I release enough will I be freed or forever tongue tied

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Mat Ignacio

Date: 12/23/2023 6:35:00 PM

a powerful write end with a bold and lingering question

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/24/2023 1:18:00 AM

Thank you for your poetic encouragement Mat, appreciated

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/23/2023 6:12:00 PM

This poem held my interest because of feelings and the ways they connect with the body. The idea of being a marionette was a possible lead for another story. I wonder.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/24/2023 1:20:00 AM

I have used looking out from the eyes of a marionette before - it just seems very symbolic of awareness within a scripted life. I think touch and feel sometimes snap us into awareness too or out of it. Thanks for sharing your thoughts and giving time to the poem. Appreciated x