Lilith

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5/19/2024 for Lilith Poetry Contest sponsored by Silent One

Lilith, Lilith, oh my dazzling dear, I feel your luminous presence near. I don't care if you jilted Adam - I want you now, and right here, madam. Your electricity excites me. Your burning, blazing fire ignites me. Time to see your shapely body move - In one swoop, I plead, your gown - remove! You make me laugh, and we have such fun That I'll ignore what they say you've done. Your flashing eyes, and your sparkling smile - All my moments, your beauty does beguile. Take all my money! I'll leave my wife! I'll give you all! I'll give you my life! For an hour of your passionate desire, I'll gladly burn in your raging fire!

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 5/22/2024 10:04:00 AM

Like a Siren luring you to your death... I really liked this David. :)

David Crandall
Date: 5/22/2024 12:00:00 PM

I'm glad you liked it, Linda!

Benjamin Bartley

Date: 5/21/2024 1:18:00 PM

I really liked the take my money and take my wife line. That was pretty funny.

David Crandall
Date: 5/21/2024 7:19:00 PM

Haha, thanks, sometimes you have to laugh :-)

Joseph May

Date: 5/20/2024 9:07:00 AM

Enchanted by her sparkling smile, as she leaves you filled with desire, Very nicely penned

David Crandall
Date: 5/20/2024 10:20:00 AM

Thanks Joseph!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 5/20/2024 5:31:00 AM

Hello David, I loved how your poem is a fiery and captivating tribute to Lilith's allure. The bold scenes and passionate expressions leave a lasting impact, drawing me into the intensity of desire and longing. Your mastery of language and emotion is awe-inspiring. Brilliantly done! - Blessings, Daniel

David Crandall
Date: 5/20/2024 7:27:00 AM

Hi Daniel, wow thanks for your comments! It was interesting to imagine and depict a new character, of who I had been unaware.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/19/2024 4:04:00 PM

You fell captive to Lilith's charms! Oh no! Nicely done for the contest! have a pleasant evening, Sara

David Crandall
Date: 5/19/2024 4:38:00 PM

How could I resist! It's all over for me! Thanks Sara!