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Life's Choice

While walking on the mountain top needing time to rest. I roll out my cot and close my eyes for a little nap. As my mind starts to drift into a dream like space there are visions of vivid colors dangling in my head. They have no real form just moving with speed like a thousand snakes. Long large snakes lick Red flares shooting Forest fire is churning With a very sharp and intense pain and a loud snap and pop my cot has just collapsed. I try to roll but on my back I lay flat. Gasping for air while sucking in dirt from the dusty floor. My lungs burn and give me a taste of an acrid like lake. I can see all the birds screeching in a terrified flight. Sky so gray and dark Moon with a smiling face Life's weight holding me down Pushing and pulling trying to get myself free, even if I can't walk on the ground I can crawl if only I could see where I'm going. This once and beautiful place has become a dark and lonely sight and 'oh' so sad. Life is short Hell is close Praise and been seen. Contest sponsored by: Broken Wings 8/4/15

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/21/2015 9:11:00 AM

Very creative way to go for the contest..I wonder about the origin of the idea like did you live through a forest fire?..Congrats on your win..Sara

Tammy Reams
Date: 8/21/2015 6:36:00 PM

Thank you for the comment Sara. No have never been in a fire it was just something that came to me in trying to write a haibun for the first time.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/21/2015 2:06:00 AM

Congrats on your wonderful win Tammy with this amazing haibun!Great concluding haiku!

Tammy Reams
Date: 8/21/2015 6:25:00 AM

Thank you Dr. Upma for the nice comment.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/21/2015 1:44:00 AM

Very intense imagery Tammy congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Tammy Reams
Date: 8/21/2015 6:25:00 AM

Thanks Jan for the comment. My first haibun.

Skat A

Date: 8/20/2015 7:31:00 PM

Tammy, Congrats on your HM win. SKAT

Tammy Reams
Date: 8/20/2015 8:33:00 PM

Thank you Skat for nice comment.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 8/18/2015 7:56:00 AM

One typo I think, first line 2nd prose "collapsed". I like the prose and haiku connections, and enjoyed the read. But I'm afraid I have had a lot of strong entries for this competition, and many that I prefer. So this piece will not be making my top 20, I will be giving it a honourable mention though, so that others can follow the link and enjoy. Thank you entering my contest, and helping to make it the success it has been.

Tammy Reams
Date: 8/18/2015 6:33:00 PM

Thank you for the comment. Typo is corrected. This is the first time I wrote Haibun and it was kinda fun. I had to read some of your poetry to get the feel for it.