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EYES DOWN !

The day begins with the usual drill. Plans in readiness, we will fulfil. Crouch under your desk and stay quite still, Keep your eyes down, use your skill. Don’t look up, this I must instil. Try to be as quiet, not a sound if you will. We practice this drill not to give you a chill, It’s so important to do this safety grill. If a shooter comes in, we know to do nil We learn this so that we will be safe until. The scene has been given a clear bill. We know we must not cry or let out a shrill. Teacher says chances of being hurt, are nil, If we do as we are told and all be very still.

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/27/2023 7:44:00 AM

Sad monorhyme Svvie - sad in that we must teach children about violent shooters. Terrific monorhyme Svvie - your rhyming is spot on! :)

Speaks Volumes
Date: 11/27/2023 12:52:00 PM

Yes its an awful state of affairs when young children have to be trained how to act when attacked. My own dear grandchildren in California were taught such a drill in their school. Thank you for your thoughtful comment Las

Anonomus Scorpio

Date: 11/26/2023 10:10:00 AM

Don't ever take monorhyme as being clumsy, you did very well with it! I love when people work this form. It has a beauty to it and is so satisfying when you really get one right. Admittedly I love the form, and write in it quite often. Funny story behind me, I didn't even realize that I wrote in it until it was pointed out to me by someone on here. A very enjoyable first read of your work! A.S.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 11/27/2023 3:29:00 AM

I completely understand what you say about not realising the rhyme form you were achieving AS. I often used to have to stop myself in conversation from speaking in rhyme and still today I quite often think in rhyme. Thank you for your encouraging comment. Its really appreciated.

Jay Narain

Date: 11/26/2023 9:45:00 AM

Nice monorhyme, GL in contest.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 11/27/2023 3:33:00 AM

Lovely comment Jay. Thank you. I just read yours and its really beautiful, but take a look at sweet Valsa's comment on your poem. I think she has some good advice. Best wishes my talented poet friend.

Mike Roberts

Date: 11/25/2023 8:29:00 PM

that's a difficult style well done.

Speaks Volumes
Date: 11/25/2023 8:55:00 PM

Its a bit clumsy, but it got the message across I think. Thanks for the comment Mike. All the best to you.