Lens of Life Premiere Contest Winner

Can blackwater lilies 
sing forth sonnets 
of daylight and 
unsung those 
cacophonous notes 
of omen, which 
rhymed with 
sombre elixir 
of spruce rivulets and 
veiled your crimson 
touch of life, 
in eons of unforgivable 
death? 

Those haunting floods 
of heinous moth-ringed 
August still carve my 
lungs with an eerie 
monsoon petrichor, 
when the sundial 
reversed its succulent 
sentimental rhymes 
and plagued meteors of
pincushion silence 
shattered along the
mangroves, fenced with 
sulfuric sunflower rays. 

I have traversed through
bioluminescent bays 
of morose coasts, 
questing for nefarious 
nimbus where violent
waves muted my 
inked inquests and 
pierced through 
translucent membranes 
of wrinkled realities. 

Planting caskets of 
kohl-carnations in 
cushioned opal flowerbeds 
and burying my 
mascara in granite
gravestones where 
rhetoric ravenous 
legacies ruptured 
every cotyledon of 
love and light, 
I bleed upon glossy
pearlescent feathers 
of each killed 
nightingale who 
sacrificed its 
versatile voice 
to save you from the 
abode's obsidian rage. 

Now these sherbet buds 
have no parental twigs, 
nor any throne 
of golden anchor, 
to protect them from 
envious nightglows 
and cold cadence of frost. 

Dear father, 
the lens of life 
is now foggy 
and opaque, 
and your 
symmetric skies 
are but a cluster of 
miniscule macabre
phrases, laced 
with miming reapers. 
Hypothesis of 
existence has 
finally feasted upon 
my morose metaphors, 
as now no 
serendipitous sun 
can replace 
your warmth. 
Every permeable 
memory is a 
misspelled melody, 
hanging in these 
twilight cobwebs 
of ivory threads,
yearning for 
the last leaf 
to finally fall. 

No mathematical 
expression 
can equate to 
your unfathomable 
absence neither 
any tangerine tangent 
can bridge the 
gap of dissected 
valleys between 
the hell and the heaven. 

Fate is yet, 
an undefined misery, 
for, I feel,
this lethal luna 
would never prevent 
its jealousy
from entwining 
in moontstruck haze
of melancholy 
and it will forever
melt in my essence 
as a traumatizing 
tremor. 

Papa,
What dialect 
will I decipher 
to my daughter 
when time is 
no longer her 
amiable fluer and 
she's able to 
connect those 
malignant dots
of destiny, 
when her eyes 
will linger through 
my soul, searching 
for an opalescent oasis, 
will she be lost 
forever in the 
silicon storms 
emerging in 
my heart's desert? 

~ "Is life nothing but an eclipsed end 
           of fervent beliefs, mocking the dead?"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023



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Date: 10/6/2024 9:00:00 AM
I'm not surprised to see how many trophy's you have next to your beautiful poems! You truly are so very talented, probably more than I can grasp with my understanding! Howbeit, I can feel the emotion streaming from every word and touching my very soul. Xo
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Date: 12/28/2023 10:51:00 PM
I remember you writing this poem and how close it is to your heart, and how it made me feel so much too reading such a heartfelt poem, an empathetic poem that depicts grief of a mother for their father, and as i know the story behind this too i cant help but tear up in awe, seeing you receive this trophy win. Congratulations, well deserved.
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Date: 12/28/2023 9:07:00 AM
Dear Hiya, I am ever enchanted by your deep, rich, impassioned poetic artistry. Soulful and soul-searching, your imagery and metaphors illuminate poignant and exquisite expressions of grief. A unique voice with a unique point of view narrates your intimate poem with the finesse of a grand poetess, and with the heart of a very appreciative daughter and granddaughter. Congratulations for your shining trophy win in Brian's contest. Warmest wishes for a happy new year filled with light, peace and inspiration.. ~Susan
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Date: 12/28/2023 5:52:00 AM
What a tremendous heartfelt write, Hiya, penned so eloquently and metaphorically as only you can ~ warmest congratulations on your trophy win!
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Date: 9/30/2023 2:38:00 PM
Dear Hiya, such deeply emotive and pristine poetry you pen. It felt like such a roller coaster ride just reading it. Excellent piece!
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Date: 9/29/2023 11:07:00 PM
Hiya, your Father must be feeling immensely proud seeing his daugter's prowess in poetry and her handling of mercurial emotions of love, longing and loss. I haven't come across any single line that is bland without passions and tedious with obsolete phrases and hackenyed images. As I repeat over and again..... You are immensely gifted. I can hear your heartbeats as you relate to the sad memories your Father's absence has left.... "Your very permeable memory is a misspelled melody making me hang in these twilight cobwebs of ivory threads, yearning for the last leaf to finally fall. "
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Date: 9/29/2023 11:33:00 AM
You write with so much metaphorical elegance... Thank you for writing for my poem and congratulations on your placement..
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Date: 9/21/2023 6:27:00 PM
wow this is so deep and so very revealing. You are a special poet. Your empathetic heart reveals the emotions you speak about. A fav for me !
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/24/2023 3:02:00 AM
Wow, thank you so much for the Fav and for such kind words dear Rose, I'm very grateful to you. This was indeed an emotional write for me.. Thank you for your beautiful support always~
Date: 9/21/2023 12:04:00 PM
Hiya, what an amazing expression of grief in "silicon storms," "lethal luna," and "dissected valleys." You are truly a poetic wordsmith of extraordinary talent. This is a masterful tribute to your grandfather and your mother. Thank you for sharing this story so close to your heart. Your love comes sailing through your words to spin a spell about me. Grateful for finding this poem. Warm blessings to you!
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Date: 9/24/2023 3:05:00 AM
Awh, thank you sooo much for your kind and precious words, this was indeed an emotional write for me and i wasn't sure if what I was writing could impact in a way that it should, but I'm so glad to read everyone's response. This poem is definitely very close to my heart. I'm beyond grateful for your wonderful support always~
Date: 9/21/2023 11:21:00 AM
This is so, so beautiful and emotional dear Hiya. So exquisitely expressed as always. Heart rendering. So many wonderful lines. The last two lines, in particular, are so powerful. Thought provoking. Amazing. Thank you for sharing. Hugs and smiles to you. Keep inspiring … :):)
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Date: 9/24/2023 2:56:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much dear beautiful Christina for reading my poem and feeling those emotions.. I truly appreciate your kind visit & beautiful words.. Your support is so heartwarming always, sending love :)
Date: 9/21/2023 8:39:00 AM
It would be difficult to imagine a more poetic tribute. Am I correct in remembering that you are pursuing related academics? "No serendipitous sun" could ever replace the warmth of a kind and benevolent father/grandfather. Inre to your last line, I for one believe in a future return to life (not to be confused with an afterlife). Many happy reunions then
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Date: 9/24/2023 2:54:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful words dear Tom, they really mean a lot to me. And yes, I have Physics and Mathematics as my main subjects and will be pursuing in technological field. Kind of abilities that got inherited from my grandfather it seems, because both my parents are doctors. And definitely, I too believe in a reunion to come in the next life!Appreciate your wonderful visit..
Date: 9/21/2023 8:01:00 AM
- Truly a soulful poem, Hiya - Not easy to put the right feelings on ...but yours are deeply heartbreaking...wonderfully written :) - hugs
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Date: 9/23/2023 7:29:00 PM
Thank you so much for your wonderful visit dear, Anne-Lise. True, it's never easy to put the right emotions, but certainly I've seen death so closely that the pain of losing a loved one is quite relatable. I'm grateful for your kind comment and lovely visit~ sending love!
Date: 9/21/2023 6:06:00 AM
Your talented pen resonates in depth of emotions, Hiya. Delivered in splendor of poetic words--feelings tug in voice of your mother. Amazing, as always.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 7:25:00 PM
Thank you so much for these kind and heartfelt words, this was definitely an emotional one to write even for me. Your comment means a lot to me and I'm beyond grateful, Regards ~
Date: 9/21/2023 4:38:00 AM
The emotions expressed in this piece are deeply rooted in the core of one's being, Hiya. This is a heartfelt and creative expression that serves as a glimmer of hope for those who have been emotionally scarred. The rhymes in this writing are not just clever but truly bring about powerful emotions. The craftsmanship of this piece is exceptional, with the author skillfully describing and incorporating mathematical wordplay that adds an extra layer of depth and intrigue.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 7:24:00 PM
Dear Sotto, thank you so much for your precious and kind and words, always.. Your comments are like a beautiful rewards for my poems.. I'm grateful for your wonderful support!
Date: 9/21/2023 4:38:00 AM
Brilliant writing. I just love this. Hope it wins with its tantalizing seams. God bless you always, Love, Gina
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 10:36:00 AM
Thank you so much dear beautiful Gina, I appreciate your kind visit and these words mean a lot to me.. I'm beyond grateful to you always! Sending love :)
Date: 9/21/2023 2:23:00 AM
A tribute to a great person from the moth of a mother, but written by the daughter who experienced tragedy in this life. Emotions that come from the heart. That's poetry for me. Blessings.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 10:32:00 AM
Thank you SO much for your precious visit and for reading my poem.. This definitely was a very emotional write for me & my heart is touched to know that you could feel the depth here, thank you..
Date: 9/21/2023 1:54:00 AM
This is so beautiful and heartfelt, you’ve really expressed so well for your mother, he surely sounds like a person that needs to be written about for many to read. I really love how you’ve described and used mathematical wordplay here too to express and how you’ve written “ fate is yet an undefined misery” i agree and it breaks my heart knowing the story too as i read this i know how this comes from a deep place. “ lens of life is now opaque and foggy” sigh! “ malignant dots of destiny” how
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 10:15:00 AM
Yes, if only I ever got the chance to meet him once, sigh, those emotions are truly aching.. My mum says that she is a true reflection of her father.. Just like how he was.. And true, she is the strongest woman I have ever known. Thank you SO much for reading this and feeling the depth here, I'm very grateful for your ethereal support. You're the sweetest soul, sending you do much love, dear Ink~
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Date: 9/21/2023 1:56:00 AM
You’ve phrased your thoughts here is so profound and poignant and really poetic. The metaphors and depth of your lines truly is soul hitting. Blessed is your mom to have a daughter like you, so sweet! May your grandfathers soul rest in peace and i wish your strong mother strength. Never easy, grief lingers always. Goodluck for the contest
Date: 9/21/2023 1:44:00 AM
Description- I've written this poem for my late maternal grandfather, in the voice of my mother, to express the emotions of a daughter who lost her father in a tragic incident at a very young age. I hope that his soul is in peace and that he has his blessings with us~ ( He was a great physics researcher and mathematician).
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