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Lens of Life Premiere Contest Winner

Can blackwater lilies sing forth sonnets of daylight and unsung those cacophonous notes of omen, which rhymed with sombre elixir of spruce rivulets and veiled your crimson touch of life, in eons of unforgivable death? Those haunting floods of heinous moth-ringed August still carve my lungs with an eerie monsoon petrichor, when the sundial reversed its succulent sentimental rhymes and plagued meteors of pincushion silence shattered along the mangroves, fenced with sulfuric sunflower rays. I have traversed through bioluminescent bays of morose coasts, questing for nefarious nimbus where violent waves muted my inked inquests and pierced through translucent membranes of wrinkled realities. Planting caskets of kohl-carnations in cushioned opal flowerbeds and burying my mascara in granite gravestones where rhetoric ravenous legacies ruptured every cotyledon of love and light, I bleed upon glossy pearlescent feathers of each killed nightingale who sacrificed its versatile voice to save you from the abode's obsidian rage. Now these sherbet buds have no parental twigs, nor any throne of golden anchor, to protect them from envious nightglows and cold cadence of frost. Dear father, the lens of life is now foggy and opaque, and your symmetric skies are but a cluster of miniscule macabre phrases, laced with miming reapers. Hypothesis of existence has finally feasted upon my morose metaphors, as now no serendipitous sun can replace your warmth. Every permeable memory is a misspelled melody, hanging in these twilight cobwebs of ivory threads, yearning for the last leaf to finally fall. No mathematical expression can equate to your unfathomable absence neither any tangerine tangent can bridge the gap of dissected valleys between the hell and the heaven. Fate is yet, an undefined misery, for, I feel, this lethal luna would never prevent its jealousy from entwining in moontstruck haze of melancholy and it will forever melt in my essence as a traumatizing tremor. Papa, What dialect will I decipher to my daughter when time is no longer her amiable fluer and she's able to connect those malignant dots of destiny, when her eyes will linger through my soul, searching for an opalescent oasis, will she be lost forever in the silicon storms emerging in my heart's desert? ~ "Is life nothing but an eclipsed end of fervent beliefs, mocking the dead?"

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Date: 12/28/2023 10:51:00 PM
I remember you writing this poem and how close it is to your heart, and how it made me feel so much too reading such a heartfelt poem, an empathetic poem that depicts grief of a mother for their father, and as i know the story behind this too i cant help but tear up in awe, seeing you receive this trophy win. Congratulations, well deserved.
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Date: 12/28/2023 9:07:00 AM
Dear Hiya, I am ever enchanted by your deep, rich, impassioned poetic artistry. Soulful and soul-searching, your imagery and metaphors illuminate poignant and exquisite expressions of grief. A unique voice with a unique point of view narrates your intimate poem with the finesse of a grand poetess, and with the heart of a very appreciative daughter and granddaughter. Congratulations for your shining trophy win in Brian's contest. Warmest wishes for a happy new year filled with light, peace and inspiration.. ~Susan
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Date: 12/28/2023 5:52:00 AM
What a tremendous heartfelt write, Hiya, penned so eloquently and metaphorically as only you can ~ warmest congratulations on your trophy win!
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Date: 9/30/2023 2:38:00 PM
Dear Hiya, such deeply emotive and pristine poetry you pen. It felt like such a roller coaster ride just reading it. Excellent piece!
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Date: 9/29/2023 11:07:00 PM
Hiya, your Father must be feeling immensely proud seeing his daugter's prowess in poetry and her handling of mercurial emotions of love, longing and loss. I haven't come across any single line that is bland without passions and tedious with obsolete phrases and hackenyed images. As I repeat over and again..... You are immensely gifted. I can hear your heartbeats as you relate to the sad memories your Father's absence has left.... "Your very permeable memory is a misspelled melody making me hang in these twilight cobwebs of ivory threads, yearning for the last leaf to finally fall. "
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Date: 9/29/2023 11:33:00 AM
You write with so much metaphorical elegance... Thank you for writing for my poem and congratulations on your placement..
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Date: 9/21/2023 6:27:00 PM
wow this is so deep and so very revealing. You are a special poet. Your empathetic heart reveals the emotions you speak about. A fav for me !
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/24/2023 3:02:00 AM
Wow, thank you so much for the Fav and for such kind words dear Rose, I'm very grateful to you. This was indeed an emotional write for me.. Thank you for your beautiful support always~
Date: 9/21/2023 12:58:00 PM
What a powerful tribute to both your mom and grandfather. I can identify with the grief woven through the tapestry of your words. A beautiful poem!
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/24/2023 3:00:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much for your beautiful words dear Sara, I tried to give an expression of words to those aching emotions..Your kind visit is truly appreciated and I'm so grateful to you!
Date: 9/21/2023 12:04:00 PM
Hiya, what an amazing expression of grief in "silicon storms," "lethal luna," and "dissected valleys." You are truly a poetic wordsmith of extraordinary talent. This is a masterful tribute to your grandfather and your mother. Thank you for sharing this story so close to your heart. Your love comes sailing through your words to spin a spell about me. Grateful for finding this poem. Warm blessings to you!
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Date: 9/24/2023 3:05:00 AM
Awh, thank you sooo much for your kind and precious words, this was indeed an emotional write for me and i wasn't sure if what I was writing could impact in a way that it should, but I'm so glad to read everyone's response. This poem is definitely very close to my heart. I'm beyond grateful for your wonderful support always~
Date: 9/21/2023 11:21:00 AM
This is so, so beautiful and emotional dear Hiya. So exquisitely expressed as always. Heart rendering. So many wonderful lines. The last two lines, in particular, are so powerful. Thought provoking. Amazing. Thank you for sharing. Hugs and smiles to you. Keep inspiring … :):)
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Date: 9/24/2023 2:56:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much dear beautiful Christina for reading my poem and feeling those emotions.. I truly appreciate your kind visit & beautiful words.. Your support is so heartwarming always, sending love :)
Date: 9/21/2023 8:39:00 AM
It would be difficult to imagine a more poetic tribute. Am I correct in remembering that you are pursuing related academics? "No serendipitous sun" could ever replace the warmth of a kind and benevolent father/grandfather. Inre to your last line, I for one believe in a future return to life (not to be confused with an afterlife). Many happy reunions then
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Date: 9/24/2023 2:54:00 AM
Awwn, thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful words dear Tom, they really mean a lot to me. And yes, I have Physics and Mathematics as my main subjects and will be pursuing in technological field. Kind of abilities that got inherited from my grandfather it seems, because both my parents are doctors. And definitely, I too believe in a reunion to come in the next life!Appreciate your wonderful visit..
Date: 9/21/2023 8:01:00 AM
- Truly a soulful poem, Hiya - Not easy to put the right feelings on ...but yours are deeply heartbreaking...wonderfully written :) - hugs
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 7:29:00 PM
Thank you so much for your wonderful visit dear, Anne-Lise. True, it's never easy to put the right emotions, but certainly I've seen death so closely that the pain of losing a loved one is quite relatable. I'm grateful for your kind comment and lovely visit~ sending love!
Date: 9/21/2023 6:06:00 AM
Your talented pen resonates in depth of emotions, Hiya. Delivered in splendor of poetic words--feelings tug in voice of your mother. Amazing, as always.
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Date: 9/23/2023 7:25:00 PM
Thank you so much for these kind and heartfelt words, this was definitely an emotional one to write even for me. Your comment means a lot to me and I'm beyond grateful, Regards ~
Date: 9/21/2023 4:38:00 AM
The emotions expressed in this piece are deeply rooted in the core of one's being, Hiya. This is a heartfelt and creative expression that serves as a glimmer of hope for those who have been emotionally scarred. The rhymes in this writing are not just clever but truly bring about powerful emotions. The craftsmanship of this piece is exceptional, with the author skillfully describing and incorporating mathematical wordplay that adds an extra layer of depth and intrigue.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 7:24:00 PM
Dear Sotto, thank you so much for your precious and kind and words, always.. Your comments are like a beautiful rewards for my poems.. I'm grateful for your wonderful support!
Date: 9/21/2023 4:38:00 AM
Brilliant writing. I just love this. Hope it wins with its tantalizing seams. God bless you always, Love, Gina
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 10:36:00 AM
Thank you so much dear beautiful Gina, I appreciate your kind visit and these words mean a lot to me.. I'm beyond grateful to you always! Sending love :)
Date: 9/21/2023 2:23:00 AM
A tribute to a great person from the moth of a mother, but written by the daughter who experienced tragedy in this life. Emotions that come from the heart. That's poetry for me. Blessings.
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 10:32:00 AM
Thank you SO much for your precious visit and for reading my poem.. This definitely was a very emotional write for me & my heart is touched to know that you could feel the depth here, thank you..
Date: 9/21/2023 1:54:00 AM
This is so beautiful and heartfelt, you’ve really expressed so well for your mother, he surely sounds like a person that needs to be written about for many to read. I really love how you’ve described and used mathematical wordplay here too to express and how you’ve written “ fate is yet an undefined misery” i agree and it breaks my heart knowing the story too as i read this i know how this comes from a deep place. “ lens of life is now opaque and foggy” sigh! “ malignant dots of destiny” how
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 9/23/2023 10:15:00 AM
Yes, if only I ever got the chance to meet him once, sigh, those emotions are truly aching.. My mum says that she is a true reflection of her father.. Just like how he was.. And true, she is the strongest woman I have ever known. Thank you SO much for reading this and feeling the depth here, I'm very grateful for your ethereal support. You're the sweetest soul, sending you do much love, dear Ink~
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Date: 9/21/2023 1:56:00 AM
You’ve phrased your thoughts here is so profound and poignant and really poetic. The metaphors and depth of your lines truly is soul hitting. Blessed is your mom to have a daughter like you, so sweet! May your grandfathers soul rest in peace and i wish your strong mother strength. Never easy, grief lingers always. Goodluck for the contest
Date: 9/21/2023 1:44:00 AM
Description- I've written this poem for my late maternal grandfather, in the voice of my mother, to express the emotions of a daughter who lost her father in a tragic incident at a very young age. I hope that his soul is in peace and that he has his blessings with us~ ( He was a great physics researcher and mathematician).
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