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March. 23. 2024
Legend Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Silent One
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As one grows old, when evening approaches, memories too lengthen like shadows. Now I remember more often my parents wondering how much sweat and toil they had shed to make their children comfortable, how much love they lavished and what sacrifices they endured. A snapshot of my father who was a teacher by profession but more of an artist at heart.
Like a warm breath of air My Dad hovers in my memory No Superman in others' eyes. A meek soul, but for me a true legend. He was a jack of all trades. He epitomized love and gentleness. Hard-working and committed to his family, He was not one to squander his time. He toiled day in and out To feed those whom he loved and sired What was he? A teacher, a farmer, or an artist? I cannot say precisely... All I can say; He was each of these, Rolled into one. I don’t think there was anyone like him around. He was my English teacher at school, And how proud I am of all that he taught me. On holidays I saw him, Shut in the loft with a brush in hand. His fingers moved over the canvas The steaming tea by his side Untouched and going cold as ice. Unmindful of everything around, He sat by the easel in the attic Focused only on the strokes that fell. When a distinct image shoots out, As the moon from behind clouds, A wave of satisfaction would gleam Across his face, His frantic nerves at once hushed, Bearing the look of one, Who, in an instant, had conquered kingdoms! He would view it from different angles. Never would seek anyone’s opinion, But gloating if he saw, Our admiring eyes fell on it. He was an avid reader too And a skilled photographer The black and white photos He caught in his camera still adorns our walls Being artistically inclined, He lived more in the world of art. But gradually things changed. To his fright, he found his hands shaky And the lines on the canvas, Going tremulous and disjointed. Couldn’t hold a brush! The zealous man grew numb, As the curtain of years fell on him! On diagnosis of Parkinson’s disease His world abruptly lost its sheen. He saw the disease weeding Its way into his life Suddenly, grown old, He lost interest in everything. We saw him sitting in his armchair So immobile, for hours on end His eyes stretched to a far horizon We displayed before him, Paintings once born of his imagination, To see if his world would brighten, And it worked! Recently, in one of my dreams, I saw him sitting at the foot of Michael Angelo, To learn the art, he couldn’t perfect In his lifetime!

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Date: 4/11/2024 10:05:00 AM
Oh my dear friend I am so sorry about your father - I can relate one hundred percent with your poem. From being the chairman of a company that was on the stock exchange my father got bronchial caner, that went into remission for 15 months then reared its ugly head again and had metastasized. He broke our hearts. From weighing 95 kilos he went down to 48 kilos, we weighed him 3 days before he died. Hugs and blessings Jenifer.
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Date: 4/10/2024 4:25:00 AM
Hey Valsa, your poem is a heartfelt tribute to the enduring love, strength, and resilience of a father whose presence continues to inspire and uplift even in the face of adversity. Through its vivid imagery and tender reflection, the poem celebrates the timeless bond between parent and child and the enduring power of artistic expression to transcend life's challenges. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 3/26/2024 1:42:00 AM
- Parkinson's disease a cruel fate ... sad to see loved ones suffer - Lovely written, Valsa :) - Happy Easter :) - hugs
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Date: 3/25/2024 4:35:00 PM
wonderful hommage to this original father, who teach you so many things, i thinsk he was an artist and a man who really care about others, thanks for the very touching and elegant poem, a rare moment of poetry
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Date: 3/25/2024 9:58:00 AM
Wonderful poem You truly have a kind heart. You drew a portrait of your father that is a tribute of high quality. Hugs.
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Date: 3/25/2024 9:20:00 AM
Dear Valsa, What a beautiful and touching tribute to your father. It perfectly captures how memories deepen with age, especially the appreciation for parents' sacrifices. I loved how you created a portrait of him—a "meek soul" who was a jack-of-all-trades, an artist at heart, and, most importantly, a loving and hardworking family man. The details about his artistic passion in the attic are particularly evocative – the steaming tea going cold, the focused strokes, the wave of satisfaction on his face. The ending with him learning from Michaelangelo in your dream is hopeful and a beautiful testament to the enduring power of his artistic spirit. Thank you for sharing such a personal and moving poem! - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 3/25/2024 7:22:00 AM
Beautiful tribute, what a blessing to read my dear friend, love how he grabbed life and seeked so many joys in life, what Love, and treasures he instilled within you to be your best at many things in this life. : ) to stand out from among the crowd, to paint your own canvas of beauty in this life : )
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Date: 3/25/2024 2:11:00 AM
Oh! This really comes from your heart, Valsa, such emotions, Wonderful tribute to your dad:)
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Date: 3/24/2024 7:55:00 AM
I'm sure he is proud of you. With you, he'll live forever. Lovely piece to your dad. Our children would get to talk or write about us too and the impact we made in their lives. "We displayed before him, paintings once born of his imagination, to see if his world would brighten, and it worked!" I'm glad to know his world brightened at the sight of his creation. I could only imagine the love from a father, I'm happy you got that.
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Date: 3/23/2024 2:24:00 PM
a wonderful tribute to your dad! You captured his essence quite beautifully, especially that artistic side of him. I especially liked "A wave of satisfaction would gleam across his face. I can only imagine how devastating Parkinson's was on his creative spirit. What a lovely dream of him sitting next to Michealangelo. Magnificent poetic work of art, Valsa. Must've been hard for you to endure his illness overtake him. Have a splendid evening, Sara
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Date: 3/23/2024 12:30:00 PM
Dear valsa, this made me tear up, so sincere, so sweet and so touching, how a daughter sees their father, as their superman, legend, worth writing about, how soulful is this, and i felt every word, from the very first line, the way your lines flow too, is so seamless and heartfelt, i can feel the emotions too flowing throughout, i think silent one will appreciate this take on the prompt, and youv delivered it very well, i especially loved the last lines, thats just,, so emotive, what a beautiful tribute this is. Really! I love it! A fave it is for me.
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Date: 3/23/2024 12:24:00 PM
Great tribute to your father! Love the dream at the end. Nice that he was cheered by his art. God bless! Thanks for sharing a bit of yourself with us! Hugs
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Date: 3/23/2024 9:32:00 AM
"He sat by the easel in the attic Focused only on the strokes that fell." Just a perfect summery, of the mystery and duty of life, searching...doing...often without knowing...trusting in something "Right" -- not always within our capacity to entirely understand~ yet driven divinely toward. "Recently, in one of my dreams, I saw him sitting at the foot of Michael Angelo, To learn the art, he couldn’t perfect In his lifetime!" -- as soon as I dry my eyes, you get a Big FAV!
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Date: 3/23/2024 4:14:00 AM
A beautiful tribute to your teacher Valsa, it must be so frustrating when ill health strikes robbing you of the ability to do every day things, I still shudder when I remember what my surgeon told me if I didn't have corrective surgery, that I could lose the use of my legs and end up in a wheelchair. Enjoy your weekend. Tom
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Date: 3/23/2024 1:34:00 AM
It is such a shame when people are ill. A lovely tribute you have written.
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